Play

Quatrain #855: PLAY Prize that fine poise as insight rhymes, Live your clear voice as lines sync chimes; Apt touch knows choice in verse that curls, Yes purge all noise as muse moves time. ~~~~~~~~~~ Leon Enriquez 15 November 2017 Singapore

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Charlie Smith

Date: 11/16/2017 10:44:00 AM

Delightful write Leon, thanks ...

Leon Enriquez
Date: 11/16/2017 6:02:00 PM

Dear Charlie: Thank you for your generous kind words and visit to this poem. All my best to you then my friend, Leon.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 11/16/2017 6:06:00 AM

Enjoyed reading this one..I don't know if I have seen this form before..I will have to look it up..I have done one or two with some internal rhyme but don't remember the form..Very creative and good rhymes..Thanks for the visit to my page.Sara

Leon Enriquez
Date: 11/16/2017 6:01:00 PM

Dear Sara: Thank you. The form of the rubai is Persian in origin and is a unique quatrain style where the 1st, 2nd and 4th lines contain an end-rhyme. The 3rd line has no end-rhyme. The beauty of this form in English is that I have adapted the Persian style of internal rhyme. You can see it in the fourth syllable of each line. This acts as an echo in the rise and fall of the breath as you read aloud. This is characteristic of Persian poetry as the Arabic words are very musical. In English, this is sometimes hard to achieve. Additionally, if you inspect closely, all my rubai quatrains are acrostic. The hint is in the title of the poem. In this case, PLAY can be read in the first letter of each line downwards. Enjoy! All my best to you then, Leon.

Paul Callus

Date: 11/15/2017 4:23:00 PM

Loved this form with its end and internal rhymes, Leon. Best wishes to you, my friend. // paul

Leon Enriquez
Date: 11/15/2017 7:08:00 PM

Dear Paul: Glad this poem delighted you. Thank you for your kind words my friend. Leon