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Is it okay if I kiss you when I stagger through the bedroom door? Is it pathetic that I miss you in those black jeans and red shirt? What if I said I needed this more than you ever did? Would you let me understand the way the light falls, circling your face? Can I put my hand here? Can I feel you again? Would you let me sit beside you, my hands dancing on your skin? Have you ever stopped to wonder what the white-washed words all meant? Do you hear the tracks of tears, making trenches down my chin? Do you hear it? Can you feel them? Do you care you caused this feeling? Can you hear me when I whisper? Can you just listen? Does it matter?

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Date: 11/18/2012 11:54:00 AM
There's a very nice rythym, you have going here and a nice use of alliteration too! I would remind you the word [that] almost never adds anything to a write. Everytime you are tempted to use it, make sure you need it. Light & Love
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Ira Dawson
Date: 11/18/2012 2:24:00 PM
Ahh! You are correct, again. :) Thanks for the feedback Debbie.
Date: 11/16/2012 11:52:00 AM
Many deep emotion in your poem Ira, it feels both good and bad .... - Hope and forgiveness .... and love. - Hope your weekend will be fine. - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 11/16/2012 12:13:00 AM
Thats what am talking abt.
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Ira Dawson
Date: 11/16/2012 6:51:00 AM
:) Thanks Nancy
Date: 11/15/2012 7:09:00 PM
This has the painful ring of truth--I hope you are healed by your writing.
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Ira Dawson
Date: 11/16/2012 6:50:00 AM
Thank you so much for taking the time to read this and give me feedback. It's greatly appreciated.

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