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Old and Lonely

through venetian blinds
slanting beams of light peep in
where she sits alone
reminiscing in silence 
hoping that the bell would ring

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25th March, 2015
Contest: Tanka 3
Sponsor: Andrea Dietrich

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Emile Pinet Date: 5/19/2015 1:15:00 PM Your words paint the scene with descriptive words that bring the essence of your experience into our conscious mind and we see what you see and feel what you feel. Emile. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 5/19/2015 4:00:00 PM I am pleased that we're on the same wavelength, Emile. Thank you for another lovely visit. // paul

Judy Konos Date: 4/17/2015 3:57:00 PM Liked it now get in my Captcha contest ..Thanks Judy Login to Reply Judy Konos Date: 4/28/2015 3:00:00 PM Must say with such few words that you have created, the imagination is allowed to run wild and it's even haunting. Paul Callus Date: 4/28/2015 2:24:00 PM Hi Judy! Thank you for stopping by. Sorry, missed your Captcha contest:( but hopefully will be back on Soup for your next contest:) All the best. // paul

Maurice Yvonne Date: 4/1/2015 11:19:00 AM This touches me deeper than any words. I hate how some of the elderly are tossed aside and neglected. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 4/1/2015 12:11:00 PM I am pleased with your repeated visits today, Armand! Knowing how much time you dedicate to your mother, I am sure that you can understand well what I tried to convey with these few lines. Thank you. // paul

Andrea Dietrich Date: 3/30/2015 6:05:00 PM oh, Paul. I see this was your entry for me. I really did like what it was saying. Had I been a bit more generous with my last winner's list, this for sure would have been on it. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 3/31/2015 1:11:00 PM No problem, Andrea; you are a fair judge:) Glad that you like it. My main aim was to bring awareness to elders who are in such situations, and I think that it has been reached. All the best:) // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 3/29/2015 5:54:00 AM shadows of sadness and longing is spelled on your tanka.. :)! Blessed Sunday! ..olive eloisa Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 3/29/2015 7:13:00 AM Thank you!! Yes, old age brings sadness to those who are left on their own, even forgotten by own family. A blessed Sunday to you too:) Hugs // paul

Jack Horne Date: 3/28/2015 7:31:00 AM such a powerful, deep write here, Paul - sure to be a big winner Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 3/28/2015 11:30:00 AM Glad that you found this to your liking, Jack! Thank you for the faith you show in it! All the best. // paul

Constance La France Date: 3/28/2015 7:26:00 AM Paul, you have painted a picture with words, so deep and emotional, I love it, a perfect 7 rating and thanks for visiting my poem, springtime . . . Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 3/28/2015 11:32:00 AM Thank you Constance. Glad you like this short poem, and I appreciate the high rating. Have a nice weekend. // paul

Viv Wigley Date: 3/28/2015 3:43:00 AM Desperate loneliness in five lines. Great work, Paul. Good luck.Regards, Viv Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 3/28/2015 11:28:00 AM Pleased that you enjoyed this write, Viv; thanks for stopping by. // paul

Eve Roper Date: 3/27/2015 12:36:00 PM Paul, I love your poem is so meaningful. A seven and good luck in the contest a winner for sure. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 3/27/2015 3:26:00 PM Thank you Eve, for stopping by with nice wishes and a top rating. Hope you enjoy a lovely weekend. // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 3/27/2015 8:33:00 AM - Paul, whatever forms you write in .... it is always beautiful from you - Good luck in the contest - I wish you a great and relaxed weekend :) - hugs and love // Anne-Lise :) Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 3/27/2015 3:24:00 PM Wow! You flatter me, Anne Lise! But I'll be honest and admit that I enjoy flattery:) Thank you for the lovely comments. May you have a great weekend, too. Hugs /x/ paul

Kp Nunez Date: 3/26/2015 10:42:00 AM It happens...it is real...there lies the sad truth for the elderly. Hence, in our country, we have a culture of deep-seated respect for them. Rarely does it happen when family members would resort to home for the aged. They live with us, till it's their time. Thank you for sharing this, Paul. Kim :) Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 3/26/2015 3:01:00 PM Even here in Malta we have the same culture as yours, but now many homes for the elderly are cropping up, and people are gladly making use of them. Customs change at a fast pace. All the best. // paul

Barbara Gorelick Date: 3/26/2015 3:25:00 AM "will ring"?.. not sure. I like this Paul...I think this is what shes looking for. GL! BG Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 3/26/2015 3:04:00 PM Hi Barbara! This problem for the elderly arises mostly in big countries where distance usually is a deterrent. In small countries, such as Malta, it is less acute. Take care. // paul

Len Gasun Date: 3/25/2015 11:46:00 PM Beautifully sad and an excellent Tanka my very dear friend, Paul. I can relate here. Thank you so much for sharing! My belated thanks as well for your very precious time to visit my page, your lovely comments and kind words about my love. Your kind words were so uplifting that they contained my only hope and wish for my lovelife. More blessings to you! Pls. forgive me for a very delayed visit and reply. love lots and biggest hugs, Leonora Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 3/26/2015 12:55:00 PM Hi Leonora! Thank you for a very lovely visit and for finding my comments uplifting. I understand that you live a busy life and you have other priorities that need paying attention to. Keep well and be happy! Hugs /x/ paul

Njeri Hunjeri Date: 3/25/2015 6:46:00 PM Sad powerful write. All the best in the contest Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 3/26/2015 3:32:00 PM Yes, Njeri...old and lonely is not something to look forward to. Thank you for a lovely visit. // paul

Ilene Bauer Date: 3/25/2015 5:43:00 PM oh, so sad, paul! excellent, though... Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 3/26/2015 3:35:00 PM Thank you for stopping by, Ilene. Love the 'excellent' comment:) // paul

Eileen Manassian Date: 3/25/2015 5:00:00 PM :( this is a sad one. I can relate. Hugs Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 3/26/2015 1:26:00 PM Hi Eileen! Unfortunately these situations do occur, and they are not always preventable. That's life:( Hugs ... paul

Kim Shaw Date: 3/25/2015 4:12:00 PM Such long, lonely hours for our dear seniors. I felt that I was in the room. Strong imagery, Paul! Hugs, Kimberly Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 3/26/2015 3:45:00 PM Thank your for the insightful comments, Kimberly; enjoyed your visit! hugs // paul

Thomas Kourkoulis Date: 3/25/2015 4:10:00 PM A beautiful poem. It captures such emotion. I see an older woman, wanting the contact of family and friends. I hope the bell rings too. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 3/26/2015 3:47:00 PM You read the poem very well, Thomas. Thank you for both visit and comments. All the best. // paul

Jan Allison Date: 3/25/2015 3:58:00 PM so so beautiful - sad imagery this is a lovely read Paul - good luck:-) Hugs jan xx 7 xx Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 3/26/2015 3:48:00 PM I lived with it with mum and dad - not something i am looking forward to either! Hugs jan xx Paul Callus Date: 3/26/2015 3:43:00 PM Thank you Jan. This is why many people are afraid of old age:( I write about it, but I try not to think about it!! Hugs // paul

Dorian Petersen Potter Date: 3/25/2015 3:54:00 PM Excellent pen Paul! You've captured vividly the feeling of sadness, old age, loneliness and the yearning in this excellent tanka, my dear friend. Well written! I enjoyed your piece. A 7 from me! Wish you all the best in this contest! Thank you for sharing! Wishing you a very lovely day! In his light! God bless you! :-) D Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 3/26/2015 3:48:00 PM Thank you Dorian; your insightful comments are much appreciated, so are your lovely visit and high rating! God bless. // paul