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Your eyes are constantly searching Almost depreciatively, To understand me in every little detail Please, do not decide it in your mind, That you have figured me out fully I will crush your sureties in a second I will bend my way out of your grasping hands I will demand you look deeper To gaze with an open heart, To value this truth in light You are a mischievous observer, Playful, pleasure-ridden, often self-seeking You are often a taker, giving to gain And I share knowingly, not at all fooled If you think for a moment you know me, I will shock you Then I will disappoint you, Reminding you that what I am Will not satisfy, and was never meant to gratify

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Timothy Hicks

Date: 3/21/2016 11:43:00 PM

What a wild free-spirit you are. There'll be no cookie-cutter lover for you, for it seems you crave someone with sophistication. "If you think for a moment you know me, I will shock you Then I will disappoint you..." ... I do wonder if you will ever find this enigmatic puzzle piece, that'll fit your mysterious edges, Laura. I ALSO wonder if you wish to find this person ... then he'd know all your secrets ;)

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 3/22/2016 9:50:00 AM

I love your inquisitive mind, Timothy. Oh, yes, I remember where my heart was at when I wrote this. I can be wild, only because I believe in the fact that there is so much more in a person to explore than what meets the eyes, and I do think many poets(including you) understand that. Sometimes I do feel in relationships(romanticly or not) we tend to jump to conclusio ns about the other so easily..when in truth, there is so much more to explore about us. I would hate to feel like theres no more of me to know, that I am all figuree out, if that makew sense. We sure are complicated puzzle pieces, complex creatures and I love that! :)

Timothy Hicks
Date: 3/21/2016 11:45:00 PM

Always something that leaves me curious. Revealing one thing, but then hiding another. Well penned and makes me reflect on how complex human nature really is.

Heather Ober

Date: 9/10/2015 10:21:00 AM

I LOVE this!! I read a quote somewhere awhile back - "Be sassy, classy and a bit smart-assy." You are all three, my friend, and it suits you well! My favourite line is "You are often a taker, giving to gain." Your insight and honesty are very refreshing.

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 9/10/2015 6:19:00 PM

Thanks Heather! I am so glad you loved it!!~Laura

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 8/15/2015 1:17:00 PM

I meant to also say great poem as it causes the reader to contemplate one of lifes great mysteries "The mind of a woman!" Bravo.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 8/15/2015 1:15:00 PM

I think that to fully be understood we must first seek to know others. When a woman or a man feels listened to they will then be willing to share the very deepest of their secrets. In satisfying we achieve a deeper satisfaction. Above all let the person you are with be themselves and you in turn seek not to mold to anothers expectations.

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 8/15/2015 1:21:00 PM

Love your thoughts here, Richard. Thank you very much, and I'm glad this one appealed to you in some way. Your feedback is always appreciated. ~Laura

Duke Beaufort

Date: 8/14/2015 10:25:00 PM

The bad thing about this--it applies to me! In all honesty, as a man, I do these things to people (at least sometimes). I am a big believer in summarizing and logic. However, I do know that I can never understand exactly where you are coming from and what your words mean. They are always changing and flying around. So, you are safe, and will never be imprisoned and your spirit will soar. But, I do feel a little scolded. You are just too much--a psychologist. Poetry=therapy.

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 8/15/2015 2:40:00 AM

I've always liked your style, and always will. : ) The funny thing about these kind of writings, is that they can not only apply to the readers, the beholders, but the writer herself. Don't worry, I scold myself too, and relentlessly. I spend way too much time trying to figure myself out that I tend to lose the big picture- the beauty of being ever-changing, and free to breathe. You are an awesome poet - I have nothing but respect for you. ~Laura

Justin Bordner

Date: 8/14/2015 8:58:00 PM

No one strong wants a fool for a lover...I seek not answers from love, only the heat of it's mysteries...to know the One you love is to see the nature of their soul and to let it remain wild Laura...J.A.B.

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 8/15/2015 2:31:00 AM

Agreed, amazing poet! You don't have to tame to nurture. ~Laura