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Retention Pond

If displaced, found nowhere, but in water of the retention pond, no longer in V-formation, nowhere in the bluest sky, however, beneath and at the behest of angels, ruled by God, it is my greenest eyes that you swim in, as I exit the highway. This exit didn’t exist when Mom was alive, nor the quick stop, QT, that I pass by, so close to my dad’s house. On a cul-de-sac, road’s end, I pull into his short, straight driveway, push open the door, unlocked. I quick-tell my story of the seized geese, it was only mine to tell, of how I saw their takeoff as if they were planes leaving the lonely spot, their brief stay with only my mind and heart to excite; somewhere lifting into the gray, blue day prodded on by a host of angels. Dad doesn’t recall the retention pond; is it nowhere but in my imagination; oh no, it is so real, beyond nowhere, somewhere where his eyes can’t see, for Dad drives straight to the liquor store, prepared to see olives in his martini; but he’s happy to see geese fly out my retentive mouth.

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Date: 2/6/2025 8:00:00 PM
The world that exists is better because of you, dear Kim. Hugs - btw, this is amazing and going into my favs, definitively, of course! How could it not???? :)
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 2/7/2025 3:47:00 AM
How could I not appreciate you, Paige! You always encourage me! Hugs :)
Date: 2/5/2025 6:41:00 AM
i always enjoy reading your unique poetry, especially your free verse, and i thoroughly enjoyed this one :)
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 2/7/2025 3:47:00 AM
Thank you, Charlotte! :)
Date: 2/3/2025 7:12:00 PM
The ending lines were very gentle. It is sad when a parent grows old. You are a blessing to keep your father connected. I enjoy this read.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 2/4/2025 6:44:00 AM
Thank you, Hilda, and for your kind words.
Date: 2/2/2025 3:25:00 PM
You sure have a unique voice, a fresh and special way of putting things, and relating your experiences. I went to a restaurant on a lake (or pond) shore and saw a bunch of migrating Canadian geese - breathtaking.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 2/4/2025 6:45:00 AM
Our eyes are drawn to such lovely sights. Thank you, David, for your sweet words.
Date: 2/1/2025 9:14:00 PM
Love this imaginative write, Kim. ~ Gershon
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 2/2/2025 4:55:00 AM
Thank you, Gershon! A true story, in fact :) Hugs
Date: 2/1/2025 7:55:00 PM
The pond serving as metaphorical container of transient memories,unacknowledged experiences,emotional depth that may be overlooked.....very well done.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 2/2/2025 4:55:00 AM
Thank you so much for your critique! You see my heart :)
Date: 2/1/2025 3:57:00 PM
Kim this was so heartfelt. Brought out a sensitivity to my heart. Thank you for sharing such a personal piece and I want to comfort you with a sincere hug. God bless you...
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 2/1/2025 6:53:00 PM
Thank you, Mike! God bless you too!
Date: 2/1/2025 1:14:00 PM
Christ could do no miracles in His home town -- I am still a nobody to my family. Just the way it is. Love your poem.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 2/1/2025 6:54:00 PM
I am so sorry, Joe! You are a somebody to us. Hugs and God bless you.
Date: 2/1/2025 8:38:00 AM
this retention pond has a true story, i love very much, the thoughts from your mom and dad, which create real emotion in the poem, enjoyed
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 2/1/2025 10:37:00 AM
Thank you, dear friend!

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