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Picture from the Manx I museum

The cottage in the picture is a traditional manx stone cottage and there is a 'living museum' at a village called Cregneash which is open to the public

THE SALTY SEA DOG My late uncle spent many years at sea I can still recall every single line on his aging face His weather beaten skin had a patina built up from exposure to the elements, it reminded me of tanned dark mahogany leather Those piercing blue eyes, still as bright as the sunshine would hold my gaze as he told me tales of his adventures He passed away many years ago but he instilled in me a love and respect for the sea which remains to this very day Fiction write Patina Contest Sponsored by Anthony Slausen July 1st 2018

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Warren Doll

Date: 7/2/2018 6:59:00 PM

So descriptive and well written, Jan. Good Luck in the contest. // Warren

Jan Allison
Date: 7/3/2018 2:10:00 PM

Thanks Warren:-) hugs Jan xx

Agnes Krampe

Date: 7/2/2018 5:28:00 PM

Love your take on the patina theme, Jan. Nice idea.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/2/2018 5:32:00 PM

Thanks Agnes:-) hugs Jan xx

Rajat Kanti Chakrabarty

Date: 7/2/2018 8:59:00 AM

I can visualize...a delectable poem. Liked it,Jan. Love>Rajat

Jan Allison
Date: 7/2/2018 1:04:00 PM

Thanks Rajat:-) hugs Jan xx

Harry Horsman

Date: 7/2/2018 5:11:00 AM

I also had a great granddad lost at sea, Jan, Being he was a trawlerman base in Grimsby. this poem although being fiction epitomises real life. You have created a wonderful poem, good luck in the contest.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/2/2018 1:04:00 PM

Aww it is such a dangerous way to make a living Harry, I can still recall in 2000 there was a trawler' the solway harvester' lost off the Isle of Man 7 crew perished and it was heartbreaking to see the raised wreck rust in the harbour whilst legal proceedings went on for many years. I doubt the poem will place in the contest but I write from the heart and whatever comes into my head as a theme I go with:-) hugs Jan xx

Mick Talbot

Date: 7/2/2018 3:19:00 AM

Of the sea, it's part of me. Took a grandad, a trawlerman, my mum's dad. I never got to meet him. Bet there would have been tales he would have told. Of days at sea, its giant swells, of trawlermen bold. Alas the only grandparent I can remember, was his wife, my granny Hebblethwaite, she died in 1953. My dad was a WW1 orphan, his dad killed in the war and his mum died before the end of it. Sad, pleasures I know I missed. Sad but a wonderfully evocative piece for me, thank you. hugs Mick

Jan Allison
Date: 7/2/2018 12:58:00 PM

thanks for sharing Mick:-) hugs Jan xx

Gershon Wolf

Date: 7/1/2018 10:02:00 PM

Salty Sea Dog -- whoa! Great title! … What's remarkable, Jan, is that this poem just drips with the sincerity of a young lady writing about her revered late uncle...And yet, it's a fiction write...It's the mark of a gifted, talented poetess to be able to pull this off. Bravo! ! ~ Gershon

Jan Allison
Date: 7/2/2018 2:40:00 AM

you are too kind my friend:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/1/2018 2:34:00 PM

Jan, that was a cool way to do the contest entry, Jan. I have no clue about Patina!! Something to do with rust and a color of rust. Love this title too, Salty Sea Dog!

Jan Allison
Date: 7/2/2018 2:40:00 AM

Thanks Andrea it was challenging to think out of the box:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 7/1/2018 2:20:00 PM

- He had a lot of knowledge ... and certainly many "fairy tales" to tell - A great small story, Jan - I can see his weather beaten skin and wise eyes - Good luck in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison
Date: 7/2/2018 2:35:00 AM

Thanks so much Anne Lise:-) We can learn so much from the older generation, if only folks took some time to listen:-) hugs Jan xx

Lin Lane

Date: 7/1/2018 1:08:00 PM

Your poem and the museum photo brought it all to life for me. I imagine many men who lived on your island had skin of such patina. A wonderfully clear descriptive write, Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/2/2018 2:35:00 AM

We both do that Lin!!! I am often inspired by contests but don't enter them for various reasons:-) hugs Jan xx

Lin Lane
Date: 7/1/2018 2:57:00 PM

Write to please yourself. It's the truest form of poetry.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/1/2018 2:00:00 PM

There are some wonderful postcards and pictures of the old manx fishermen Lin. Not sure if the sponsor will like it but I rarely place in his contests anyway just got inspired at the last minute:-) hugs Jan x

Casarah Nance

Date: 7/1/2018 11:48:00 AM

Very good description! Took me awhile to think of a patina poem, just posted mine too. I like how you used it to describe his appearance.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/1/2018 12:07:00 PM

Thanks Cas, its quite hard to think out of the box and not write about patina on a bronze object but I doubt it will place in the contest anyway:-) hugs jan xx