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DANGEROUS LIASON The spiral staircase made her high heels sing Sue climbs it to meet her married lover he’s her boss; she’s just his latest plaything she was warned about men by her mother! It‘s not just her job that earns her a rise he pours champagne as she enters the room with ‘pillow talk’ as he fondles her thighs Sue says she’s pregnant, it fills him with doom From here the city churches pierced the mist Sue says, "Divorce her, there we can get wed." she purses her ruby lips to be kissed as they tumble onto the king size bed His hands grip her throat; he calls her a whore she’s insignificant, he does not care hiding her body, he heads for the door he closed it, and, now smiling, crossed the square 1,9, 16 upgraded Version Contest Sponsored by Viv Wigley Line 1 The spiral staircase made her high heels sing Line 9 From here the city churches pierced the mist Line 16 he closed it, and, now smiling, crossed the square 5/8/18

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Subimal Sinha-Roy

Date: 6/22/2018 1:36:00 AM

Congratulations, Jan on your win.

Tom Cunningham

Date: 6/20/2018 11:14:00 PM

Well done Jan, back with congratulations. Tom.

Viv Wigley

Date: 6/20/2018 11:12:00 PM

Right, Jan, enough of this dark nastiness evil jiggery pokery, put your clown onesie back on immediately! And congrats! Viv x

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 5/10/2018 9:58:00 AM

Wowzer, this is superb.

Jan Allison
Date: 5/10/2018 10:01:00 AM

aww thanks Richard - have fun with Mama Bear I know she is on her way to see you, please give her a HUGE hug from me she is always brightening my day with her humourous e mails-) hugs jan xx

Charles Messina

Date: 5/10/2018 7:14:00 AM

This is awesome Jan, I just noticed that you and I used "king-size bed" in both our poems...too funny...I love the story and the way the story ends. Best of luck in the contest, a winner for sure! Hugs // Charlie

Jan Allison
Date: 5/10/2018 10:00:00 AM

Thanks Charlie, I've just joined the dark side lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Jerry T Curtis

Date: 5/9/2018 6:31:00 PM

Very potent and riveting

Jan Allison
Date: 5/10/2018 3:13:00 AM

Thanks Jerry, not seen you around for a while hope you are ok xx:-) hugs jan xx

Harry Horsman

Date: 5/9/2018 4:54:00 PM

Wow, What can i say, except wow, brilliant just love this..

Jan Allison
Date: 5/9/2018 5:08:00 PM

aww thanks for your vote of confidence Harry:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/9/2018 3:50:00 PM

oohhh, ME LIKEY!!! That was a perfect way to do it, so sinister (like my interesting crime dramas I am always watching. This actually happens a lot in the world. Life is worthless to these bastards) Soupmail for ya.

Jan Allison
Date: 5/9/2018 5:08:00 PM

I love murder mystery's too lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Jean Murray

Date: 5/9/2018 11:18:00 AM

Brilliant!

Jan Allison
Date: 5/9/2018 11:56:00 AM

I hope mr viv likes it jean :-) hugs Jan xx

Ravi Sathasivam

Date: 5/9/2018 6:19:00 AM

Excellent story. Written well. Thanks for sharing it.

Jan Allison
Date: 5/9/2018 11:55:00 AM

Thanks Ravi:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 5/8/2018 7:35:00 PM

amazing write, Jan, luck in the contest.. hugs

Jan Allison
Date: 5/9/2018 2:19:00 AM

Thanks Eve:-) hugs Jan xx

Matthew Anish

Date: 5/8/2018 4:53:00 PM

Seems to be the trend these says! Powerful write! Peace & Love Matthew Anish

Jan Allison
Date: 5/8/2018 4:57:00 PM

Thanks Matthew:-) hugs jan xx

Eileen Manassian

Date: 5/8/2018 4:46:00 PM

Well...this is quite the dark write, dear. Loved how you came up with this story that incorporates those lines. Fantastic. Hugs

Jan Allison
Date: 5/8/2018 4:48:00 PM

Thanks Eileen:-) a little different to my usual style that is for sure:-) hugs Jan xx

Caycay Jennings

Date: 5/8/2018 1:27:00 PM

Oh, my, my - the dark side of the sheets. This is well written, dramatic and entertaining - I loved all the elements. All the best ... CayCay

Jan Allison
Date: 5/8/2018 1:31:00 PM

I usually try and write humourous poems this is a definite change in direction for me - not sure if I will venture down the dark side again!:-) hugs jan xx

Tim Smith

Date: 5/8/2018 12:54:00 PM

A horrible person Jan. Sadly there are many like that. Great poem

Jan Allison
Date: 5/8/2018 1:02:00 PM

Thanks 'Monsieur Tim:-) hugs Jan xx

Tom Cunningham

Date: 5/8/2018 11:19:00 AM

What a brilliant story this is Jan, you do hear of rats like that, having their fun then walking away. Good luck . Tom.

Jan Allison
Date: 5/8/2018 11:23:00 AM

I do worry about my muse I never know where she will take me:-) hugs Jan xx

Dale Gregory Cozart

Date: 5/8/2018 11:12:00 AM

What a good poem! A great story, nicely written.

Jan Allison
Date: 5/8/2018 11:23:00 AM

Thanks Dale:-) I hope Mr Viv likes it:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y.

Date: 5/8/2018 10:59:00 AM

WoW! Jan, You did a good job with the required lines. Your piece instantly made me think of soap operas. Great job. I wish you the best of luck in the contest:-) Alexis

Jan Allison
Date: 5/8/2018 11:51:00 AM

Thanks Alexis, If this is what happens in soap operas it makes me glad I don't watch them ... it's just out of my imagination :-) hugs Jan xx

Winged Warrior

Date: 5/8/2018 9:24:00 AM

Great read my friend...best of luck Jan...never a dull moment with you my friend...love and light...^WW^

Jan Allison
Date: 5/8/2018 10:18:00 AM

LOl ^WW^ I never know what will flow from my pen, the theme of the poem surprised me as I much prefer humour but looks like I've entered the 'dark side' lol:-) hugs jan xx

Lin Lane

Date: 5/8/2018 8:48:00 AM

OH MY! My first thought was, 'I hope the hotel room was in the monster's name.' Then he'd get his.....

Jan Allison
Date: 5/8/2018 1:01:00 PM

Monsieur Tim I must apologise : -( from what I've read it's often a name that is used for 'liaisons' hugs jan xx

Tim Smith
Date: 5/8/2018 12:53:00 PM

I resemble that remark

Jan Allison
Date: 5/8/2018 8:50:00 AM

I think he'd use Mr & Mrs Smith lol:-) hugs Jan xx