Picture Perfect: At Sea

Thunder rumbled overhead and lightning split the grey sky,
As the little boat rocked with the rolling waves;
Salt water and icy rain soaked him,
Washing the puke stains from his clinging clothes.
As he prayed, the bitter taste of vomit and a strange stench,
Like rotting flesh and fish, made him retch again. 
Then, his heart almost stopped as he spotted the sea serpent, 
when it reared up, its neck as tall as a lighthouse 
and its gaping mouth like a vast cavern full of stalactites and stalagmites.
Face-to-face with the prehistoric-looking predator, 
He wondered who would believe he’d seen such a creature…

And then he screamed in agony as jagged teeth ripped at his flesh…

For Andrea’s Picture Perfect contest
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Duncan Avatar
August 29, 2013 at 5:59 PM
Awesome jack ;} reminds me of " Life of PI,,, check it out on u tube ;} I've watched it two 1/2 times now, 3rd time I got up to wash dishes, cook dinner ;} I love your story up there ;} Congrats on your win too ;}
Ryerson Avatar
August 25, 2013 at 3:07 AM
Wow Jack, what a story!...I was totally mesmerized...Well deserved win! - Tim
Jones Avatar
August 24, 2013 at 5:49 PM
Congratulations on your outstanding win
A  Avatar
August 22, 2013 at 9:05 PM
CONGRATULATIONS!!! JACK, Picture awesome Perfect. LOVE ~SKAT~
A   Avatar
August 22, 2013 at 8:02 PM
Hello Jack, talk about a picture perfect poem. I love it.. congrats in Andrea's contest...luv...LINDA
Dietrich Avatar
August 22, 2013 at 3:03 PM
OMG, Jack. You wrote me one that was not short!!! So I did not have a clue this was yours. It is so interesting to me that no matter what you write, it always somehow manages to get onto my winners' list. A well deserved win in my contest. Your poem was well crafted and very descriptive. Congratulations.
Arowolo Avatar
August 22, 2013 at 2:47 PM
Lovely and wonderful piece....Very captivating,my dear friend..Congrats on your superb win in this contest...
Lamoureux Avatar
August 22, 2013 at 12:09 PM
My oh my, is this ever good! Congratulations.
Kendrick Avatar
August 22, 2013 at 11:31 AM
Congrats on your great win..Sara
Neels Avatar
August 22, 2013 at 7:37 AM
Oh my goodness Jack, lovely piece. Your imagery is just perfect on this one. Wishing you all the best for the contest :) lfde Wilma
Haick Avatar
August 21, 2013 at 10:12 PM
Awesome!! Definitely should be an excerpt from a future novel, Jack! A winner for sure, not a doubt!! xx Annalise
Michael Ikechukwu Avatar
August 20, 2013 at 11:32 AM
Being a sailor, I feel the suspenseful intesity in this piece. You csn check out my PICTURE PERFECT penned for thesame competition. Good luck, love, always...Michael.
Babcock Avatar
August 19, 2013 at 1:47 PM
Loved the suspense in this story but not the thought of vomit LOL . Nice one Jack BUT did he get away??? love phyl
Kendrick Avatar
August 17, 2013 at 8:05 AM
Well at least you lived to tell the story..LOL..Enjoyed reading this one today..I am glad that I chose it to read..Thanks for the visits..Sara
Sivey Avatar
August 16, 2013 at 9:13 PM
This is a glorious write my friend, I just love how your build up the poem on and on until the climax at the end with a very large heightened last line! I really enjoyed reading this delightful poem this evening! What a brilliant piece, Great Work!!
Adams Avatar
August 16, 2013 at 8:20 PM
,,,and you painted quite the picture...good luck in the contest! :)
La France Avatar
August 16, 2013 at 4:42 PM
Soup mail, again, Constance
La France Avatar
August 16, 2013 at 4:01 PM
Soup Mail sent, Constancel
La France Avatar
August 16, 2013 at 3:53 PM
Jack, wow, now this is a picture perfect for sure, wonderful, best of luck with this super entry for the contest, I have to do good to beat this one! Constance
Onclaud Avatar
August 16, 2013 at 3:11 PM
jack!... a racy, descriptive piece that makes the senses reel.. what a powerful story!..:) huggs
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