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For the Love or Pain Poetry Contest of Ink Empress

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Petals of Pain

I think I’ll pluck today
            petals of pain
No “He loves me, he loves me not”
               will I innocently repeat.
Dashed dreams follow me
          and hope, a broken sparrow
                  lies bleeding at my feet.

Oh, when did my fantasies 
      vanish into gloomy skies?
         “Pain today. Pain tomorrow.”
  As I pluck each petal, I find
hopelessness has wilted 
           each one
                            that falls away.
Is there any gladness I might borrow?
    I think it matters not what I say.

I know enough by now of bodily woe.
  Petals, once so pretty, 
                       where did you all go?
  Once the bright amethysts of my glad spring,
             the flower’s petals now drop
                                               to the ground
     like withered leaves of late autumn.
       Fall   ing
                      Fall   ing
                                                

                                   Fall  ing
                                           one by one by one.
Chronic pain is no easier 
           than any mental anguish I have known.
My lot in life; the burden given me: 
             my l a r g e s t  sorrow -
                             “Pain today; pain tomorrow."
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Goldsmith Avatar
November 3, 2024 at 9:34 AM
Back with Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your wonderful yet sad write  again. Life comes with many questions that have No answers... Have a wonderful day writing away.............
Empress Avatar
November 2, 2024 at 4:24 AM
Dear sweet andrea, i see youv really written one that i will feel and enjoy, and really be in awe of! The arrangement of lines to the imagery and depth of emotions youv conveyed here in such a poetic manner really made my heart feel so much! Especially the ending! Its not easy when pain is sometimes our everyday reality! I felt the ending as well as how youv written “ Is there any gladness I might borrow? I think it matters not what I say.” well this is a FAVE! Congratulations on your win~
Read Avatar
October 27, 2024 at 11:33 AM
I felt your pain Andrea, your poem speaks volumes, hopefully the pain will ease,God bless you.
Dietrich Avatar
October 27, 2024 at 11:35 AM
I think not but thanks for your empathy.
Proxenos Avatar
October 27, 2024 at 7:44 AM
Andrea my friend, you pain is heartbreaking and my thoughts have always been with you as we did chat about your health some time back. I am so sorry, but your poem is incredible and especially your comparison to a 'broken sparrow lies bleeding at my feet' - Lots of love to you dear Andrea, blessings, and hugs, Jennifer.
Maverick Avatar
October 26, 2024 at 10:56 AM
You write strong and plain on aspects of pain.' Yet from such petals, I advise you refrain..' And I don't nean sing.' Thats not on my brain.' I want to hear of a betterment maybe? to God I'll complain' Shall I dirge and digress say This whole things a mess.? It does so occur to Me I do confess.' Yet how i'm answered? Its Like foretelling rain' often i've wavered.' Or felt a good answer was close.' Then when I left off My ministering ' and much later I'd see the work of His Ghost.)
Hind Avatar
October 25, 2024 at 3:44 PM
I am sorry for your struggles; made for a beauty of a poem....it's not in vain! <3
Dietrich Avatar
October 26, 2024 at 1:33 AM
Thanks, Paige
Kauffman Avatar
October 24, 2024 at 11:03 AM
"Petals of pain like a broken sparrow." What an amazing image to start this amazing poem, Andrea. Your words immediately drew me into your "pain" and its devastating effect on life. I think this is one of your best poems. The formatting visually highlights a journey with pain. Love the metaphoric petals. As you have said "I think I smell a winner." Blessings of comfort and healing to you!
Dietrich Avatar
October 24, 2024 at 8:02 PM
Thanks Sam. I really enjoyed writing on something that was close to my heart.
Canerdy Avatar
October 24, 2024 at 6:15 AM
Andrea, you have captured the very essence of pain in this expressive, descriptive poem. Janice
Dietrich Avatar
October 24, 2024 at 8:01 PM
Thanks so much, Janice
Daniel Avatar
October 24, 2024 at 2:05 AM
Very painful to read, I wonder how you go through so much pain, Andrea...
Dietrich Avatar
October 24, 2024 at 8:01 PM
I have cut down on exercising. Strange sensations go down my back, so I feel most comfortable lying on my bed. A good thing I love TV. Haha.
Tor Avatar
October 23, 2024 at 11:12 PM
Andrea I know to well your situation and these words I know are written from experiencing real Chronic pain. I still deal with my burning pain on my feet. I treat it with cool spring water that helps. In the beginning it was almost intolerable. I will never forget laying on my bed and praying for God not to heal me but just to be able to tolerate the burning feeling on my feet. I must confess this pain was so painful suicide became an option for me. Two minutes later the Lord Jesus made it ...
Dietrich Avatar
October 24, 2024 at 7:59 PM
Yes. Someday, Michael. Gives us something to hope for. I know you too have a really rare thing that cannot be helped.
Tor Avatar
October 23, 2024 at 11:17 PM
tolerable. I then went and bought three large containers to fill with cold water from a near by spring. I would have to soak my feet before going to bed and through out the day. I was able to manage the pain. Now I realize that when I am around WiFi or my computer the feet start burning when I go to my room and I soak them in my room I have much less pain being away from radiation. I hope and have prayed for you many times to end your pain. Someday Andrea there won't be any pain. Hugs...
Buehler Avatar
October 23, 2024 at 10:10 PM
This poem is superb, and such a fine contesr contender, Andrea. Chronic pain is very difficult, yet,with each tomorrow, there's always hope. Blessings and hugs.
Dietrich Avatar
October 26, 2024 at 1:44 AM
Thanks, dear
George Avatar
October 23, 2024 at 10:00 PM
"Dashed dreams follow me and hope, a broken sparrow lies bleeding at my feet." Great lines. Life is never easy. Grappling with body pain is tortuous. But having emotional pain is even more gruesome. All the Best in the contest, dear Andrea.
Dietrich Avatar
October 26, 2024 at 1:50 AM
For me I have not had emotional pain to match physical. Emotional finally goes away! Thanks, Valsa
Hawley Avatar
October 23, 2024 at 7:25 PM
My first thought of this was this sounds like a divorce tail, but then you talk of pain, as in health problems that you are having. This is totally depressing for two different reasons. Reason one: Its just sad, a really sad story. Reason two: IF I wanted to enter this contest, I know that whatever I have or don't would have to compete with this. I think you will easily win this one.
Dietrich Avatar
October 24, 2024 at 7:58 PM
Thanks , Miranda. It is so nice to write on a topic close to your heart. Maybe you could try the love theme?
Goldsmith Avatar
October 23, 2024 at 2:16 PM
What a wonderful yet sad write. Hope you are doing OK. Life is not always easy. Sending blessing to you... Have a blessed Autumn day writing away...............
Dietrich Avatar
October 24, 2024 at 7:56 PM
Same old same old. I sometimes wonder why I would even care to keep living. Love life but also crave the day I can be normal again in my next life!
One Avatar
October 23, 2024 at 12:38 PM
I wonder if she loves me anymore or did she ever love me.. but im tired of plucking petals.. This is a clever take on the contest... love always seems to be followed by pain... but then love comes again....
Dietrich Avatar
October 26, 2024 at 1:51 AM
Thanks, Silent One
Roper Avatar
October 23, 2024 at 12:01 PM
Love the way you described your pain
Dietrich Avatar
October 24, 2024 at 7:55 PM
Thanks, Eve
Narain Avatar
October 23, 2024 at 10:49 AM
WOW, EXCELLENT POEM. lots of imagery in the poem.
Dietrich Avatar
October 23, 2024 at 11:25 AM
thanks, Jay I really had fun with this one.
May Avatar
October 23, 2024 at 7:22 AM
"and hope, a broken sparrow lies bleeding at my feet.", I like how you did Falling, Well penned
Dietrich Avatar
October 23, 2024 at 11:26 AM
thanks, Joseph. I guess I am doing sad poems this week!
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