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Poetically Counting To 10

It would be good if I could mark the difference Of when I do and don't bottle things up Keeping things enclosed, tightly capped Certainly has more peaceful outcomes In the short term I've just agreed to something that doesn't please me I can feel the presence of the message in a bottle Will it cross the oceans, biding it's time To be revealed in all its glory with fanfare Or will the elements seep in, the message erase Maybe it'll end up on a distant shore, with the recipient baffled For now I'm sat trying to suffocate my real view into evaporating But my limited knowledge of science tells me that's not how evaporation works This is a test case then Science lesson: high explosives don't require external oxygen Science lesson class question: "What would the damage be if it were in the middle of the ocean when it explodes?" Ok... Sitting quietly a moment worked I've just had word there'll be a change of plan And nobody knows how differently it might have played out

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Date: 5/17/2023 3:46:00 AM
Nice pen with good imagery and insightfulness too. Blessings,Gordon
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Date: 5/17/2023 4:55:00 AM
Thank you Gordon, it's good to play around with these kind of ideas. Hopefully gaining insight along the way. Thank you for your comment.
Date: 5/17/2023 2:45:00 AM
Hmmm... sounds like a heart who could find peace with the Savior of the world. Lovely writing, God bless you, Love, Gina
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Date: 5/17/2023 3:27:00 AM
Thanks

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