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Out of Your Mind

A light shines bright into the window I can not see A voice mumbles something like come with me I pulled the covers over my head then I took a peek I looked back at my husband who was fast asleep So I whispered come back later ready he will be

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Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 4/5/2010 6:02:00 AM

Congrats for the win. Well penned poem.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/24/2010 3:33:00 PM

Hey, you got a high place. Congratulations!

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen

Date: 3/23/2010 4:29:00 AM

Good thinking, (ha, ha) Faleshia, Congratulations on your win in New Contest: Out of this World Limericks! Sponsored by: Carolyn Devonshire, with this funny limerick. I’m doubling over with laughter! I must say, it is a fun way to start the day. Laughingly, Dane Ann

John Freeman

Date: 3/21/2010 11:10:00 AM

Congratulations on a much deserved win Faleshia. Agape, Moses

Robert A. Dufresne

Date: 3/20/2010 10:00:00 AM

Congrats to you Felishia. Funny!-Robert

Sue Mason

Date: 3/20/2010 9:18:00 AM

Congratulations on your win in Caroline's contest!

Jessica Arteaga

Date: 3/19/2010 11:18:00 PM

i would proly do the same o.0 take him not me! lol congrats!

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 3/19/2010 7:05:00 PM

A big congrats Faleshia on your winning poem and placement in the Limerick contest.. enjoy your special win..luv.. Linda-Marie

Joyce Johnson

Date: 3/19/2010 4:51:00 PM

Congratulations on your win with this great limerick. Joyce

James Fraser

Date: 3/19/2010 12:09:00 PM

Congratulations Faleshia on your fine win in Carolyn's wonderful contest >> James

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 3/19/2010 10:17:00 AM

Got a great laugh reading your limerick, Faleshia! Congrats on your success in my contest. Love, Carolyn

Blue Brain

Date: 3/12/2010 7:21:00 PM

he he nice!!!

Gerard Keogh Jr.

Date: 3/12/2010 3:05:00 PM

This has that disorientation that reminds me of those telling moments in the old Twilight Zone or the Outer Limits. I could see this as I read this! Thank you for your kind remarks. P.S. check out "peak" in line three. Might that be Peek instead? Regards, Gerard.

Brian Strand

Date: 3/12/2010 12:06:00 AM

Nice one Faleshia.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/11/2010 12:39:00 PM

hahaha. Is this an alien home invasion?? Cute one. LUv, Andrea

Sara Kendrick

Date: 3/11/2010 12:31:00 PM

Great out of space Limerick that should do well in the contest...Wish you much success..Keep the creative pen flowing. Sara

John Beam

Date: 3/11/2010 10:16:00 AM

thanks for comment very good limerick thanks for sharing AGREEING

Robb A. Kopp

Date: 3/11/2010 9:28:00 AM

Like I once told a shink," prove that they don't exist" then I'll admit to having a problem". Excellent write though.

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen

Date: 3/11/2010 8:50:00 AM

Wow! That makes you think! Good one. Thank you for sharing your words. (And thank you for your comments on my poetry as well.) Have a super Day! Lovingly, Dane Ann

Anthony Nutter

Date: 3/10/2010 4:36:00 PM

Scary little limerick, touches the hairs on my neck demanding attention. Nice write.

Krystal Cochrane

Date: 3/10/2010 4:25:00 PM

spooky, I like it. Well written. ~ KC