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On Sorrow's Wings

If I could live one day again, I'd choose that day so fair Our walk among the jaded trees, in dappled shade, a blanket spread You picked among the meadow grass, the flowers for my hair The earth was fresh with dampened grass, our tender flowered bed You told me then, that day our love to never more forget Two hawks, they watched while circling 'round, so high above our heads We languished there, 'neath faded skies, two hearts with no regrets The folded clothes, which lie nearby, no words between us said Your eyes on mine, your hands, your touch, like petals in the wind But day must end, a bitter cry, like seeking hawk who preys We gently kissed, as shadows fell, unseen as clouds rolled in A hawk in flight came swooping down, and carried it away I turn to you in midnight's dream, with anguished breath I weep The dream is gone by morning light, while death stalks mine to keep Resubmitted for Matt Caliri's contest "New Terrains"

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Date: 1/28/2009 1:53:00 PM
lovely and romantic Carrie - I can relate to what you wrote with a lover who is now deceased, but we cherish those days, don't we?
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Date: 1/23/2009 12:56:00 PM
Both a lovely and sad image; but an awesome poem. Great passion written softly and beautifully.
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Date: 1/22/2009 7:45:00 PM
oh, honey this makes me hurt. one day only the good part will remain. the power of your words are awsom and i applaude your poem. luv, janetta.
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Date: 1/21/2009 11:39:00 AM
such a beautiful and touching poem. thank you for reading my always together. i wrote this after seeing them sleeping so close together, everywhere they go they do it together, they are very close.
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Date: 1/20/2009 9:44:00 PM
Carrie, this was simply astonishing, deep and sad at the same time but beautifully written and expressed with the most wondrous imagery. Awesome poem!! Thank you for your comments on my poetry..God Bless *Love Tyesha
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Date: 1/20/2009 10:56:00 AM
Simply awesome, well written and tugs on the heartstrings. You've outdone yourself with this one. Well done. Love Heidie
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Date: 1/20/2009 10:10:00 AM
You have just given me the ultimate compliment. My heart will flutter whenever I think about you doing that Carrie. You are an awesome woman..I mean that.
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Date: 1/20/2009 8:48:00 AM
This is simply amazing! Love the tone that is created as well as the imagery and style of the write. Excellent! Michael
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Date: 1/20/2009 2:42:00 AM
Amazingly beautiful, but so sad! Sigh, and such is the truth of life, definalty a winner, this is beautiful. :) love, Kristin
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Date: 1/20/2009 2:24:00 AM
Thank you for supporting my contest Carrie Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments
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Date: 1/19/2009 7:49:00 PM
This is so beautiful..I just love it.. filled with emotion and depth..and thank you so much, for your comment on my poem Dad's Workshed, I was so surprised to have it chosen for the feature poem this week..
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Date: 1/19/2009 4:26:00 PM
Oh my, Carrie, This is one of the most beautiful sonnets I have ever read. It s perfect and a definate winner. Awesome poem! Love, Robin
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Date: 1/19/2009 1:56:00 PM
wow this is such a wonderful story written so beautifully. Good luck in the contest! Blessings, ~Michaela~
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Date: 1/19/2009 12:58:00 PM
Oh so beautifully written! I was hoping for a happier ending but the title did give me a clue. There is no doubt you are soooo very talented and that this will be a winning poem! Good luck Carrie! Love, Shar
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Date: 1/19/2009 10:43:00 AM
Carrie, I hope you believe me when I say this is just wonderful. I love the title and then I am drawn into this picture, sitting and watching the love painted amongst the meadow grass. The folded clothes, jaded tress, sweet words that helps make this poem shine like gold...I won't focus on the dream going away because that breaks the mood for me..lol..great work.
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Date: 1/19/2009 9:31:00 AM
And a beautiful sonnet it is Carrie. Nothing but pure love in each word. Laurie
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Date: 1/19/2009 8:53:00 AM
Ohhhh what a story !!! Great rhyming flow , Carrie ....
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