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rhymed haiku

humble bumble bee
brings pollen from apple tree
to make his honey

he feeds his loved queen
to protect her he gets mean
his stings aren’t funny

a hive is his home
he fills it with honeycomb
for love not money



For Carol Brown's "What's the Buzz" contest

Carol gave me a no. 1

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011




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Date: 3/11/2011 7:45:00 AM
Amazing haiku here Joyce!Congrats on your 1st place win!--kashinath
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Date: 3/10/2011 3:47:00 PM
Congratulations on your win..Sara
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Date: 3/10/2011 10:08:00 AM
A pleasure dear one to see you again at the top Joyce. Congratulations on your worthy first place win. Agape, Moses
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Date: 3/10/2011 9:59:00 AM
Seriously top notch Joyce, congratulations on your awesome win, hope your server problems are sorted now ;) love Wilma
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Date: 3/10/2011 9:10:00 AM
So delighted to see your poem nabbing a first-place win, Joyce. Well deserved! Congratulations. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 3/10/2011 8:48:00 AM
Sensational Nature Haiku, Joyce. Top-notch. Many congrat's on your BIG WIN. Lainie
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Date: 3/10/2011 6:05:00 AM
Congratulations on the win in my contest Joyce. Thank you for supporting my contest and my decision to run my contest my way. Love, Carol
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Date: 3/10/2011 12:02:00 AM
Yes it is love on the bee's side but money for humans. Lovely. many congrats dear friend.
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Date: 3/9/2011 8:24:00 PM
now thats fun joyce!congrats
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Date: 3/9/2011 7:53:00 PM
Congrats on your big win..dont you just love the little bees....BG
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Date: 3/9/2011 4:49:00 PM
for love not money ...cool poem Joyce.. tying it all in and rhyming to boot. nniiicce! Congrats to you and thanks for your comment. Yes it is really a beautiful sight.. wish I could share it with all.
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Date: 3/9/2011 4:30:00 PM
Dear " MOM ", Congratulations on YOUR well deserved No. 1 Win in Carol Brown's "Contest" "What's the Buzz"a Find Buzzing POEM Enjoy YOUR Magnificent Honor LOVE ALWAYS, YOUR Liege...Harry
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Date: 3/9/2011 3:35:00 PM
Love the last line....so cute!! :) Congratulations on your number 1 !!
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Date: 3/9/2011 2:44:00 PM
;) LOL the end word of each verse rhyming also IS very clever!!! Congrad's Light & Love
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Date: 3/9/2011 2:28:00 PM
i love the whole piece, joyce!! and having multiple placements for 1st pllace is soo interesting ... CONGRATS!! :) huggs, nette
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Date: 3/9/2011 2:15:00 PM
Congrats Joyce on your first place win in Carol's contest with this thrilling and exhilarating entry my friend.. most well deserved win my friend..enjoy..luv..
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Date: 3/9/2011 1:51:00 PM
SWEET as honey, sweetie! Congrats on your well deserved win!
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Date: 3/9/2011 1:44:00 PM
Congratulations on the first place win in the contest of Carol, Joyce
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Date: 3/1/2011 10:07:00 AM
Dear Joyce, I saw you comment in my contest blog. The only rule I changed, was that poets don't have to duplicate the date of post in the main body of their poem....this was a blockhead idea of mine. But, aside from this, none of my rules actually changed. I simply edited my blog to help give some insight into the different ways to use allitiration within haiku. There are several forms of alliteration, but I personally find consonant and assonant alliteration to difficult to use in haiku~Chris
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Date: 2/28/2011 10:04:00 PM
"amazing" and wonderful, so creative, I love it~~
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Date: 2/28/2011 9:22:00 PM
smile -- i was just viewing a few paintings in verse and came upon this beautiful canvas then started to continue on but, its is sooo very lovely that i had to return and com its honeycombs sweetness ~ i love the duel image i find paralleling nature and life; love and devotion ~ "A Fave In, 'Brilliant & Beautiful'" ~ love, Always, christopher ~
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Date: 2/28/2011 9:05:00 PM
this is sweet and why not, it's all about the honey!! Love that last one with the honeycomb, Joyce. I just know this is going to do super well.
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Date: 2/28/2011 8:41:00 PM
Very nice rhyme scheme, Joyce, and I love the way you wrote about bees for "What's the Buzz." You had me smiling all the way through. Really like the internal rhyme in the "humble bumble" bee, too. Wishing you success, Joyce! Can't wait to get home Wednesday. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 2/28/2011 7:54:00 PM
Each time I see "What's the Buzz", the Webber-Rice musical "Jesus Christ Superstar" comes to my mind. These three haiku should be admired by Carol.
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