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One day as I threw stones into my river one day as I threw stones into my river the first time I laid eyes on you you asked if you could throw some too one day as I threw stones into my river We spent our childhood playing by the river we spent our childhood playing by the river we'd swim, skip rocks, play hide and seek you'd scold me, "Close your eyes, don't peek!" we spent our childhood playing by the river In school you liked to borrow my old pencil in school you liked to borrow my old pencil the other girls all wrote in pen they teased you, back when we were ten but still you liked to borrow my old pencil We grew up, you and I, down by our river we grew up, you and I, down by our river the trees all sighed as though they knew that chilly day I first kissed you we grew up, you and I, down by our river One day the doctor came to your front door one day the doctor came to your front door your folks sat down to speak with him your mama cried, your pa looked grim the day the doctor came to your front door I sailed a paper boat down your big river I sailed a paper boat down your big river "I miss you, friend" is all I wrote, in pencil, on that paper boat I sailed a paper boat down your big river

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Date: 10/26/2021 2:29:00 PM
John, I have chills....an awesome write; your form, where you repeat the 1st line of each stanza is very powerful. Blessings, Paulette
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Date: 10/12/2021 9:03:00 PM
this really happened to you?? I see your note to Jennifer. Although it is very real sounding, I still was thinking you invented it??
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John Watt
Date: 10/12/2021 10:01:00 PM
No, this was a purely fictional write. It was inspired by a James Taylor song.
Date: 10/12/2021 9:02:00 PM
Oh my goodness, here is one of the poems i never realized you had written. I'm so sorry I missed this. It's utterly poignant and so touching, John. Whatever inspired it and what made you use this form of repeating the first line? Is it a new form? Thanks for letting me know if this.
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Date: 10/12/2021 10:04:00 PM
The repeating lines is more of a lyrical device, coming in folk songs and the blues. I can imagine someone singing this as a sad ballad, a la "Clementine". Thank you so much for your kind hearted words.
Date: 9/22/2021 6:41:00 PM
Precious moments and memories drift along the river, the river that belonged to you and your sweet friend. Oh my ! Your thoughts touch my heart so deeply. This is beautiful, lyrical and tender, all at the same time. The way you bring the reader in, leaves me in complete awe. Your pen is golden, my dear friend. Many wonderful blessings to you. Hugs, Brandy
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John Watt
Date: 9/23/2021 10:52:00 AM
Thank you, dear Brandy, for understanding the depth and gist of my words, and for leaving me with such an uplifting reply. My spirit is encouraged, and my heart is smiling. Hugs ~ John
Date: 9/1/2021 3:03:00 PM
That first love never really leaves entirely, I can imagine the tune as longing and lonely, very emotive write, John~
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John Watt
Date: 9/14/2021 3:19:00 PM
You're so right about first love (and about the tune!) Thanks for stopping by, Michelle.
Date: 8/28/2021 9:52:00 PM
Wow, what a moving tribute to your childhood sweetheart!
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John Watt
Date: 8/29/2021 11:37:00 PM
Thank you for the read and kind words, Jennifer.
Date: 8/28/2021 12:16:00 PM
Such cute childhood memories which developed into young love memories but how sad that these memories so warmly enfolded within you ended with tears and a doctors visit to your best friend's house. but you still remember these memories fondly as you sail a paper boat down the same river where you first kissed and wrote on it in pencil, perhaps evev one you had kept, " miss you, friend".Hope you are well John, Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.
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John Watt
Date: 8/29/2021 11:36:00 PM
Yes, you nailed it, my friend. Always a treat to see your comments, dear friend. Blessings and hugs ~ John
Date: 8/28/2021 8:59:00 AM
So sad and emotional a poem dear John... Such memorable moments of a beautiful childhood..captured so well... Loved your title too... God bless... ~ Ani
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Date: 8/29/2021 11:35:00 PM
Thank you, Ani. I'm glad this spoke to you. God bless ~ John
Date: 8/27/2021 7:59:00 PM
A sad yet beautiful lyric poem John, memories from a happy childhood friendship that tragically ended. All that needed to be said, you wrote on that paper boat… Belle
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Date: 8/29/2021 11:35:00 PM
I appreciate the kind words, Belle. Fortunately, this was a fictional write.

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