Rain's Fall

From heaven I fell in drop to swell,
Upon the waves of Loch Fyne.
From rain to girl, sand born in pearl
thus formed was I divine.

When first formed, I was Unicorn
And no name had such as I
But then the moon, the belewe moon
appeared and Rain rose I.

From rain, to pearl to Unicorn
to maid of Rain who cried.
Who rose, once more, a woman
at edge of ocean’s tide.

Upon the strand two horses ran,
two stallions side by side
each whiter than the abalone
the shell where she’d reside.

No longer could she race with them
all across the ocean's side,
she’d lost her horn and been reborn
in frailer form she hied.

Now, forelorn she rides astride
like a nyph, or virgin bride,
until that ole betrayer moon
returns she'll be not satisfied.


Contest/ Rain, The Story
By Debbie Guzzi

* A Blue moon is an extra full moon in a year. 
Often there are many years between one blue/blewe
"betrayer" moon and the next.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010



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Date: 1/16/2011 7:40:00 PM
Congratulations on your fantastic win in the contest, Deb! Love, Annalise
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Date: 1/14/2011 9:16:00 AM
Congratulations Deborah on your win in A Rambling Poet's contest "Rain,The Story". Love, Carol
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Date: 1/13/2011 4:02:00 PM
DEb, don't ever tell me again that you don't "get"meter because I thing you are gettiing things a lot better these days. This sounds so lyrical. What a lovely win! Congratulations.
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Date: 1/13/2011 12:46:00 PM
Congratulations on your Fantastic win with this very creative piece, Deb! Love, Annalise
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Date: 1/13/2011 9:47:00 AM
Great, imaginative poem, Debbie. Congratulations. Love, Joyce
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Date: 1/13/2011 8:28:00 AM
I often see your poetry, and wonder how it is not always number 1......at the top, where it belongs....yours is always under rated.....but I'm so glad to see it in the winner's circle !! Most wonderful this is as usual !!
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Date: 1/13/2011 6:27:00 AM
Congratulations on the third place win in the contest of Constance, Deb
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Date: 1/13/2011 4:45:00 AM
congrats on your win in this great contest. BG
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Date: 1/13/2011 3:13:00 AM
a gem of a write with blazing touches of folklore, deborah!! special cheers for a big win in the contest.. wow! :) nette
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Date: 1/12/2011 8:57:00 PM
Many Congrats Deborah on big win with this creative verse.Best wishes/Luv - Hitendra Mehta
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Date: 1/12/2011 8:19:00 PM
Congrats Debbie on your wonderful win in the Rain Story contest with this exquisite write my friend.. well deserving of a top spot luv.. btw..entered your contest just now too..luv..
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Date: 1/12/2011 8:06:00 PM
Congratulations on your win, Deb! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 1/12/2011 7:57:00 PM
A truly beautiful write. Lots of congratulations for this win.
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Date: 12/22/2010 7:38:00 AM
Dear Light and LOVE, Deborah, WOW this is Amazing I will Congratulate YOU now I see YOUR POEM "Rain's Fall" a Laureatus Statis I am really impressed with this I will have to read much more of YOU ALWAYS YOUR Liege, LOVE...HG - SOUP MAIL Reply
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Date: 12/19/2010 8:01:00 PM
Great work on this piece! I enjoyed it and I am taken by your talent... Great Job!!! P.S. I sent a soupmail as you requested. Thanks...Good Luck
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Date: 12/16/2010 8:56:00 PM
MY gosh, you really made it like a true legend, Deb. this is very "unique" just like the unicorn Rain used to be. I hope Constance places it high in her contest! Luv, Andrea
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Date: 12/16/2010 1:17:00 PM
Very interesting story behind this poem, Deb. As you know, I believe in reincarnation, but this girl's transition from a Unicorn to a woman touched my heart. A great entry for Constance's contest and I wish you success. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 12/16/2010 4:34:00 AM
Enjoyed reading your wonderful poetry today Deborah. Wishing you the best inthe contest. Love, Carol
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Date: 12/15/2010 9:54:00 PM
of lines and theme mystical and glorious, deborah... the phrasing is impeccable with descritions of a a woman's spirt the spirit of glzed in he own realm... a winning piece in the contest! much luck as always! hugggs, nette
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Date: 12/15/2010 8:17:00 PM
Another rare beauty TEACH.. good luck in the new contest .. enjoyed reading your entertaining entry full of imagery and visual affect..luv..pupil..
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Date: 12/15/2010 7:08:00 PM
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Date: 12/15/2010 4:31:00 PM
PURE BEAUTY....as you embody...jimbo
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Date: 12/15/2010 4:01:00 PM
Great entry for the contest.. a winner Debbie for sure... luv Michael
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Date: 12/15/2010 3:38:00 PM
Thank you for supporting my contest.
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