On my face is a smile- sestina contest

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On my face is a smile- sestina contest

The feeling of happiness, I see in your smile
Wonder what the secret is, what is her name
How long have you felt this, is it for real
Don't get hurt boy, look loosely at this
Did it start with a look, maybe a kiss
Watch what your doing,your face is bliss

Went for a walk talked, in the light rain what bliss
Saw your reflection, echoed in a puddle, love that smile
Looked down as I looked up, stole a kiss
Known you a short time, not your full name
Just call you cariad,I know you like this
Is this far too soon, for you is it real.

I know what I'm thinking, for me it's real
Loving you as I do, is pure bliss
Am I rushing you boy,  do you feel like this
When I look into you face, and see your smile
Who is it my cariad, is it my name
Please tell me, so I can seal with a kiss

We carried on walking, rain like a butterfly kiss
Fell on our heads, making you feel real
Did you whisper something, did I hear my name.
We stopped for a while, looked up to kiss
Your handsome face, it lit up with a smile
Couldn't believe, someone could affect me like this.

Stopped off to eat  at a nearby cafe, not sure if he would like this
Was lovely hot food , puddings light as a hummingbirds kiss
The coffee was delicious, he gave a big smile
Said loved being with you, time will tell if its real
Had to settle for that, life I knew could be such bliss
Good night cariad, or maybe I should call you by name.

Slept well that night, dreamt I hear you calling my name
Broke into a smile when I heard this
Woke up with a start,  in heavenly bliss
Was I dreaming or maybe 'twas the pillow I did kiss
Please put me out of my misery, make our love real
Say those magic words, on my face put a smile


Called you up, you voice echoed my room, I liked this
Listened for awhile your voice is sur-real, ending our call with a kiss 
Heard you say you have my heart, on my face a beaming smile


Penned with stress this form is hard 04/06/2014

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014

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  1. Date: 6/28/2014 9:30:00 PM
    You have achieved it beautifully Congrats on your win Seren

    Roberts Avatar Seren Roberts
    Date: 6/29/2014 4:04:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you Rose, was a difficult form to write.....Seren
  1. Date: 6/28/2014 7:28:00 AM
    The things most I enjoyed is the imagery in your poem, congrats on the win

    Roberts Avatar Seren Roberts
    Date: 6/28/2014 9:19:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you Ram ...Seren
  1. Date: 6/28/2014 4:38:00 AM
    keep smiling, best wishes

    Roberts Avatar Seren Roberts
    Date: 6/29/2014 4:07:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Vandana thank you for stopping by ...Seren
  1. Date: 6/28/2014 12:18:00 AM
    Congratulations on a great poem and win. It was a tough one to create. Love, Joyce

    Roberts Avatar Seren Roberts
    Date: 6/29/2014 4:07:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Hello Joyce, sure was a tough experience, guess I should try it again at another time...Seren
  1. Date: 6/27/2014 11:58:00 AM
    A most beautiful write with fantastic imagery. I enjoyed reading your work. Congratulations on a well-deserved win!

    Roberts Avatar Seren Roberts
    Date: 6/29/2014 4:05:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Thank you Pandita, glad you enjoyed it...Seren
  1. Date: 6/27/2014 9:57:00 AM
    Writing this sestina has been quite a challenge, from what I hear...under stress and duress!! But I should say you did a very good job! Congratulations on a fine win, Seren!! // paul

    Roberts Avatar Seren Roberts
    Date: 6/29/2014 4:06:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Yes Paul a challenge is putting it mildly, I must try it again when I am out of the traumatic shock of being placed........Seren
  1. Date: 6/27/2014 8:32:00 AM
    This form is hard but you came out with flying colours, Seren. Congrats for top win. Mohan

    Roberts Avatar Seren Roberts
    Date: 6/27/2014 8:46:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    I am in shock Mohan, thank you for your congrats ...Seren
  1. Date: 6/4/2014 1:01:00 PM
    I think this is the hardest form going..I am impressed with your work..I have one half finished and it stinks...lol BG

    Roberts Avatar Seren Roberts
    Date: 6/7/2014 10:44:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    Wasn't my favourite form I admit lol, come on Barbara finish yours, will be an achievement ...Seren
  1. Date: 6/4/2014 7:29:00 AM
    a lovely poem, its quality, i carnt write this style its very complexed and your work is good. thanks for your kind feed back.

    Roberts Avatar Seren Roberts
    Date: 6/4/2014 7:58:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    thank you Diane I will have a go at any of the forms, usually make a hash of them...Seren
  1. Date: 6/4/2014 7:17:00 AM
    Though you have written with stress but expressed with success and finesse, Seren

    Roberts Avatar Seren Roberts
    Date: 6/4/2014 7:57:00 AM Block poet from commenting on your poetry


    geez Ram it wasn't easy for me at all....lol....Seren