Polar Winds

Too many icy drinks, too fast on a hot summer day,
my core center chilled beyond bearing and
my stomach reacted violently, throwing up
the offending liquid. One can’t go from steamy 
summer to frigid winter without a physical reaction.

That glacial feeling from last summer,
came back to me when I saw the doctor 
come from the operating room and 
head in my direction. His words did
not register with me at first.  It was as if they
were frozen in time.

They hung in the air, singly and slowly like
a slow moving storm of ice pellets.
Bleak and raw they whirled around my head before
settling in my startled stomach.  They struck
like ice cubes inadvertently swallowed and 
too big for their  landing place.

The words were cold and cruel and cut into my
very soul as surely as a surgeons steel scalpel
slices through soft flesh. 

My foggy brain afraid of reality, chose to be critical
of the messenger.  I decided that he had said 
these words too many times before and  his well
of empathy and emotion had dried to a hard crust.
That is why he was being so direct and frigid. 

Then as if driven there by a strong wind, my
thoughts  veered off in a  different direction.  
I felt a flood of pity for the doctor.  He looked
so tired and well he might.  The operation had 
started eighteen hours ago.

Finally my brain filtered out the non-essentials
and leapt onto his words.

“ He didn’t survive the operation.”

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011



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Date: 2/25/2011 11:42:00 AM
Congratulations Joyce, on your well deserved win in Chris D. Aechtner's contest " Free Verse For Winter". Love, Carol
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Date: 2/19/2011 12:33:00 AM
Congratulations on winning with this entry, Joyce.
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Date: 2/18/2011 8:05:00 PM
many congrats for this win dear friend.
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Date: 2/18/2011 7:08:00 PM
That last line took me by surprise, Joyce--this is such a moving poem-- super congrats on your win with this :) --nikko :)
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Date: 2/18/2011 6:40:00 PM
Ps do you mind telling me who this was? It sounds so true.
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Date: 2/18/2011 6:39:00 PM
oh, my goodness, Joyce, you didn't just say it, you SHOWED it, and that is the true nature of poetry. You did awesome here with this poem . A BIG congratulations to this well deserved win!
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Date: 2/18/2011 5:46:00 PM
Congratulations on the well deserved win in the contest of Chris, Joyce
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Date: 2/18/2011 4:56:00 PM
Congratulations on your win..Sara
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Date: 2/18/2011 1:17:00 PM
Congratulations on your fine win in the contest, Joyce. This is wonderful as usual. Love, Annalise
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Date: 2/18/2011 12:26:00 PM
Great job Joyce, on your worthy poem's honored ninth place win. Agape, Moses
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Date: 2/18/2011 10:32:00 AM
This was a first place in my book, Joyce. Congratulations on your win in Chris's contest with this wonderful free verse. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 2/18/2011 9:38:00 AM
a gliterring story so well-woven, joyce... BIG-TIME congrats to you..:) huggs, nette
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Date: 2/18/2011 9:01:00 AM
Congrats Joyce on another great win in the Winter Free Verse contest with another excellent entry my friend.. enjoy your sweet success with much luv..
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Date: 2/13/2011 12:40:00 PM
Neat job of suspence you wove into this Free Verse Joyce. Thanks for your participation on my blog. Agape, Moses
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Date: 2/11/2011 3:13:00 PM
Joyce, I got such chills when I came to the end of this poem. There are moments like these that we simply cannot forget. You built suspense so well throughout your poem and I was getting angry with the doctor myself. I'm sure this genuinely moving free verse will do well in the contest, dear. Stunning! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 2/10/2011 9:02:00 PM
Sorry for such a sad end. very emotional and lovingly penned.
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Date: 2/10/2011 7:59:00 PM
I'm sorry to hear someone didn't survive. You have written this piece very descriptively. A little long, but worth the read.
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