On a Rock

On a rock high above life smooth faced rain drenched and sun dried I sit watching clouds paint abstract wanderings on the sky awaiting your shadow to appear next to mine (even though I know it won't)

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Sandra Adams

Date: 8/22/2019 3:24:00 PM

one can feel the emptiness in these words as thoughts are pondered...yet there is a slight glimmer of hope in that last verse that mingles with the doubt of thoughts in the clouded mind.... good write! :) hugs

Chris Green
Date: 8/22/2019 3:35:00 PM

Thanks so much Sandra. I am thrilled you enjoyed this one. Sadly that hope diminished rapidly.

Phil Capitano

Date: 1/25/2019 7:35:00 AM

Sad but accepting; life moves us ever closer to where we have to be. Namaste, my friend.

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 1/14/2019 9:05:00 AM

Words that conjure up visions and hope, images and sadness. An excellent write Chris. Poetry wishes, Jennifer.

Chris Green
Date: 1/14/2019 10:50:00 AM

Thank you Jennifer

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 1/13/2019 4:55:00 PM

Perfectly captures that peaceful appreciation of nature, brushed with a touch of regret, well penned!

Chris Green
Date: 1/14/2019 10:50:00 AM

Thanks so much Michelle

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib

Date: 1/9/2019 11:25:00 PM

I think that this is my favouritest ever poem from you. One of those "damn, I wish I wrote that". Word perfect piece. xomo

Chris Green
Date: 1/10/2019 7:53:00 AM

Thank you so very much my friend. I appreciate your kindness always. I am happy you liked this one Maureen

Alexis Y.

Date: 1/9/2019 3:52:00 PM

Hi Chris, I agree with Charmaine, This is sad yet beautiful at the same time. As always well done- Alexis

Chris Green
Date: 1/9/2019 4:20:00 PM

Thank you so much Alexis

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 1/9/2019 3:03:00 PM

Sad and Beautiful..I can sense longing in this poem...I hope you'll walk into her shadow very sn ..Loved this.

Chris Green
Date: 1/9/2019 3:19:00 PM

Thank you Charmaine, I really appreciate your kind thoughts but, that shadow of mine will always be alone.

Ilene Bauer

Date: 1/9/2019 2:52:00 PM

oh, so sad, chris! beautifully written, though...

Chris Green
Date: 1/9/2019 3:18:00 PM

Thank you so much Ilene

Brandy Nicole

Date: 1/9/2019 2:20:00 PM

"smooth faced" I can't help but softly sigh- as such a touch is comforting. Playful and romantic as well. Your thoughts carry so many emotions. Anything is possible. If it is meant to be, the one you are waiting for, will come back to you. ~ Brandy

Chris Green
Date: 1/9/2019 2:35:00 PM

Thank you so much Brandy but like I have told the others, that is not going to happen. But I do appreciate the thought.

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 1/9/2019 1:44:00 PM

Like the way you describe being rain-drenched and sun-dried, Chris. Did that many times on my boat and there's an earthiness about the way we feel in that state. As for the last line -- maybe she will! Enjoyed, my friend. Nice to see you posting new poetry again. Hugs, carolyn

Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 1/13/2019 10:52:00 PM

I'm sorry to hear the poem is based on personal experience, Chris. Just think, though, how pain influences the canvas and look at what you created in your next two poems. Now don't go cutting off your ear like Van Gogh, but this sad experience has provided the kind of inspiration that leads to masterpieces.

Chris Green
Date: 1/9/2019 1:59:00 PM

Thanks so much Carolyn, but I know she won't. I just need to learn how to accept it. : )

Heidi Sands

Date: 1/9/2019 1:41:00 PM

Oh, this is so nice! Then, the footnote underneath hits like a rock ! Well written Chris :)

Chris Green
Date: 1/9/2019 1:58:00 PM

Thank you Heidi. I appreciate your kindness