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On Becoming Immortal

On Becoming Immortal We’re born and then the hours pass quickly by. Swift time that waits for no one’s not our friend. Our lives move fast so one day we will die. All people know their stint on Earth must end. The first immortals were in ancient days, that tested human man with hardships wrought. Some false immortal gods had loathsome ways, a boredom with eternity of thought. What joy on move to higher planes we'll see, and shed the human form, new things to find. Beyond the limits of the world to be, immortal in the deeds we leave behind. 2/19/17

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Date: 3/26/2017 4:55:00 PM
I enjoyed your thoughts on immortality, Janis. False gods reigned supreme for many years, but failed the immortality test. Indeed, your final stanza brings reasoning to a higher plane! Congratulations on your podium win! Regards // paul
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Janis Thompson
Date: 3/26/2017 7:03:00 PM
Thanks so much Paul for your thoughtful words. I am glad that the message came across. Very glad to hear from you. Blessings, Janis.
Date: 3/21/2017 7:50:00 AM
Great thoughts kn immortality! Congrats, Janis!
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Janis Thompson
Date: 3/26/2017 7:04:00 PM
Thanks, Kim.
Date: 3/20/2017 2:50:00 PM
Janis congratulations on your win in my contest ~
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Janis Thompson
Date: 3/20/2017 3:18:00 PM
Thanks, Broken Wings. I appreciate your placement of my poem so highly.
Date: 2/19/2017 8:08:00 PM
Lovely, Janis - I enjoyed this very much ... CayCay
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Janis Thompson
Date: 2/21/2017 9:51:00 AM
Thanks, CayCay.
Date: 2/19/2017 8:05:00 PM
Well said Janis, best wishes...
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Janis Thompson
Date: 2/21/2017 9:52:00 AM
Thanks and good to hear from you, Charlie.
Date: 2/19/2017 7:01:00 PM
A whole lotta truth here, Mrs janis. Really nice write:)
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Janis Thompson
Date: 2/21/2017 9:53:00 AM
Thanks. I appreciate your comments, Daniel.
Date: 2/19/2017 5:15:00 PM
Loved the take on ancient gods, somewhere we have forgotten we have created many gods to explain the things we don't understand..good luck in the contest
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Janis Thompson
Date: 3/20/2017 3:16:00 PM
Thanks Frederic.