Premiere Contest WinnerReverberations

Reverberations

Moist, heavy air settled upon my skin
tauntingly teasing undulating hair.
Reaching out I clutch at the mocking wind
as its fading coolness flees into cloud

my tongue tasting the torment of the air
inhaling brimstone scented vibration
roiling within a billowing terror
striking in a blinding flash of fury

trembling as reverberations thunder
through the cornerstones of my DNA
heart racing to escape a dormant fear
the percussive aftermath of lightning’s arc.

Stillness becalmed on hope’s sporadic breath
exhaled within the darkness of a cloud.


©2/14/2018

submitted to – Describe a thunder storm without the sense of sound – Poetry Contest

sponsor – Brenda Chiri
Copyright © | Year Posted 2018

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Pigeon Tart Avatar
March 5, 2018 at 8:06 AM
Back with CONGRATULATIONS! I knew it was wonderful :) xomo!
Marcum Wong Avatar
March 5, 2018 at 3:58 AM
A wonderful trophy for your efforts with this excellent piece John. Congratulations! : )
Roberts Avatar
March 4, 2018 at 3:43 PM
ew la la well deserved Congrats
Medders Tobechi Avatar
March 4, 2018 at 2:16 PM
Two gold trophies in one week. Wonderful and many congratulations to you. Love the blank verse form you have used in this piece.
Roper Avatar
March 3, 2018 at 10:11 PM
Congratulations on your win.. wonderful imagery made me feel every line...
Richards Avatar
March 3, 2018 at 7:34 PM
Yes........number 1 in the contest! Well deserved John !! Great job using all the other senses without the sound 'effects' !
Haight Avatar
March 3, 2018 at 6:49 PM
Yes, John, I agree with the others below that your amazing poem included all the senses but sound and how well your imagery painted the thunderstorm. Congrats on your well-deserved Trophy win. Sandra
Poteet Avatar
March 3, 2018 at 6:07 PM
Congratulations, John, well-done with your use of the other senses sans sound. I enjoyed the heart racing/dormant fear line in particular.
Gauthier Avatar
March 3, 2018 at 6:06 PM
Beautiful poem. Congrats on your well deserved top win, John.
Smith Avatar
February 16, 2018 at 1:15 PM
Brilliant description John, most assuredly will place high...
Leiser Avatar
February 15, 2018 at 9:13 PM
Masterfully penned with such elegant imagery, John! Should do very well in the contest. A treat to read! :)
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February 15, 2018 at 1:02 PM
Surely this is the winner!! Brilliant! ~Judy
Pigeon Tart Avatar
February 15, 2018 at 9:29 AM
This is... w o n d e r f u l. My best to you in the contest! xomo :)
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