Poets Kiss

This heart although not torn Is pulled in every fashion A muscle aching fiercely From such unexpected action From years of idle thumping To this titillating burst If I knew your kiss was coming I would have stretched it first It appreciates the strain As in my chest and marriage It is fighting to remain I trust use will make it stronger For it will not be denied You satiate it's hunger On you it must be plied.

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Robert Warlov

Date: 2/26/2022 7:44:00 PM

The transition (others noting the change in rhyme scheme) __ occurs after the introduction of the second object; namely, your __ marriage. Thereafter, " . . . use will make it stronger" can be applied to either or both.

Jeff Connelly

Date: 12/14/2019 10:28:00 AM

What a delightful poem for your husband Maureen. I'm sure he felt honored when you read him this. Quite lovely. Thank you.

Jeff Connelly
Date: 12/14/2019 1:10:00 PM

Oh. I thought it was a sealing kiss, and that your "storm" was because of waiting in anticipation. Sorry Maureen, but thank you.

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 12/14/2019 10:50:00 AM

Hello Jeff! I'm in and out. Just have to say, it was the kiss that ended my marriage, well 7 years with wanting to marry, thus the storm... ;), Happy Saturday! xomo

Pat Adams

Date: 10/9/2017 11:01:00 PM

If I knew the kiss was coming I would have stretched it first is brilliant! I also would have liked to see the rhyming scheme continue and I also have called myself a rhymer not really a poet. You obviously are talented enough to pull off both. Well done!..............Pat

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 10/10/2017 10:12:00 AM

Thank you so much Pat for romping through my work, er play :) I see it but I can't change it, sort of a time capsule. To me it feels like it represents the interruption, the winding tighter...

Lin Lane

Date: 3/15/2017 1:42:00 PM

I'm a rhymer, first and foremost. Sometimes a detriment to me for when I've written, I then tend to think all thoughts, in search of rhyme. lol I agree with John, in that the rhyme scheme throws me off in the flow, but it's your pen and your hand holds it. ;-)

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 3/15/2017 2:23:00 PM

I be a rhymer naturally too, didn't think it till after I wrote my reply, what I wished I said was that it was a reflection of the kiss that threw me in real life.

John Michaels

Date: 2/11/2017 7:05:00 AM

Some great wording here. If I'm interpreting it correctly, this could be a difficult situation or a great opportunity. Interesting that you switched rhyming patterns around the middle - it feels like there should perhaps be another (non-rhyming) line above "It appreciates the strain" but maybe that was deliberately left out to shake things up? All the best!

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 2/11/2017 7:32:00 PM

Intriguing observation! I don't tend to so headily think my poetry through so much as feel it. Well, the pieces I have (overthought) I never seem to feel are that good. Thank you John, food for thought. Bless!