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Rejected Love

I long for passion mixed with comforts sort, awaiting warm welcome from this delight, I count with words of romance this effort, and hope to see a love that shines so bright, yet war intrudes and I must leave to fight, my heart is slashed,rebuffed and left to rot, I toil and try to rinse off dusty thought, but meet a brick wall lined with hatred`s thrill, to keep our love in progress this I fought, for war has filled my hands and head with steel. Meter Form:Iambic pentameter

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012




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Date: 7/1/2013 10:06:00 PM
OLUSEGUN, this is a nice winning poem in PD's contest. <3 SKAT <3
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Date: 6/26/2013 4:57:00 PM
Olusegun , CONGRATULATIONS~ and thank you for enjoying my contest...I had much fun in closing my contest called ... ""A week into my poem""- Take care and enjoy my blog if you like... have yourself a lovely day.... LINDA
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Date: 2/7/2012 8:13:00 AM
Congratulations to you on your win in Debbie Guzzi 's "Change for the Meter" contest Olusegun. Love, Carol
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Date: 2/6/2012 7:46:00 AM
Congrats Olusegun on your big win in the contest.
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Date: 2/6/2012 12:50:00 AM
I have never tried to write a dizain before but you sure seem to write it well, Olusegun! And the topic you've written here is also so heartfelt-- super congrats on your win! :D
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Date: 2/5/2012 5:38:00 PM
You see all your effort payed off and you now have a new tool in your poetry tool box! May I be proud of you Aro? Congrad's Light & Love
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Date: 2/5/2012 11:33:00 AM
Congratulations on your powerful write and finish in the contest. Best, Jon
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Date: 2/5/2012 11:31:00 AM
Like silk or sweet honey!! Flows so sweet..the topic is also very powerful and the words are so masculine! Congrats on your iambic pentameter doing so well!! Hey, Happy Heart's Day early if I don't get to send them to ya later. All the best to your family, O. Gwendolen
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Date: 2/5/2012 10:43:00 AM
This is a new form to me. You did it beautifully and kept your meter throughout. Lcongratulations. Love, Joyce
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Date: 2/5/2012 10:31:00 AM
Olusegun congrats on your fine win..David
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Date: 2/5/2012 10:07:00 AM
Congratulations Olusequn enjoyed your musings, in this winner..)
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Date: 2/5/2012 9:20:00 AM
Congratulations x
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Date: 2/2/2012 7:25:00 AM
First let me congradulate you on actually understanding the definition of Iambic & pentameter HUZZAH! you know it took me years to understand they were separate things! You can have pentameter of ANY meter not just iambic [I can be a slow learner!] Line 1 is going off meter at the word [TRUE COMfort] if you flipped those 2 words line one would be perfect iambic meter [I know it would affect the end rhyme pattern] SOUP Mail for more hon Light & Love
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