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For the Love or Pain Poetry Contest of Ink Empress

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I think I’ll pluck today petals of pain No “He loves me, he loves me not” will I innocently repeat. Dashed dreams follow me and hope, a broken sparrow lies bleeding at my feet. Oh, when did my fantasies vanish into gloomy skies? “Pain today. Pain tomorrow.” As I pluck each petal, I find hopelessness has wilted each one that falls away. Is there any gladness I might borrow? I think it matters not what I say. I know enough by now of bodily woe. Petals, once so pretty, where did you all go? Once the bright amethysts of my glad spring, the flower’s petals now drop to the ground like withered leaves of late autumn. Fall ing Fall ing Fall ing one by one by one. Chronic pain is no easier than any mental anguish I have known. My lot in life; the burden given me: my l a r g e s t sorrow - “Pain today; pain tomorrow."

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Paula Goldsmith

Date: 11/3/2024 9:34:00 AM

Back with Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your wonderful yet sad write again. Life comes with many questions that have No answers... Have a wonderful day writing away.............

Ink Empress

Date: 11/2/2024 4:24:00 AM

Dear sweet andrea, i see youv really written one that i will feel and enjoy, and really be in awe of! The arrangement of lines to the imagery and depth of emotions youv conveyed here in such a poetic manner really made my heart feel so much! Especially the ending! Its not easy when pain is sometimes our everyday reality! I felt the ending as well as how youv written “ Is there any gladness I might borrow? I think it matters not what I say.” well this is a FAVE! Congratulations on your win~

John Read

Date: 10/27/2024 11:33:00 AM

I felt your pain Andrea, your poem speaks volumes, hopefully the pain will ease,God bless you.

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 10/27/2024 11:35:00 AM

I think not but thanks for your empathy.

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 10/27/2024 7:44:00 AM

Andrea my friend, you pain is heartbreaking and my thoughts have always been with you as we did chat about your health some time back. I am so sorry, but your poem is incredible and especially your comparison to a 'broken sparrow lies bleeding at my feet' - Lots of love to you dear Andrea, blessings, and hugs, Jennifer.

Joe Maverick

Date: 10/26/2024 10:56:00 AM

You write strong and plain on aspects of pain.' Yet from such petals, I advise you refrain..' And I don't nean sing.' Thats not on my brain.' I want to hear of a betterment maybe? to God I'll complain' Shall I dirge and digress say This whole things a mess.? It does so occur to Me I do confess.' Yet how i'm answered? Its Like foretelling rain' often i've wavered.' Or felt a good answer was close.' Then when I left off My ministering ' and much later I'd see the work of His Ghost.)

Paige Hind

Date: 10/25/2024 3:44:00 PM

I am sorry for your struggles; made for a beauty of a poem....it's not in vain! <3

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 10/26/2024 1:33:00 AM

Thanks, Paige

Sam Kauffman

Date: 10/24/2024 11:03:00 AM

"Petals of pain like a broken sparrow." What an amazing image to start this amazing poem, Andrea. Your words immediately drew me into your "pain" and its devastating effect on life. I think this is one of your best poems. The formatting visually highlights a journey with pain. Love the metaphoric petals. As you have said "I think I smell a winner." Blessings of comfort and healing to you!

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 10/24/2024 8:02:00 PM

Thanks Sam. I really enjoyed writing on something that was close to my heart.

Janice Canerdy

Date: 10/24/2024 6:15:00 AM

Andrea, you have captured the very essence of pain in this expressive, descriptive poem. Janice

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 10/24/2024 8:01:00 PM

Thanks so much, Janice

Joanna Daniel

Date: 10/24/2024 2:05:00 AM

Very painful to read, I wonder how you go through so much pain, Andrea...

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 10/24/2024 8:01:00 PM

I have cut down on exercising. Strange sensations go down my back, so I feel most comfortable lying on my bed. A good thing I love TV. Haha.

Michael Tor

Date: 10/23/2024 11:12:00 PM

Andrea I know to well your situation and these words I know are written from experiencing real Chronic pain. I still deal with my burning pain on my feet. I treat it with cool spring water that helps. In the beginning it was almost intolerable. I will never forget laying on my bed and praying for God not to heal me but just to be able to tolerate the burning feeling on my feet. I must confess this pain was so painful suicide became an option for me. Two minutes later the Lord Jesus made it ...

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 10/24/2024 7:59:00 PM

Yes. Someday, Michael. Gives us something to hope for. I know you too have a really rare thing that cannot be helped.

Michael Tor
Date: 10/23/2024 11:17:00 PM

tolerable. I then went and bought three large containers to fill with cold water from a near by spring. I would have to soak my feet before going to bed and through out the day. I was able to manage the pain. Now I realize that when I am around WiFi or my computer the feet start burning when I go to my room and I soak them in my room I have much less pain being away from radiation. I hope and have prayed for you many times to end your pain. Someday Andrea there won't be any pain. Hugs...

Evelyn Judy Buehler

Date: 10/23/2024 10:10:00 PM

This poem is superb, and such a fine contesr contender, Andrea. Chronic pain is very difficult, yet,with each tomorrow, there's always hope. Blessings and hugs.

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 10/26/2024 1:44:00 AM

Thanks, dear

Valsa George

Date: 10/23/2024 10:00:00 PM

"Dashed dreams follow me and hope, a broken sparrow lies bleeding at my feet." Great lines. Life is never easy. Grappling with body pain is tortuous. But having emotional pain is even more gruesome. All the Best in the contest, dear Andrea.

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 10/26/2024 1:50:00 AM

For me I have not had emotional pain to match physical. Emotional finally goes away! Thanks, Valsa

Miranda Hawley

Date: 10/23/2024 7:25:00 PM

My first thought of this was this sounds like a divorce tail, but then you talk of pain, as in health problems that you are having. This is totally depressing for two different reasons. Reason one: Its just sad, a really sad story. Reason two: IF I wanted to enter this contest, I know that whatever I have or don't would have to compete with this. I think you will easily win this one.

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 10/24/2024 7:58:00 PM

Thanks , Miranda. It is so nice to write on a topic close to your heart. Maybe you could try the love theme?

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 10/23/2024 2:16:00 PM

What a wonderful yet sad write. Hope you are doing OK. Life is not always easy. Sending blessing to you... Have a blessed Autumn day writing away...............

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 10/24/2024 7:56:00 PM

Same old same old. I sometimes wonder why I would even care to keep living. Love life but also crave the day I can be normal again in my next life!

Silent One

Date: 10/23/2024 12:38:00 PM

I wonder if she loves me anymore or did she ever love me.. but im tired of plucking petals.. This is a clever take on the contest... love always seems to be followed by pain... but then love comes again....

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 10/26/2024 1:51:00 AM

Thanks, Silent One