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Red Eyed and Liquified

I feel the rain Flowing down my face Reminding me of tears on my etched skin tracing My spirit looks forward But my brain is backward facing It has been oh so very long Since this heart has really spoken waterworks haven't happened and my soul is choking So I lift up my eyes towards the night sky I have lived one hundred lives without really trying each different and the same living and dying same patterns repeated through the universe flying Looking learning laughing sometimes wisdom applying I have reached the final stage my heart now feels like dust My soul is drenched steel overcome with rust Each life taught me something I'm trying to adjust Dust to mud metamorphosis This body might bust A cry baby wannabe filled with pain hope and lust The cradle of life is rocking Under the weight of contemplation I feel the bough is breaking Into the ground I'm slowly sinking Can you feel my body shaking It's all a bad dream I wake up tearfully crying True or false I think I might be lying Lying here in my bed My red liquified eyes are in need of drying...

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Red Fiery

Date: 2/12/2017 10:47:00 AM

My mind was tossing over so many things after I read this and honestly speaking , I had the same question . What inspired you to write this ? You write with so much of emotions , Richard and as usual , I am your Fan !!!! Glad to be back and glad to have found this work !! Highly applaudable ~Red~

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/13/2017 9:53:00 AM

You are sweet Red! Thanks for the visit and welcome back!

Akkina Downing

Date: 1/25/2017 7:43:00 PM

Emotionally deep, but so so beautifully written... Awesome Richard :)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/26/2017 7:23:00 AM

Thanks Akkina.:0)

Judy Ball

Date: 1/24/2017 4:59:00 PM

WoW! There is so much emotion here. So much pain. So much confusion. Where is he going and why. This is some piece Richard. Great stuff. A seven from me. God Bless, JB

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/24/2017 8:59:00 PM

What a great comment, thanks Judy.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 1/24/2017 11:08:00 AM

Richard, how did you write this? How? It is so amazing and so deep. I feel it's different....very different from hour usual writes. Trying to get my mind around it. What inspired you...

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/24/2017 9:01:00 PM

Honestly like most of what I write the first few lines pop in my head and it feels like the rest of it writes itself. Hugs back to you Eileen.:0)

Ralph Sergi

Date: 1/23/2017 9:22:00 PM

Hi Rick: Poignant but Powerful! I love your prose!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/24/2017 7:20:00 AM

Thanks Ralph.

Darren White

Date: 1/21/2017 11:01:00 PM

Those last four lines... This is a dark and beautiful poem, and a definite 7 from me.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/24/2017 7:20:00 AM

Thanks A Darren.

Arthur Vaso

Date: 1/21/2017 7:47:00 PM

I love the honesty of this poem, is raw, pure and wonderfully expressed! I myself, never cry, never, not even once, not even when born, never, never, dont know what a tear is. ( ok I lied ) :)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/24/2017 7:19:00 AM

Thanks Arthur.;0)

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 1/21/2017 7:07:00 PM

Finding a release through poetic words soothes the soul and becomes cathartic. Beautiful Richard. : ) 7

Joanna Daniel

Date: 1/20/2017 10:40:00 PM

This is excellently splendid write, Richard:) I was caught in the flow of words:) a 7:)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/24/2017 7:17:00 AM

Thanks Jo.

Mama Bear

Date: 1/20/2017 9:34:00 PM

Nothing like a good cry for soul cleansing You have done well with this one A big 7 Love Mom

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/20/2017 10:17:00 PM

Love back to you mom!:0)

Mark Peterson

Date: 1/20/2017 7:32:00 PM

Poetic-minded people must be doomed to introspection. I marvel at those who say they have nothing on their mind. Thanks for lending word and rhyme to what attacks me. You did almost too perfect a job, nearly sufficient to let me think I'm normal.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/20/2017 10:17:00 PM

Being normal is highly over rated my friend. Thanks for the great comment.

Paul Callus

Date: 1/19/2017 4:00:00 PM

A meaningful and emotive poem, Richard. Not all men cry, but those who do have nothing to be ashamed of. // paul

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/19/2017 6:22:00 PM

Thanks Paul.;0)

Arabian Poet

Date: 1/19/2017 2:42:00 PM

Hi dear friend, how are you? Hope you are having great happy healthy life. Really inspiring and great work of art You really know how to use words

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/19/2017 6:23:00 PM

Thanks Arabian Poet.

Joseph May

Date: 1/19/2017 10:04:00 AM

An emotional journey through each stage of a dream...Well written...

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/19/2017 10:08:00 AM

Thanks Joseph.

Casarah Nance

Date: 1/19/2017 9:56:00 AM

brilliant words Richard, you are amazing, hugs

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/19/2017 10:08:00 AM

Hi Casarah, a big hug back to you.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/17/2017 9:30:00 PM

oh my, it's so emotive. Superb poetry, Richard!! SEVEN

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/17/2017 10:58:00 PM

Thanks Andrea;0)

Agnes Krampe

Date: 1/17/2017 9:13:00 PM

Great description of emotion, Richard. I love the images you use, and especially the phrase "my heart feels like dust".

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/17/2017 10:58:00 PM

Thanks Agnes.

Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 1/17/2017 11:58:00 AM

Very incisive poem, Richard. The deep introspection of this poem is a revelation to the soul. Breaching ignorance of self-motives is an elevating, liberating experience. Seems those dried red eyes are geared up to be transformed into bright eyes and take a quantum flight in enlightenment. Powerful poem, my friend.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/17/2017 8:19:00 PM

Thanks Freddie, I'm still smiling after your amazing piece you dedicated to me. Thanks again.

Tim Smith

Date: 1/17/2017 10:20:00 AM

Wonderful expression of feelings Richard...it's as if your dream is saying time is slipping away and you need to make your mark in this world.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 1/17/2017 11:02:00 PM

The most important mark we can make is the relationships we cultivate. Thanks for your visit Tim.