Silent One Poet Pantoum

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I have not done a pantoum for such a long time.  Have seen a lot being written recently.

This pantoum has a 10 syllable count and rhyme.

I always struggle to keep my pantoums short.

 

Poet's Adoration of Nature

As dusk's misty tones awake from silence,
darkness fades, as birds gather to rejoice.
A beautiful reminder of patience,
their sweet melodies give nature her voice.

Darkness fades, as birds gather to rejoice,
basking in the glory of a new dawn.
Their sweet melodies give nature her voice,
as they parade, dancing upon lush lawn.

Basking in the glory of a new dawn,
crystal clear skies sparkle like sapphire gems.
As they parade, dancing upon lush lawn,
sweet pea stretches its tender verdant stems.

Crystal clear skies sparkle like sapphire gems.
Sun spreads his warmth in ways only he knows.
Sweet pea stretches its tender verdant stems -
beside saffron crocus and scarlet rose.

Sun spreads his warmth in ways only he knows.
Bluebells and ivory lilies enchant -
beside saffron crocus and scarlet rose,
blossoming like a painting by Rembrandt.

Bluebells and ivory lilies enchant.
Plethora of petals with vibrant hues,
blossoming like a painting by Rembrandt -
inspiring a poet's slumbering muse.

Plethora of petals with vibrant hues,
producing sweet nectar for bumble bees.
Inspiring a poet's slumbering muse,
as butterflies kiss cherry blossom trees.

Producing sweet nectar for bumble bees,
the flower garden is heaven on Earth.
As butterflies kiss cherry blossom trees,
poet's pen adorns nature for her worth.

The flower garden is heaven on Earth.
A beautiful reminder of patience.
Poet's pen adorns nature for her worth,
as dusk's misty tones awake from silence.


I have not done a pantoum for such a long time.  Have seen a lot being written recently.

This pantoum has a 10 syllable count and rhyme.

I always struggle to keep my pantoums short.

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Sam Kauffman September 22, 2023 at 10:35 AM What a lovely garden tour of sights, sounds and scents, SO! "Indeed "the flower garden is heaven on Earth" and your garden blooms with charming cherry blossoms, butterflies, fat bumblebees and bluebells under clear skies and warm sunshine. An earthly reminder of heaven in bloom. This poem has a gentle loveliness. Congratulations on your win! Blessings of beauty to you!

Susan Ashley September 15, 2023 at 5:47 PM Wow! What an amazing pantoum, Silent One. It is a difficult form in itself but to include sprinklings of alliteration, unique rhymes (enchant/Rembrandt) and charming metaphors is a sign of your poetic talent. Your love for Nature shines in the brilliance of your golden verse. I admire and adore Nature too, she is ever my muse! Congratulations for your excellent win in Gina's contest. Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan

Ink Empress September 13, 2023 at 1:12 AM This poem truly defines you and your love for nature and flowers, i love how you’ve used all those flowers and written such a deep and soulful pantoum that rhymes so well whilst also sticking to syllables. I agree flower garden is heaven on earth and they always remind us to be patient. I find nature healing and always comforting during difficult times too, and your poems do exactly the same. Love this one and well deserved win really. You deserve the recognition, gifted poet congratulations

Regina Mcintosh September 13, 2023 at 12:55 AM yes, nature's voice... I will rejoice when reading this, over and over, dripping in the wonder, the music, the muse you portray with this amazing write. I love it so. Such a joy to read and I will forever remember - thank you so much for entering this one. Congrats on the top win and God bless you, sweet friend. Love, Gina

Suzanne Delaney September 8, 2023 at 4:14 AM Dear Silent one. Re- visiting your lovely nature Pantoum. The ever recurring beauty of nature is captured in your lines just as nature repeats in cycles. We never tire of seeing it in its different states Be well. SuZ

D.W. Rodgers November 19, 2020 at 10:52 AM I had to go back to this and liked this a lot. Great flow and I'm impressed by 9 quatrains. Silent One November 19, 2020 at 11:05 AM Thank you..

Anitha Jayasankar October 20, 2020 at 11:17 PM What great imagery you have created Silent One! 'Poet's pen adorns nature for her worth'.... so amazing... just enjoyed reading every word of this great excellent poem.... I feel like I should try to write a pantoum too..... Soo inspired!...... ~ Ani

Dennis Spilchuk October 18, 2020 at 12:00 PM Beautifully written. The poet's pen adorns nature like a painter's brush on canvas. Silent One October 19, 2020 at 6:44 AM Thank you..

D.W. Rodgers May 31, 2020 at 10:02 AM Great flow and wonderful flowery language. I too loved "inspiring a poet's slumbering muse." Hopefully the inspiration wil spread like a countervirus.

Phyllis Babcock May 30, 2020 at 10:16 PM Love the imagery in this wonderful poem. Outstanding. love phyl

John Hamilton May 26, 2020 at 10:41 AM This is spectacular writing SO! Normally I find Pantoum's difficult to write and to read, but this flows so efforlessly off the tongue, the repeating lines gives it a lyrical feel which I enjoy. This is another fave of yours for me!

Richard Lamoureux May 19, 2020 at 7:50 AM When their this good, you can go as long as you want.;0)

JC Brul May 18, 2020 at 6:15 AM This is exactly how I see spring blossoms here in South Korea. You vividly bring spring come to life! Fascinating piece! To my faves.

Joseph P. DiMino May 16, 2020 at 4:30 PM Very beautiful, Si; love the imagery, rhythm. So difficult to write great poetry and yet you post gem after another. I think there is no lack of inspiration when writing about gardens, but I have read many poems on the subject, and few nearly eloquent as this one. Excellent read!

Beata Agustin May 15, 2020 at 6:13 AM Wow! Thanks for this... So delighted am I with this last stanza: "The flower garden is heaven on Earth. A beautiful reminder of patience. Poet's pen adorns nature for her worth, as dusk's misty tones awake from silence." Thanks likewise for my placement in your recently-judged contest. God bless you.

Mike Gentile May 14, 2020 at 9:44 AM Silent One, your Pantoum is so very beautiful! I especially love "sweet melodies give nature her voice " Your love of nature is quite clear in this peacefully organic write. Happy Thursday!!

Judy Ball May 13, 2020 at 4:38 PM Lovely Silent One. I could see the garden in my mind's eye as I read. I love the garden. My garden is my happy place where I sit on my swing and write or just enjoy in Summer. I like to plant things that encourage butterflies and bees. Great job here. God Bless, JB

Elaine George May 13, 2020 at 6:02 AM Beautiful! I have never written a poem in this genre. You have inspired me to do so one day. Thank you for sharing. You, my friend are a magnificent poet. ~Elaine

Regina Mcintosh May 12, 2020 at 8:55 PM Definitely a favorite!!! I adore Nature poetry and this is simply adorable and enchanting and so much more than my meager words could say. I just love it. God bless you my dear sweet friend. Love to you always, Gina

Joseph May May 12, 2020 at 8:38 PM Beautiful poetic blooms Silent, I like the Rembrandt line..

Panagiota Romios May 12, 2020 at 5:31 PM Silent One! You rock, my friend.! Vivid, poetic imagery! FAV... Without a doubt! Panagiota xxoo

Timothy Hicks May 11, 2020 at 11:04 AM Whenever you talk about your garden or flowers in general your soul seems to light up ... and it shows in the words you write. "Sun spreads his warmth in ways only he knows". A standout line. You're really good at the pantoum form ... when I first started writing them, I struggled not editing the repeated lines because I tend to want to tell a story. Hard to do when it keeps circling back (and circles ALL the way back in the end).

Jennifer Proxenos May 11, 2020 at 9:53 AM A brilliant pantoum about Nature, a brilliant poet with immense talent and a definite win, without any doubt. I now follow this form, thank you Silent One. Blessings, Jennifer. Silent One May 11, 2020 at 10:19 AM Thank you for you kind words... This is not for a contest..

Maria Williams May 11, 2020 at 6:47 AM Incredible form, incredible poet. As i said before and I'll say it again, you were born a Poet, poetry flows through your veins. Bravo Si....Maria Hugs Silent One May 11, 2020 at 10:18 AM I think everyone is born a poet... but have different ways to express themselves... Thank you.

Judith S May 11, 2020 at 6:37 AM And THIS is why you are an incredible poet. This flows so beautifully with rich poetic words ... I am in awe. I love this verse “ Bluebells and ivory lilies enchant. Plethora of petals with vibrant hues, blossoming like a painting by Rembrandt - inspiring a poet's slumbering muse.”. As always, you poetically shine with brilliance ! Silent One May 11, 2020 at 10:18 AM I hope that verse can inspire you... Thank you for your visit.

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