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Rattlesnake

Body coiled and ready to strike, rattling tail betrays his trap. Hooded eyes stare through desert night, unsuspecting prey lingers. Sharp fangs pierce flesh mortal wounding, he feasts, then retreats alone. Written on 1/17/2015

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Jan Allison

Date: 3/24/2015 3:09:00 PM

dropping back with my congrats:-) hugs Jan xx

Lindsay Laurie

Date: 1/30/2015 6:18:00 PM

G'day Laura... Nicely written Laura about a predator of the night. Perhaps you're luckier than us. Our snakes don't have rattles. Thanks again Laura - Lindsay

Laura Leiser
Date: 1/31/2015 12:29:00 AM

That's "live" by rattlesnakes, lol!!

Laura Leiser
Date: 1/31/2015 12:28:00 AM

Yes, I do love by a canyon of rattlers here in San Diego. Don't like running into them as I do from time to time, but I'm glad they warn me with their rattlings!

Tim Ryerson

Date: 1/29/2015 6:12:00 AM

You have renewed my interest in these awesome creatures of the night with this poetic, gripping imagery...PERFECT last line - Tim

Laura Leiser
Date: 1/31/2015 12:26:00 AM

Thanks for your kind comment, Tim. I've always seen rattlesnakes traveling alone on my hikes in the local canyons!

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

Date: 1/20/2015 8:41:00 AM

Hi Laura, this is an awesome write for the night creatures contest. I'm not too fond of snakes, but I have a great respect for nature...best wishes in the contest...hugs, Rhonda

Laura Leiser
Date: 1/20/2015 1:11:00 PM

Thanks for your comment, Rhonda. I was going to write about the coyote originally, but decided on the rattlesnake to challenge myself, knowing it might not be the creature of choice to write about!

Laura Leiser

Date: 1/17/2015 11:30:00 PM

Hi Skat! See my response above, I wrote it in wrong place, oops!

Laura Leiser

Date: 1/17/2015 11:28:00 PM

Thanks for your comments and your honesty, too, Skat! Snakes ARE scary, but fascinating, too! :)

Laura Leiser
Date: 1/17/2015 11:29:00 PM

Oops, did this in the wrong place...!