Our Interrupted Story

The rhapsody of duskfall’s sky pulses in irregular beats tonight ,as I gaze at dotted stars fleeting beyond this moment absent from, nonchalant about a life of earthly radiance… and summer’s flame caresses my body tingling clinging invading a certain quietus where my very soul weeps for your touch ghostly or vaporous , as I fold the last pile of clothes from the attic: the musk scent wafts around me, like a glide of a river fathomless like single immersed dive into an unknown eternity where your passing rakes my seasons-- hour after hour. 3/21/2018 Broken Wings’ Contest: Five Words, Please

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Date: 4/20/2018 11:15:00 PM
'Your passing rakes my seasons',,,,how uniquely expressed. Congrats. bbn
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Date: 4/9/2018 11:01:00 PM
A very touching write, nette. Congrats on your first place finish.
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Date: 4/2/2018 5:57:00 PM
Nette, congratulations on your win in my contest with this emotional and beautifully penned poem, your words drip with sadness, I have folded clothes too of a loved one gone, tears ~
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Date: 4/1/2018 9:28:00 AM
Very well written Nette! Congratulations for your top win :)
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Date: 4/1/2018 2:55:00 AM
Congratulations Nette, your poem sad but beautifully penned... Mick
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Date: 3/31/2018 7:57:00 PM
How lovely, nette. No doubt both reader and writer are winners here. Accolades of the first order are appropriate. IOW - Congratulations.
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Date: 3/31/2018 7:46:00 PM
A big congratulations to you Nette! I am not surprised you are on top ! :)
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Date: 3/23/2018 10:37:00 AM
Your poems always have an eloquence and breath-taking quality out of the ordinary. As enthralling and sad, this is a work of art. :) Not an easy challenge ! Well done!
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Date: 3/21/2018 3:23:00 PM
- Wonderfully described with your feelings, Nette - Best wishes in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 3/21/2018 2:50:00 PM
Oh, my emotions have been pierced with sorrow's feel! This delivered the feel of missing so poignantly that I will need time to shake it off. I'm sure this will fare well in the contest (well, they are VERY hard to predict, on 2nd thought). I won with me. Poetry hugs ... CayCay
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Date: 3/21/2018 12:53:00 PM
Excellent entry Nette, great work...
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Date: 3/21/2018 11:50:00 AM
You incorporated the words seamlessly in this excellent depiction..best for a win, nette.
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