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One Haiku Contest

sakura petals fall like pink confetti spring gust scatters One haiku contest Sponsored by Rick Paris 04 20 17

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Joseph May

Date: 5/29/2017 10:41:00 AM

Congrats on your win Jan

Jan Allison
Date: 5/29/2017 11:25:00 AM

wow thanks for letting me know Joseph:-) hugs Jan xx

John Michaels

Date: 4/27/2017 2:53:00 AM

Excellent Haiku, Jan. Very interesting to see one of your "serious" poems and you pulled it off with aplomb! I hope to see this place high in the contest! Good luck! Regards, John!

Jan Allison
Date: 5/29/2017 11:24:00 AM

Many thanks John :-) sorry I missed seeing your comment before:-) hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/22/2017 7:32:00 PM

very lovely imagery, sweetie!

Jan Allison
Date: 4/22/2017 7:37:00 PM

Thanks Andrea I doubt it will place but I enjoyed the challenge:-) hugs jan xx

Anil Deo

Date: 4/21/2017 1:05:00 PM

Proper. With poetry, even imprper is proper. See e.e.cummings and my shero, Emily Dickinson (Maid of Amherst. 'Love them maids). "Mind you, we Brits are always prim and proper. Perhaps not so much prim, but proper." I would not be overly constrained by haiku rules right now ... unless the CONTESTS specify. As Miraj said, you painted pictures effectively with 17 syllables. Way to go, JA! shalom

Jan Allison
Date: 4/21/2017 4:37:00 PM

Thanks Anil:-)hugs Jan xx

Miraj Raha

Date: 4/21/2017 11:41:00 AM

Wow I love the images you draw in my mind Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 4/21/2017 4:36:00 PM

Thanks so much Miraj:-) hugs jan xx

Charlotte Puddifoot

Date: 4/21/2017 8:07:00 AM

this is a very pretty haiku from you, jan...now, the haiku purists would say comparing petals to pink confetti is wrong in a haiku (apparently, imagery and simile are not allowed) but i personally love imagery in a haiku, and indeed i've read many that do contain it - good luck in the contest!

Jan Allison
Date: 4/22/2017 5:28:00 PM

I will always be thankful to you for your encouragement with my writing I remember writing a haiku and placing in your contest and feeling SO proud:-) hugs Jan xx

Charlotte Puddifoot
Date: 4/21/2017 5:33:00 PM

i saw that was on - and thought of your poem! i was watching something else at the time, though...yes, the juxtaposition is tricky; there's something elusive and enigmatical about the form, it's an art within an art

Jan Allison
Date: 4/21/2017 4:36:00 PM

Thanks for that information Charlotte. I still have so much to learn and I do struggle with the juxtaposition in the final line and this contest is slightly restrictive having to use set words:-) Have just seen an amazing 'spring watch on BBC2 all about Sakura in Japan ... do catch it if you can it was absolutely stunning!!!:-) hugs Jan xx

Casarah Nance

Date: 4/21/2017 6:51:00 AM

very good :) :)

Jan Allison
Date: 4/21/2017 7:25:00 AM

Cheers Cas:-) hope all is good with you all:-) hugs Jan xx

Anil Deo

Date: 4/21/2017 5:46:00 AM

wow! (As good as them limericks. #7 to put my numbers where my members be)Shalom

Jan Allison
Date: 4/21/2017 7:24:00 AM

aww thanks Anil I never know if I have written a proper haiku as I struggle with the twist in the final line:-) hugs Jan xx

Agnes Krampe

Date: 4/21/2017 1:17:00 AM

Lovely haiku, Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 4/21/2017 3:04:00 AM

Thanks Agnes I like to try my hand at different forms and the contests are a great way of doing that:-) hugs Jan xx

White Wolf

Date: 4/21/2017 12:16:00 AM

Sakura sounds Japanese! Excuse my ignorance! But I get the drift! Great haiku, Jan! GL

Jan Allison
Date: 4/21/2017 3:03:00 AM

I learned on soup that Sakura are cherry blossoms so now I use that word instead asI personally think it is far more poetic and fits the haiku form better:-) hugs Jan xx