Refinement of My Vision

refinement of my vision —
leaning oak, in midst of
evergreen forest.
though held captive,
captivated by
a simple grace.

8/19/2020
Copyright © | Year Posted 2020

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Wolf Avatar
August 20, 2020 at 5:05 PM
I like that 'captive, captivated...' sequence. Works for me in at least a couple of ways. How graceful the stately oak! Superb, Kim! Forestry and Fantasy, Gershon
Rodrigues Avatar
August 20, 2020 at 6:45 PM
Thank you, dear friend!
Krutsinger Avatar
August 20, 2020 at 4:01 PM
A single grace is often enough.
Rodrigues Avatar
August 20, 2020 at 6:45 PM
Yes!
Watt Avatar
August 19, 2020 at 10:14 AM
This is really nice! I love the metaphor of the leaning oak in the midst of all the evergreens. Nice contrast with "held captive" and "captivated by". A great ending with a simple grace ~ John
Rodrigues Avatar
August 19, 2020 at 10:40 AM
Thank you, John! Thanks for a great comment.
Woodrow Avatar
August 19, 2020 at 7:30 AM
short eloquence! very nice :)
Rodrigues Avatar
August 19, 2020 at 8:23 AM
Thank you, Susan!
One Avatar
August 19, 2020 at 6:50 AM
You captured the element very well..
Rodrigues Avatar
August 19, 2020 at 8:23 AM
Thank you, Silent!
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