Pike Peak Dreary

~On Pike’s Peak in moonlight as fog lifted, 
the maiden of gloom appeared on her broom, 
this witch I saw her as her dress drifted, 
with multi colored socks and face filled pocks. 

~The maiden of gloom appeared on her broom, 
she did screech, “Aren’t I a great beauty’s peach?”                                                        
With multi colored socks, and face filled pocks, 
I impeached gruesome, eerie, ugly, wench . 

~She did screech, “Aren’t I a great beauty’s peach?”  
I said, “Return to east, you gruesome beast!"
I impeached gruesome, eerie, ugly, wench, 
as she wickedly danced the moonlit glen. 

~I said,  “Return to east, you gruesome beast!” 
She hissed and she retorted , “I’m a beauty!” 
As she wickedly dance the moonlit glen, 
she hissed, she squawked, in  the moonlight she mocked.

~She hissed and she retorted, "I'm a beauty!" 
This witch I saw her, as her dress drifted, 
she hissed, she squawked, in  the moonlight she mocked, 
on Pike's Peak, in moonlight, as fog lifted. 
 

For and in Honor of Paula Swanson
And Contest: Back to Back
Copyright © | Year Posted 2011

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Brown Avatar
March 21, 2011 at 10:25 AM
A heartfelt congratulations to you John for your win in Paula's contest "Back To Back". Love, Carol
Muzzey Avatar
March 21, 2011 at 8:01 AM
A wonderful write, I enjoyed the read. Congratulations on your win. Caryl
Poet Avatar
March 20, 2011 at 12:52 PM
Excellent Pantoum here,John!Congrats on your win---kashinath
Horsman Avatar
March 19, 2011 at 12:55 AM
enjoyed this first time round, John, gets even better the more one reads. congrats on this awesome Pantoum. Harry
Mannan Avatar
March 18, 2011 at 8:23 PM
Many warm congrats for this win dear John.
Sweetheart Avatar
March 18, 2011 at 3:47 PM
Congrats Moses on your wonderful win in Paula's Pantoum contest my friend.. a vibrant write.. enjoy with luv..
Richards Avatar
March 18, 2011 at 12:40 PM
Not only I find some humor, but I love the personification of this delightful look at nature....not so easy to do in the pantoum format!! Great job, John....love it!! I can picture the fog lifting over Pike's Peak!!
Horne Avatar
March 18, 2011 at 11:55 AM
Excellent poem, John - love it. Many congrats on your win : )
Aul Avatar
March 14, 2011 at 11:01 AM
Good luck in the contest....This type can get confusing the longer the poem.....George
Sweetheart Avatar
March 14, 2011 at 7:00 AM
Ultra dramatic read full of lovely dialogue to enhance this contest entry Moses.. good luck my friend.. truly awesome and creative technique here with a wonderful story line.. luv
Brown Avatar
March 14, 2011 at 6:23 AM
After a very super weekend I am back at the soup reading. I enjoyed reading your poetry this morning John. There are so many diverse writers here and I am so happy I am able to read most of them. Have a wonderful week and may you find what you are looking for in life and in your writing. The best to you in the contest. Love, Carol
Horsman Avatar
March 14, 2011 at 12:44 AM
there's no telling these witches John, excellent poem this, thoroughtly enjoyed this. good luck in contest. Harry
Onclaud Avatar
March 13, 2011 at 8:26 PM
oh dear, john!! i am enthralled by this stirring and haunting piece with a meesage that people can't accept their own unkind behavior... best of winning wishes to you! :) huggs, nette
Falotico Avatar
March 13, 2011 at 4:44 PM
This so good!!! you have done this contest right!! Thank you so much for your kind comments...Michael
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March 13, 2011 at 4:03 PM
Wow, this is awesome, John. I could see the witch rebelling throughout your write so clearly. You made great use of the pantuom form too. The wicked witch of the East made a cool topic. Isn't it funny how some can't see their own ugliness? Wishing you success in Paula's contest, John. I haven't been able to finish mine -- hard form, but you did it so well! Love, Carolyn
Anderson Avatar
March 13, 2011 at 3:24 PM
Very nice poem...good luck in the contest...Jimmy
Kendrick Avatar
March 13, 2011 at 1:42 PM
Good luck in the contest with this sure winner...I am glad that I am not going to that wedding...Thanks for stopping by and commenting on my work..Sara
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