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DANGEROUS LIASON

The spiral staircase made her high heels sing 
Sue climbs it to meet her married lover 
he’s her boss; she’s just his latest plaything 
she was warned about men by her mother! 

It‘s not just her job that earns her a rise
he pours champagne as she enters the room 
with ‘pillow talk’ as he fondles her thighs 
Sue says she’s pregnant, it fills him with doom

From here the city churches pierced the mist 
Sue says, "Divorce her, there we can get wed."
she purses her ruby lips to be kissed 
as they tumble onto the king size bed
 
His hands grip her throat; he calls her a whore 
she’s insignificant, he does not care 
hiding her body, he heads for the door 
he closed it, and, now smiling, crossed the square 

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Line 1 The spiral staircase made her high heels sing
Line 9 From here the city churches pierced the mist 
Line 16 he closed it, and, now smiling, crossed the square

5/8/18

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Subimal Sinha-Roy June 22, 2018 at 1:36 AM Congratulations, Jan on your win.

Tom Cunningham June 20, 2018 at 11:14 PM Well done Jan, back with congratulations. Tom.

Viv Wigley June 20, 2018 at 11:12 PM Right, Jan, enough of this dark nastiness evil jiggery pokery, put your clown onesie back on immediately! And congrats! Viv x

Richard Lamoureux May 10, 2018 at 9:58 AM Wowzer, this is superb. Jan Allison May 10, 2018 at 10:01 AM aww thanks Richard - have fun with Mama Bear I know she is on her way to see you, please give her a HUGE hug from me she is always brightening my day with her humourous e mails-) hugs jan xx

Charles Messina May 10, 2018 at 7:14 AM This is awesome Jan, I just noticed that you and I used "king-size bed" in both our poems...too funny...I love the story and the way the story ends. Best of luck in the contest, a winner for sure! Hugs // Charlie Jan Allison May 10, 2018 at 10:00 AM Thanks Charlie, I've just joined the dark side lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Jerry T Curtis May 9, 2018 at 6:31 PM Very potent and riveting Jan Allison May 10, 2018 at 3:13 AM Thanks Jerry, not seen you around for a while hope you are ok xx:-) hugs jan xx

Harry Horsman May 9, 2018 at 4:54 PM Wow, What can i say, except wow, brilliant just love this.. Jan Allison May 9, 2018 at 5:08 PM aww thanks for your vote of confidence Harry:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich May 9, 2018 at 3:50 PM oohhh, ME LIKEY!!! That was a perfect way to do it, so sinister (like my interesting crime dramas I am always watching. This actually happens a lot in the world. Life is worthless to these bastards) Soupmail for ya. Jan Allison May 9, 2018 at 5:08 PM I love murder mystery's too lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Jean Murray May 9, 2018 at 11:18 AM Brilliant! Jan Allison May 9, 2018 at 11:56 AM I hope mr viv likes it jean :-) hugs Jan xx

Ravi Sathasivam May 9, 2018 at 6:19 AM Excellent story. Written well. Thanks for sharing it. Jan Allison May 9, 2018 at 11:55 AM Thanks Ravi:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper May 8, 2018 at 7:35 PM amazing write, Jan, luck in the contest.. hugs Jan Allison May 9, 2018 at 2:19 AM Thanks Eve:-) hugs Jan xx

Matthew Anish May 8, 2018 at 4:53 PM Seems to be the trend these says! Powerful write! Peace & Love Matthew Anish Jan Allison May 8, 2018 at 4:57 PM Thanks Matthew:-) hugs jan xx

Eileen Manassian May 8, 2018 at 4:46 PM Well...this is quite the dark write, dear. Loved how you came up with this story that incorporates those lines. Fantastic. Hugs Jan Allison May 8, 2018 at 4:48 PM Thanks Eileen:-) a little different to my usual style that is for sure:-) hugs Jan xx

CayCay Godwin May 8, 2018 at 1:27 PM Oh, my, my - the dark side of the sheets. This is well written, dramatic and entertaining - I loved all the elements. All the best ... CayCay Jan Allison May 8, 2018 at 1:31 PM I usually try and write humourous poems this is a definite change in direction for me - not sure if I will venture down the dark side again!:-) hugs jan xx

Tim Smith May 8, 2018 at 12:54 PM A horrible person Jan. Sadly there are many like that. Great poem Jan Allison May 8, 2018 at 1:02 PM Thanks 'Monsieur Tim:-) hugs Jan xx

Tom Cunningham May 8, 2018 at 11:19 AM What a brilliant story this is Jan, you do hear of rats like that, having their fun then walking away. Good luck . Tom. Jan Allison May 8, 2018 at 11:23 AM I do worry about my muse I never know where she will take me:-) hugs Jan xx

Dale Gregory Cozart May 8, 2018 at 11:12 AM What a good poem! A great story, nicely written. Jan Allison May 8, 2018 at 11:23 AM Thanks Dale:-) I hope Mr Viv likes it:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y. May 8, 2018 at 10:59 AM WoW! Jan, You did a good job with the required lines. Your piece instantly made me think of soap operas. Great job. I wish you the best of luck in the contest:-) Alexis Jan Allison May 8, 2018 at 11:51 AM Thanks Alexis, If this is what happens in soap operas it makes me glad I don't watch them ... it's just out of my imagination :-) hugs Jan xx

Winged Warrior May 8, 2018 at 9:24 AM Great read my friend...best of luck Jan...never a dull moment with you my friend...love and light...^WW^ Jan Allison May 8, 2018 at 10:18 AM LOl ^WW^ I never know what will flow from my pen, the theme of the poem surprised me as I much prefer humour but looks like I've entered the 'dark side' lol:-) hugs jan xx

Lin Lane May 8, 2018 at 8:48 AM OH MY! My first thought was, 'I hope the hotel room was in the monster's name.' Then he'd get his..... Jan Allison May 8, 2018 at 1:01 PM Monsieur Tim I must apologise : -( from what I've read it's often a name that is used for 'liaisons' hugs jan xx Tim Smith May 8, 2018 at 12:53 PM I resemble that remark Jan Allison May 8, 2018 at 8:50 AM I think he'd use Mr & Mrs Smith lol:-) hugs Jan xx