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Other Side of the Track

Because she lived on the other side of the tracks Ashamed of the shameful ghetto of her raising Spending her time improving her dismal situation Seeking to improve her meager station in life. Ashamed of the shameful ghetto of her raising She studied hard and sought to look her best Seeking to improve her meager station in life She set out to conquer an unfriendly world. She studied hard and sought to look her best Developing poise and grace of the urbanite She set out to conquer an unfriendly world Certain that her efforts would bring success. Developing poise and grace of the urbanite Spending her time improving her dismal situation Certain that her efforts would bring success Because she lived on the other side of the tracks. Written June 18, 2021 [Modified Pantoum with no Rhyme]

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Sotto Poet

Date: 6/19/2021 12:27:00 PM

Thank you for discovering your new poetry form. I have always admired your pantoum. This one is much simpler than the others but without any rhythm. Reading was a pleasure, have a lovely weekend.

L Milton Hankins
Date: 6/19/2021 12:30:00 PM

Thanks, Lasaad. I really enjoy "tinkering" with some of the poetry forms. I really think ridge forms stifle creativity. Hey, who is going to shoot me for writing a poem that doesn't exactly follow the rules??? LOL. A pantoum does not have to rhyme (according to the Poetry Soup guidelines).

Tom Cunningham

Date: 6/19/2021 11:59:00 AM

You've created a new form Milton, a miltoum lol. You often hear of people from the other side of the tracks who do something with their lives and I applaud them. Hope your weekend is going well. Tom

L Milton Hankins
Date: 6/19/2021 12:31:00 PM

Superb so far, Tom. I talked on the phone with my son this morning, and called a friend who is suffering from cancer. He is optimistic. Thus far, good.

Nancy Kaufman

Date: 6/19/2021 11:38:00 AM

this is an interesting poetry form. I guess one line repeats in each paragraph. I'll have to look up pantoum. enjoyed it.

L Milton Hankins
Date: 6/19/2021 12:33:00 PM

Hmmm...generally speaking, the first and third line is the second and fourth line of the previous stanza. It is somewhat convoluted, and the guidelines in the PS definition are difficult to follow. Anyway, I love playing with them, and I am working one another one to appear soon.