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Raw Emotions

I was a little girl holding mothers hand- unprepared for the harsh and brutal image of my sister being run over by a truck the image raw graphic violent and terrifying I will always remember the chilling scream my mother screaming and screaming and screaming it will haunt me forever- the bleakness the reality powerful fervent perhaps that is why we were so close mother and me until her death we shared this raw emotion just us- the scene was garish a little girl lay dead in her sweet pink dress I was naïve unprepared for such an intense violent death I was a just a flower growing so I folded my petals up around me and there I dwelled unspeaking just staring into nothingness mother went to a raw place painful and lost only the love of a grandma could reach my shattered tender soul- she was uneducated and inexperienced but with untrained skill she opened each petal one by one and each raw emotion was revealed somehow mother and I recovered in time (or did we) and life rumbled on but still when I go to the wind blown cemetery and I touch the name suzanne it all comes flooding back the undiluted raw image and that penetrating scream to goes on for infinity and this has made me the poet I am a poet born from raw exposed pain ______________________________ July 29, 2015 Poetry/Free Verse/raw emotions Copyright Protected, ID 15-695-291-0 All Rights Reserved. Written under Pseudonym. For the contest, Raw, sponsor, Catie Lindsey Fourth Place

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Date: 8/1/2015 1:18:00 AM
Wow this is so wonderful BW, Congrats on big win! The line opening of petals one by one revealing raw emotions- my fav!
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Date: 7/31/2015 9:22:00 PM
AMAZING, Constance. Simply amazing.
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Date: 7/31/2015 4:37:00 PM
You are a very special lady to endure so much grief in your lifetime it's not fare. A big hug forever from me to you.
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Date: 7/31/2015 1:19:00 PM
This is my fav... Broken, Congrats... SKAT
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Date: 7/31/2015 9:31:00 AM
I have a lump in my throat reading this the pain is still so evident - a remarkable write - congrats:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 7/30/2015 5:16:00 PM
my heart truly goes out to you....but just from the strength in your words, I know you have made it through....though your heart may be forever broken, unable to ever truly be healed....the pain has made you a better person, it is evident in your skill....;)
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Date: 7/29/2015 4:31:00 PM
I so admire your strength. I don't think I would be capable of sharing this with others.
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Date: 7/29/2015 8:10:00 AM
Wow it is painful to read this recollection. You have made this experience jump from the page. This is an amazing piece of writing.
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Date: 7/28/2015 6:40:00 PM
BW, you conveyed a rawness that tugged at the heartstrings with this piece. Things that happen in ourlives good or bad contribute to the person we become. Excellent job. Good luck in the contest! :-) Alexis 7
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Date: 7/28/2015 6:01:00 PM
This is well constructed, I like the image in it. Excellence............7......A.M.
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