Retention Pond

If displaced, found nowhere, but in water of the retention pond, no longer in V-formation, nowhere in the bluest sky, however, beneath and at the behest of angels, ruled by God, it is my greenest eyes that you swim in, as I exit the highway. This exit didn’t exist when Mom was alive, nor the quick stop, QT, that I pass by, so close to my dad’s house. On a cul-de-sac, road’s end, I pull into his short, straight driveway, push open the door, unlocked. I quick-tell my story of the seized geese, it was only mine to tell, of how I saw their takeoff as if they were planes leaving the lonely spot, their brief stay with only my mind and heart to excite; somewhere lifting into the gray, blue day prodded on by a host of angels. Dad doesn’t recall the retention pond; is it nowhere but in my imagination; oh no, it is so real, beyond nowhere, somewhere where his eyes can’t see, for Dad drives straight to the liquor store, prepared to see olives in his martini; but he’s happy to see geese fly out my retentive mouth.
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Hind Avatar
February 6, 2025 at 8:00 PM
The world that exists is better because of you, dear Kim. Hugs - btw, this is amazing and going into my favs, definitively, of course! How could it not???? :)
Rodrigues Avatar
February 7, 2025 at 3:47 AM
How could I not appreciate you, Paige! You always encourage me! Hugs :)
Puddifoot Avatar
February 5, 2025 at 6:41 AM
i always enjoy reading your unique poetry, especially your free verse, and i thoroughly enjoyed this one :)
Rodrigues Avatar
February 7, 2025 at 3:47 AM
Thank you, Charlotte! :)
Greenhough Avatar
February 3, 2025 at 7:12 PM
The ending lines were very gentle. It is sad when a parent grows old. You are a blessing to keep your father connected. I enjoy this read.
Rodrigues Avatar
February 4, 2025 at 6:44 AM
Thank you, Hilda, and for your kind words.
Crandall Avatar
February 2, 2025 at 3:25 PM
You sure have a unique voice, a fresh and special way of putting things, and relating your experiences. I went to a restaurant on a lake (or pond) shore and saw a bunch of migrating Canadian geese - breathtaking.
Rodrigues Avatar
February 4, 2025 at 6:45 AM
Our eyes are drawn to such lovely sights. Thank you, David, for your sweet words.
Wolf Avatar
February 1, 2025 at 9:14 PM
Love this imaginative write, Kim. ~ Gershon
Rodrigues Avatar
February 2, 2025 at 4:55 AM
Thank you, Gershon! A true story, in fact :) Hugs
Singh Avatar
February 1, 2025 at 7:55 PM
The pond serving as metaphorical container of transient memories,unacknowledged experiences,emotional depth that may be overlooked.....very well done.
Rodrigues Avatar
February 2, 2025 at 4:55 AM
Thank you so much for your critique! You see my heart :)
Tor Avatar
February 1, 2025 at 3:57 PM
Kim this was so heartfelt. Brought out a sensitivity to my heart. Thank you for sharing such a personal piece and I want to comfort you with a sincere hug. God bless you...
Rodrigues Avatar
February 1, 2025 at 6:53 PM
Thank you, Mike! God bless you too!
DiMino Avatar
February 1, 2025 at 1:14 PM
Christ could do no miracles in His home town -- I am still a nobody to my family. Just the way it is. Love your poem.
Rodrigues Avatar
February 1, 2025 at 6:54 PM
I am so sorry, Joe! You are a somebody to us. Hugs and God bless you.
Rolland Avatar
February 1, 2025 at 8:38 AM
this retention pond has a true story, i love very much, the thoughts from your mom and dad, which create real emotion in the poem, enjoyed
Rodrigues Avatar
February 1, 2025 at 10:37 AM
Thank you, dear friend!
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