Andrea Dietrich Poet Sonnet

Oo - All In One Stinking Week

It's not impossible that my house stink.
At times there festers garbage in a sack
behind a closet door, and once the sink
got clogged with who-knows-what; sent water back
up filthy and all black; I dished it out
scoop by nasty scoop into a pan.
That damn disposal broke.  There was no doubt
my kitchen reeked, so I turned on a fan
and dropped some baking soda in the drain
(I'd heard it stopped most odors), but the worst
came next: a stench which I could not explain.
I searched my rooms.  Six days my house was cursed
until I found it dead and hidden well -
a mouse I bet inhaled the kitchen's smell!

(true story but a little exaggerated!)

For Susan Burch's
Offensive Odors or Noise Pollution Poetry Contest

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John Watt October 21, 2020 at 9:56 PM After I read to the end I realized that "OO" in the title must have stood for Offensive Odors, but I couldn't help but think "OO, who stepped in dog poop?" This one was both funny and sad; sad because it was a true story but funny how you ended it with the conclusion that the mouse died from the stink of the clogged drain! Very entertaining. You really DO write sonnets about every conceivable subject!

Kash Poet January 30, 2012 at 5:08 AM Hmmm....about those results....Let it be a secret.

Joyce Johnson January 5, 2012 at 4:40 PM Oh I had a possum die in my furnace vent. Eight hundred dollars later, I was rid of the smell Great poem Andrea and congratulations. Love, Joyce

Harry Horsman January 5, 2012 at 10:05 AM Quite a story is this, i would love to have seen your face, in this stinking week of yours, anyway it gave way to you as usual penning an awesome account, and in Sonnet form too. a masterpiece. congrats harry

Carol Sunshine Brown January 5, 2012 at 6:39 AM Congratulations on your win in ~Susan's~ "Offensive Odors or Noise Pollution" contest Andrea. Love, Carol

Debra Squyres January 4, 2012 at 11:12 AM ohh myyy !! Good poem and Congrats !!

Joyce Johnson January 4, 2012 at 8:32 AM A great story Andrea. Congratulations on your win. Love, Joyce

Kash Poet January 4, 2012 at 2:26 AM Congratulations Andrea on your 1st place win.Loved it first time around.

Greg Stanley January 3, 2012 at 9:31 PM Andrea, excellent write and a well deserved win, congratulations, all the best, Greg

Nette Onclaud January 3, 2012 at 9:18 PM this so sooo graphic is a beautiful way, andie... wow, congrats on the top win.. i like! :) huggs!

Black Eyed Susan January 2, 2012 at 6:46 PM glad to see this was your poem - had no idea when judging. results are out if you look in your member area. for some reason they didn't post. hopefully PS will fix it soon. congrats on your #1 win, yes, first place. hooray!!!

Phyllis Babcock December 27, 2011 at 11:48 AM Had me laughing with this one. When we had that mouse in the house and it died in a vent I can tell you that smell was totally unpleasant. It is definitely offensive to the nose. ha ha . love phyl

Robert Pettit December 19, 2011 at 11:06 PM It is a good thing I did not eat before I read this! Good writing and rhyming.

Judy Ball December 15, 2011 at 7:41 PM Oohoo! Sounds like something that could happen to me. I wrote one once called Murphy's Law Strikes Again. Think I'll repost it for you and we can feel sorry for each other. God Bless and Merry Christmas, JB ;)

Robert Johnson December 15, 2011 at 12:21 PM Just what is that awful smell? It's as if the fumes are coming straight from hell. That secret scent that hides so well. And then one day the air is as clear as a bell.

Carol Eastman December 15, 2011 at 11:34 AM I loved reading this one. Been there done that you might say.

Kenny A Fledgling Poet December 14, 2011 at 11:12 PM Andrea, I do not know how the little mouse may have died. i do know that after a few days a dead mouse stinks. Chef has 9 cats and they like moles and mice. once in a while they bring it in the house and do not tell anyone and do not eat it. Pretty stinky. if I reply to a comment does it go to you or do you have to read the poem again to see it. I sent one to you. HG told me that once anyone comments on a poem, you will not get another unless you win contest or featured read your older poems

Audrey Haick December 14, 2011 at 9:05 PM LOL! This is really good, Andrea. I just read Carolyn's and I tell ya, if I were Susan I would have a tough time judging this contest! Yes, I know it's been a while, Andrea. Been much too busy... but have a little break so here I am ....for awhile. Hope all is well! Merry Christmas to you ! Love, Annalise

Sara Kendrick December 14, 2011 at 3:11 PM Great work that reads like a winner for sure..Those mice or field rats can leave enough scent to have been an elephant..Well maybe...Thanks for stopping by...Sara

Russell Sivey December 14, 2011 at 12:55 PM Oh wow, that write is quite hilarious Andrea! I really enjoyed the part where the mouse died, from the smell of the kitchen!! Yes, something similar happened to me...no dead mice but a definite stench throughout the house. I don't know anyone who likes that smell!! I really enjoyed your poem this afternoon, Awesome Work!! Russell Sivey December 14, 2011 at 12:56 PM You'll do well in Susan's contest!

Carolyn Devonshire December 14, 2011 at 12:45 PM LOL I've had similar experiences with that goop that clogs up sinks and tubs. "Nasty" is too mild a word to describe it. Got a great kick from your last line. Poor little mouse! Best wishes in Susan's contest. Witty work! Love and blessings for a merry Christmas, Carolyn

Carol Sunshine Brown December 14, 2011 at 10:41 AM Wishing you glad tiding for the upcoming Holiday Season Andrea. It is the time of year to reach out to old friends and new friends as well. As the old year ends and the New Year arrives I wish blessings to you and yours always. May you be blessed with inspiration and see your writing endeavors cascade upward in 2012. Love, Carol

Jack Horne December 14, 2011 at 9:16 AM Eeew - sorry, Andrea, but I couldn't help laughing!

Poet Destroyer A December 14, 2011 at 8:07 AM Good morning Andrea, , how are you this lovely morniing? Me so & so... but hanging in there like a dead mistletoe... lol... anyways... a very nice entry for the contest... i hate dead mouse...lol.. good luck in the contest,..p.d.

David Williams December 14, 2011 at 12:42 AM Andrea ha ha ha love this, you have given me an idea for another poem... just having fun with Nikko's contest, might wait till others have posted then steal an odd word and re-arrange ha ha ha, have a great Christmas holiday..love David

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