Patina

Behind the counter smiling pleasantly
at all the customers, she was a doll.
Dark velvet hair and brown-green eyes had she -
eyes big and bright inside a face quite small.
I asked her name that day. It was a name
I’d never heard before, and yet it fit
this girl so well. Her name was like the frame
of cheer she wore. I will not forget it!
A name so rare, I’ve yet to ever find
another soul who has it, for she said
“Patina” and for me the name meant kind,
petite, and pretty! It’s been in my head
forever since I made that gal my bride.
It’s now Patina always at my side!

July 30, 2018
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Gauthier Avatar
August 13, 2018 at 6:17 AM
How sweet. A beautifully penned poem, Andrea.
Inman Avatar
July 28, 2018 at 8:43 AM
A very lovely way to end my visit with you today Andrea. Enjoyed your company. Be well.
Delaney Avatar
July 25, 2018 at 4:26 AM
Congratulations Andra: another sweet love story. Hugz SuZ
Gentry Avatar
July 24, 2018 at 4:04 AM
Congratulations on your #1 win. Beautiful. Well done!
Marcum Wong Avatar
July 23, 2018 at 12:29 PM
You always bring uniqueness to your creations Andrea, which is why your work is so celebrated. Loved this piece! Congratulations on your first placement!
Johnson Avatar
July 12, 2018 at 5:28 PM
Did we turn lesbian? :) Love this poem. Your interpretation of patina is so different from the direction I would have gone. I really like the direction you went. You brought such delicate sweetness to it. :)
Dietrich Avatar
July 12, 2018 at 7:44 PM
too bad the contest sponsor did not think so. haha
Krampe Avatar
July 5, 2018 at 6:48 PM
Unique take on the contest prompt :)
One Avatar
July 3, 2018 at 12:46 PM
You do sonnets very well.. great choice for the contest..
Chakrabarty Avatar
July 2, 2018 at 9:06 AM
this patina is not superficial but a real thing with heart.....An unusual exploration of the theme. Liked it.Love.>Rajat
Gondolf Avatar
July 2, 2018 at 7:11 AM
A nice poem and story, Andrea. This is indeed a unique take on the theme and I’m sure it will be one of a kind. Best of luck. John
Talbot Avatar
July 2, 2018 at 3:23 AM
Wow, caught me out, great ending, great piece! Good luck in the contest, Mick
Haight Avatar
July 1, 2018 at 9:53 PM
I love where you took the theme, Andrea, and how well your Sonnet flowed with its lovely story about 'Patina'! Best wishes for the contest. Hugs, Sandra
Parker Avatar
July 1, 2018 at 10:45 AM
very interesting how you approached this Andrea, love the concept...good luck in the contest
Pandit Avatar
July 1, 2018 at 5:49 AM
Enjoyed reading this story, Andrea. Expertly written Sonnet..you made Patina kind and pretty..now she's alive!
Allison Avatar
July 1, 2018 at 3:36 AM
what a sweet interpretation of the theme Andrea:-) makes me smile about our pronunciation variations as to my ear doll and small don't rhyme :-):-) hugs jan xx
Dietrich Avatar
July 1, 2018 at 2:00 PM
I think that is why so many British actors can easily imitate Americans, like the actors who played Dexter (I recently found out he is British) and the guy from England who plays Rick on Walking Dead. I think it must be harder for Americans to play British parts!
Dietrich Avatar
July 1, 2018 at 1:51 PM
Jan, you Brits have a vowel sound not used in American English. I do not know how it came to be discarded but I believe it's the sound found in doll. For us that is indeed the same sound as in small. Altogether the actual vowel sounds of American English total 13 but for British English with that added vowel sound, the number is 14. I have tried to make that sound and cannot produce it!
Lamoureux Avatar
July 1, 2018 at 1:53 AM
What a lovely poem and name. Hugs Rick.
Godwin Avatar
July 1, 2018 at 1:36 AM
Hey, Sweetheart- look at me!, the unavailable one commenting first on this delightful tale. I am totally fascinated by the rhyme and rhythm I both felt and heard as I read it aloud (twice.) I'm going to return and study this impressive poem some more. Miss you. Love ... CayCay
Dietrich Avatar
July 1, 2018 at 1:57 PM
Thanks for reading it, Caycay. I deliberately went off meter in line 8 so I could say what I wanted to say there! So if you read it again, just know it's not perfect iambic meter in that one part! Miss you!!
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