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July.4.2023
Story Poems Poetrty Contest
Sponsor- Joanna Daniel
40 lines,, abab rhyme

 

December came with Christmas beckoning at the door
He saw every house bright with many a lamp
And the whole streets illumined with colorful lights and star
But his tiny hut looked dismal n’ dark like a prison camp

One evening, on a leisurely walk from school
The boy saw a man selling colorful balloons
With the little penny tucked safely in his jacket of wool
He bought a balloon and headed straight to the lagoons

There as he sat on the sprawling silver sands
A strange idea had come upon his little head
Send a letter to God seeking help from his generous hands
Hoping Jesus would listen, he too being born as a poor kid

On a white paper he carefully scribbled these lines: 
“Merciful God, look upon us, this unfortunate seven
Here, we die of hunger leading miserable lives
On this Christmas, send us a little cheer up from heaven”

He folded the paper and fastened it to the balloon
Nevertheless, he didn’t forget to put his full address
When the wind was strong, he let it fly over the lagoon
And watched it soar high with his earnest plea for redress

Days went by and the awaited Christmas Eve arrived
While the world splurged in all gaiety and merriment
The poor hut remained dull with all pleasures deprived
The helpless parents were lost in grim bafflement

Abruptly, there halted before their hut a Ferrari
A man, old and greying with a graceful smile
Alighted from the car and stood looking all cheery 
Searching the boy, he had travelled many a mile

It was during one of his daily strolls around the lagoon 
That the gentleman saw a balloon tangled on a willow tree
The white paper tied to it, he unfastened from the balloon
Unfolding it, he saw an innocent child’s earnest plea

The man so rich and kind was moved at heart, 
He from his wealth decided to donate a large sum,
To support that family of seven so severely distraught,
And give them the merriest Christmas to be no more glum.

The little boy believed Jesus has answered his prayer,
Coming in the guise of a man, he has never before seen.
With rising delight, he beheld in the sky a luminous star.
It shone right over his head with a brilliant sheen.

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Date: 7/25/2023 9:45:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed your "On Christmas Eve" write. "Wonderful" Have a great day.....................
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Date: 7/25/2023 6:05:00 AM
You have a very Valsa way of narration. This depicts the fact. Congratulations!
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Date: 7/25/2023 1:37:00 AM
This was a wonderful story from the beginning till the end, Valsa, exact rhyming would have placed it right on top:) congratulations:)
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Date: 7/9/2023 3:17:00 PM
Love it, what a beautiful blessing to read : )
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Date: 7/6/2023 12:22:00 PM
In this world, filled with countless compassionate individuals, miracles truly do occur. Valsa, Your captivating tale serves as a testament to the unwavering power of faith. Good luck with the contest.
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Date: 7/4/2023 5:12:00 PM
Valsa, if only all earnest prayers were answered. But perhaps they are someway…somehow. Very nice! God bless!
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Date: 7/4/2023 3:44:00 PM
A lovely encouraging story you tell, my kind and loving friend. There are those about that are messengers, or angels, that perform such acts of kindness out of the goodness of their hearts when led by to Love of God and guided by the Holy Spirit. Thanks God for each of them, let Love be the theme, especially at Christmas, and especially tothose in need. Bless you for share a story of hope, faith, and Love. Smiles ~ Blessings Bill
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Date: 7/4/2023 6:58:00 AM
My favorite hymn: God will find a way. What a cute and delightful poem, dear Valsa. So good to find compassionate people. Great poem. best for a win.
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Date: 7/4/2023 5:48:00 AM
Miracles do happen in life, for there are so many caring souls in this world. A powerful story, Valsa-- resonating in faith.
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