Nick Bagnall Poet Diminished Hexaverse

Raven's Watch

She's always there, watching
Over the quiet graves
Torn between life and death
Waiting 'till her time ends
When at last, she can be
Reunited with him

Without his strong arms
She falters and fails
Ne'er to love again
Her gentle heart is
Smashed beyond repair

She is the one
They call Raven
Soulless, helpless
Without his love

She stands and
Forever
Looks over

Where they
Buried

Him






Written By Nick Bagnall
For Contest "Among the dead"
13th Place

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Laura Breidenthal November 2, 2011 at 5:05 PM This is an amazing poem! Immediately a favorite! Thanks a mill for sharing! Always, Laura

Elizabeth Lepapa August 19, 2011 at 2:56 PM Hope she find peace after her love went.this is a nice one representing challeges not only of love but love.we all have to take heart not to fall down.luv liz

David Williams June 3, 2011 at 12:11 PM hey Nick, love this one, David

Carol Sunshine Brown February 24, 2011 at 12:12 PM I had only read a couple of the poems and wanted so badly to enter but...too many things were going on and didn't get to. I knew Constance would have a time selecting her winners. There is a long list of winners here. You should be so proud of your winning poem congratulations Nick. Love, Carol

Kash Poet February 19, 2011 at 10:57 AM Wonderful story with a challenging form----enjoyed.Congrats Nick on your well deserved win in the contest.---kashinath

James Fraser February 19, 2011 at 7:25 AM Many congratulations Nick on your fine win in Constance's wonderful contest....:)

Carolyn Devonshire February 18, 2011 at 7:09 AM Nick, Congratulations on your win! Enjoyed this entry the first time I read it and liked it even more upon the second reading. Love, Carolyn

Elaine George February 18, 2011 at 12:43 AM Great story, Nick. Many congrat's on your BIG WIN. Lainie

Tahera Mannan February 17, 2011 at 8:39 PM Wow Nick Lovely. many congratulations.

Robert Pettit February 17, 2011 at 7:19 PM A great example of a diminished hexaverse and a great entry for Constance's contest. Congratulations on winning.

John Freeman February 17, 2011 at 6:37 PM Congratulations Nick on your honored place, jolly goood show. Agape, Moses

Dr.Ram Mehta February 17, 2011 at 5:51 PM Congratulations on the well deserved win in the contest of constance, Nick

Audrey Haick February 17, 2011 at 5:21 PM Congratulations on your fine win in the "Among the Dead" Contest, Nick. Always, Annalise

Linda-Marie Sweetheart February 17, 2011 at 5:09 PM Congrats Nick on your wonderful win in Among the Dead contest with this exceptional entry luv.. enjoy another grand victory with luv myf riend..

Cas Davis January 22, 2011 at 3:20 PM Y, thank u 4 u'r comments. I like this one, ravens are very symbolic. Anything that symbolic, enriches poetry, I think.

Andrea Dietrich January 21, 2011 at 9:24 AM Nick, I love how you did yours using this diminished hexaverse form. I have tried this form once or twice and found it very interesting. It was a great way to accomplish your message here in this poem! You were thinking similarly to me in the way you imagined the scene of this beautiful picture! Luv, Andrea

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen January 19, 2011 at 10:06 AM Nice use of the diminished hexaverse with this poem. You captured the mood of the captivating photograph. This form, when presented centered reminds me of a tornado...and death of a loved one is like an emotional tornado to those left behind. Good luck in the contest. Lovingly, Dane Ann

Carolyn Devonshire January 18, 2011 at 7:16 PM Nick, this is a genuinely moving interpretation of the contest theme. And I admire the form you chose. It's not wordy and still conveys a powerful image. Well done! Best wishes for success in the contest. Love, Carolyn

Constance La France January 18, 2011 at 10:48 AM Thank you for supporting my contest.

Carol Sunshine Brown January 18, 2011 at 8:21 AM Good morning and thank you for sharing your poetry Nick. It was a pleasure to read your poetry today and I hope you will continue to write. The best to you in your writing endeavors whatever they may be in 2011. Love, Carol

Stephen Parker January 18, 2011 at 6:57 AM Utilizing a lurking, watchful bird to describe a human vigil works very well! I enjoyed your devoted verse!

Linda-Marie Sweetheart January 18, 2011 at 5:16 AM Elegantly expressed Nick and a sure winner as Constance will luv this entry .. perfectly written my friend.. good luck in the contest... with luv..

Tahera Mannan January 18, 2011 at 5:08 AM This is a real beauty Nick. You have beautifully described the pic.