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Penny-Posing Loafer

You penny-posing loafer You’re worn, through and through Like us, puh-lease say we’re over Before I fly-salt your food You’re worn, through and through Like the new burn-holes in your pants? Before I fly-salt your food, Why not leave as I passively ask? Like the new burn-holes in your pants, The gap between us is HUGE Why not leave as I passively ask? Walk out in your tack-filled shoes The gap between us is HUGE Like us? Puh-lease, say we’re over Walk out in your tack-filled shoes You penny-posing loafer 9/11/12 (fly-salt: to sprinkle flies like salt onto food; puh-lease: please ennunciated) For Rhonda & Cyndi's Pantoum Contest

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Date: 4/22/2013 7:37:00 PM
boo....did i scare you...Pd
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Date: 9/27/2012 8:33:00 PM
Hi Susan, oh I'm so sorry for taking so long to get to this page! Awesome poem in every way, and YES you are right, pantoums are a challenge! Liked the style and oomph of this one. Thanks for the entry and congrats on the win. Hugs, Cyndi
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Date: 9/26/2012 9:28:00 AM
haha! cool one!congratulations :)
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Date: 9/26/2012 5:21:00 AM
A belated congratulations on your win in Rhonda and Cyndi's "Penny Pantoums" contest Susan. Love, Carol
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Date: 9/25/2012 3:18:00 PM
Congrats on your winning work..Sara
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Date: 9/25/2012 11:20:00 AM
Very GOOD Pantoum here Susan!Congratulations on your win!
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Date: 9/25/2012 9:48:00 AM
CONGRATS SUSAN ON A TREMENDOUS THIRD PLACE WIN LUV ..
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Date: 9/25/2012 8:48:00 AM
Soo beautiful! I love it!! My hearty congratulations on your win my dear Susan!!! hugs:) Leonora
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Date: 9/25/2012 6:13:00 AM
congrats on a great win Susan
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Date: 9/25/2012 1:06:00 AM
Congratulations well done and a well deserved win but please tell me what is "fly -salt"? xx
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Date: 9/17/2012 4:08:00 PM
Wow Susan...that's telling em! Very nice. Best wishes for the contest. Thanks for comments and visiting and for the placement in your contest. One love. Joy Wells
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Date: 9/17/2012 1:43:00 PM
back for anther read, susan... thanks too for the honor of being on your list in the walls contest.. you inspired me so!..:) huggs!
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Date: 9/15/2012 4:57:00 PM
Good luck in Rhonda and Cyndi's contest..Winner for sure..Interesting topic that you used..Thanks for stopping by..Sara
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Date: 9/15/2012 2:57:00 PM
love this strong and witty write, Susan. I had to chuckle about fly-salt (haven't heard of that before,lol)
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Date: 9/14/2012 10:11:00 AM
excellent entry into the contest. good luck
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Date: 9/12/2012 2:02:00 PM
a crisp take on the theme, susan... enjoyed the light banter and word choices!... winning wishes and huggs!..:)
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Date: 9/12/2012 9:50:00 AM
nice pantoum Susan ....enjoyed...winning wishes in the contest...love...Joseph
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Date: 9/11/2012 9:47:00 PM
It's nice to have time down here now but sad for Joe driving so long again on the road. I hope to be done here soon. I'm watching the Voice. HOw about you?
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Date: 9/11/2012 9:46:00 PM
very very cool one, Susan. You have a unique way of stating things in the modern jargon!! I bet this one does well with rhonda and Cyndi. Glad to see you did a new one. YAYYYYY
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Date: 9/11/2012 6:31:00 PM
good luck nice write BES
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Date: 9/11/2012 1:03:00 PM
At least you had a subject as depressing as it is. I find your honesty entertaining as well as vindictive and childish.
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Date: 9/11/2012 11:19:00 AM
Very well written B.E.S. - Hope you will win the contest. Good Luck!! Have a beautiful day. oxox love Anne-Lise :)
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