L Milton Hankins Poet Pantoum

Other Side of the Track

Because she lived on the other side of the tracks
Ashamed of the shameful ghetto of her raising
Spending her time improving her dismal situation
Seeking to improve her meager station in life.

Ashamed of the shameful ghetto of her raising
She studied hard and sought to look her best
Seeking to improve her meager station in life
She set out to conquer an unfriendly world.

She studied hard and sought to look her best
Developing poise and grace of the urbanite
She set out to conquer an unfriendly world
Certain that her efforts would bring success.

Developing poise and grace of the urbanite
Spending her time improving her dismal situation
Certain that her efforts would bring success
Because she lived on the other side of the tracks.

Written June 18, 2021
[Modified Pantoum with no Rhyme]

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Sotto Poet June 19, 2021 at 12:27 PM Thank you for discovering your new poetry form. I have always admired your pantoum. This one is much simpler than the others but without any rhythm. Reading was a pleasure, have a lovely weekend. L Milton Hankins June 19, 2021 at 12:30 PM Thanks, Lasaad. I really enjoy "tinkering" with some of the poetry forms. I really think ridge forms stifle creativity. Hey, who is going to shoot me for writing a poem that doesn't exactly follow the rules??? LOL. A pantoum does not have to rhyme (according to the Poetry Soup guidelines).

Tom Cunningham June 19, 2021 at 11:59 AM You've created a new form Milton, a miltoum lol. You often hear of people from the other side of the tracks who do something with their lives and I applaud them. Hope your weekend is going well. Tom L Milton Hankins June 19, 2021 at 12:31 PM Superb so far, Tom. I talked on the phone with my son this morning, and called a friend who is suffering from cancer. He is optimistic. Thus far, good.

Nancy Kaufman June 19, 2021 at 11:38 AM this is an interesting poetry form. I guess one line repeats in each paragraph. I'll have to look up pantoum. enjoyed it. L Milton Hankins June 19, 2021 at 12:33 PM Hmmm...generally speaking, the first and third line is the second and fourth line of the previous stanza. It is somewhat convoluted, and the guidelines in the PS definition are difficult to follow. Anyway, I love playing with them, and I am working one another one to appear soon.