Rain's Fall

From heaven I fell in drop to swell,
Upon the waves of Loch Fyne.
From rain to girl, sand born in pearl
thus formed was I divine.

When first formed, I was Unicorn
And no name had such as I
But then the moon, the belewe moon
appeared and Rain rose I.

From rain, to pearl to Unicorn
to maid of Rain who cried.
Who rose, once more, a woman
at edge of ocean’s tide.

Upon the strand two horses ran,
two stallions side by side
each whiter than the abalone
the shell where she’d reside.

No longer could she race with them
all across the ocean's side,
she’d lost her horn and been reborn
in frailer form she hied.

Now, forelorn she rides astride
like a nyph, or virgin bride,
until that ole betrayer moon
returns she'll be not satisfied.


Contest/ Rain, The Story
By Debbie Guzzi

* A Blue moon is an extra full moon in a year. 
Often there are many years between one blue/blewe
"betrayer" moon and the next.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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Haick Avatar
January 16, 2011 at 7:40 PM
Congratulations on your fantastic win in the contest, Deb! Love, Annalise
Brown Avatar
January 14, 2011 at 9:16 AM
Congratulations Deborah on your win in A Rambling Poet's contest "Rain,The Story". Love, Carol
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January 13, 2011 at 4:02 PM
DEb, don't ever tell me again that you don't "get"meter because I thing you are gettiing things a lot better these days. This sounds so lyrical. What a lovely win! Congratulations.
Haick Avatar
January 13, 2011 at 12:46 PM
Congratulations on your Fantastic win with this very creative piece, Deb! Love, Annalise
Johnson Avatar
January 13, 2011 at 9:47 AM
Great, imaginative poem, Debbie. Congratulations. Love, Joyce
Richards Avatar
January 13, 2011 at 8:28 AM
I often see your poetry, and wonder how it is not always number 1......at the top, where it belongs....yours is always under rated.....but I'm so glad to see it in the winner's circle !! Most wonderful this is as usual !!
Mehta Avatar
January 13, 2011 at 6:27 AM
Congratulations on the third place win in the contest of Constance, Deb
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January 13, 2011 at 4:45 AM
congrats on your win in this great contest. BG
Onclaud Avatar
January 13, 2011 at 3:13 AM
a gem of a write with blazing touches of folklore, deborah!! special cheers for a big win in the contest.. wow! :) nette
Mehta Avatar
January 12, 2011 at 8:57 PM
Many Congrats Deborah on big win with this creative verse.Best wishes/Luv - Hitendra Mehta
Sweetheart Avatar
January 12, 2011 at 8:19 PM
Congrats Debbie on your wonderful win in the Rain Story contest with this exquisite write my friend.. well deserving of a top spot luv.. btw..entered your contest just now too..luv..
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January 12, 2011 at 8:06 PM
Congratulations on your win, Deb! Love, Carolyn
Mannan Avatar
January 12, 2011 at 7:57 PM
A truly beautiful write. Lots of congratulations for this win.
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December 22, 2010 at 7:38 AM
Dear Light and LOVE, Deborah, WOW this is Amazing I will Congratulate YOU now I see YOUR POEM "Rain's Fall" a Laureatus Statis I am really impressed with this I will have to read much more of YOU ALWAYS YOUR Liege, LOVE...HG - SOUP MAIL Reply
Taylor Avatar
December 19, 2010 at 8:01 PM
Great work on this piece! I enjoyed it and I am taken by your talent... Great Job!!! P.S. I sent a soupmail as you requested. Thanks...Good Luck
Dietrich Avatar
December 16, 2010 at 8:56 PM
MY gosh, you really made it like a true legend, Deb. this is very "unique" just like the unicorn Rain used to be. I hope Constance places it high in her contest! Luv, Andrea
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December 16, 2010 at 1:17 PM
Very interesting story behind this poem, Deb. As you know, I believe in reincarnation, but this girl's transition from a Unicorn to a woman touched my heart. A great entry for Constance's contest and I wish you success. Love, Carolyn
Brown Avatar
December 16, 2010 at 4:34 AM
Enjoyed reading your wonderful poetry today Deborah. Wishing you the best inthe contest. Love, Carol
Onclaud Avatar
December 15, 2010 at 9:54 PM
of lines and theme mystical and glorious, deborah... the phrasing is impeccable with descritions of a a woman's spirt the spirit of glzed in he own realm... a winning piece in the contest! much luck as always! hugggs, nette
Sweetheart Avatar
December 15, 2010 at 8:17 PM
Another rare beauty TEACH.. good luck in the new contest .. enjoyed reading your entertaining entry full of imagery and visual affect..luv..pupil..
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December 15, 2010 at 7:08 PM
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December 15, 2010 at 4:31 PM
PURE BEAUTY....as you embody...jimbo
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December 15, 2010 at 4:01 PM
Great entry for the contest.. a winner Debbie for sure... luv Michael
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December 15, 2010 at 3:38 PM
Thank you for supporting my contest.
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