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Old and Lonely

through venetian blinds slanting beams of light peep in where she sits alone reminiscing in silence hoping that the bell would ring ---------------------------------- 25th March, 2015 Contest: Tanka 3 Sponsor: Andrea Dietrich

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Emile Pinet

Date: 5/19/2015 1:15:00 PM

Your words paint the scene with descriptive words that bring the essence of your experience into our conscious mind and we see what you see and feel what you feel. Emile.

Paul Callus
Date: 5/19/2015 4:00:00 PM

I am pleased that we're on the same wavelength, Emile. Thank you for another lovely visit. // paul

Judy Konos

Date: 4/17/2015 3:57:00 PM

Liked it now get in my Captcha contest ..Thanks Judy

Judy Konos
Date: 4/28/2015 3:00:00 PM

Must say with such few words that you have created, the imagination is allowed to run wild and it's even haunting.

Paul Callus
Date: 4/28/2015 2:24:00 PM

Hi Judy! Thank you for stopping by. Sorry, missed your Captcha contest:( but hopefully will be back on Soup for your next contest:) All the best. // paul

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 4/1/2015 11:19:00 AM

This touches me deeper than any words. I hate how some of the elderly are tossed aside and neglected.

Paul Callus
Date: 4/1/2015 12:11:00 PM

I am pleased with your repeated visits today, Armand! Knowing how much time you dedicate to your mother, I am sure that you can understand well what I tried to convey with these few lines. Thank you. // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/30/2015 6:05:00 PM

oh, Paul. I see this was your entry for me. I really did like what it was saying. Had I been a bit more generous with my last winner's list, this for sure would have been on it.

Paul Callus
Date: 3/31/2015 1:11:00 PM

No problem, Andrea; you are a fair judge:) Glad that you like it. My main aim was to bring awareness to elders who are in such situations, and I think that it has been reached. All the best:) // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 3/29/2015 5:54:00 AM

shadows of sadness and longing is spelled on your tanka.. :)! Blessed Sunday! ..olive eloisa

Paul Callus
Date: 3/29/2015 7:13:00 AM

Thank you!! Yes, old age brings sadness to those who are left on their own, even forgotten by own family. A blessed Sunday to you too:) Hugs // paul

Jack Horne

Date: 3/28/2015 7:31:00 AM

such a powerful, deep write here, Paul - sure to be a big winner

Paul Callus
Date: 3/28/2015 11:30:00 AM

Glad that you found this to your liking, Jack! Thank you for the faith you show in it! All the best. // paul

Constance La France

Date: 3/28/2015 7:26:00 AM

Paul, you have painted a picture with words, so deep and emotional, I love it, a perfect 7 rating and thanks for visiting my poem, springtime . . .

Paul Callus
Date: 3/28/2015 11:32:00 AM

Thank you Constance. Glad you like this short poem, and I appreciate the high rating. Have a nice weekend. // paul

Viv Wigley

Date: 3/28/2015 3:43:00 AM

Desperate loneliness in five lines. Great work, Paul. Good luck.Regards, Viv

Paul Callus
Date: 3/28/2015 11:28:00 AM

Pleased that you enjoyed this write, Viv; thanks for stopping by. // paul

Eve Roper

Date: 3/27/2015 12:36:00 PM

Paul, I love your poem is so meaningful. A seven and good luck in the contest a winner for sure.

Paul Callus
Date: 3/27/2015 3:26:00 PM

Thank you Eve, for stopping by with nice wishes and a top rating. Hope you enjoy a lovely weekend. // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 3/27/2015 8:33:00 AM

- Paul, whatever forms you write in .... it is always beautiful from you - Good luck in the contest - I wish you a great and relaxed weekend :) - hugs and love // Anne-Lise :)

Paul Callus
Date: 3/27/2015 3:24:00 PM

Wow! You flatter me, Anne Lise! But I'll be honest and admit that I enjoy flattery:) Thank you for the lovely comments. May you have a great weekend, too. Hugs /x/ paul

Kp Nunez

Date: 3/26/2015 10:42:00 AM

It happens...it is real...there lies the sad truth for the elderly. Hence, in our country, we have a culture of deep-seated respect for them. Rarely does it happen when family members would resort to home for the aged. They live with us, till it's their time. Thank you for sharing this, Paul. Kim :)

Paul Callus
Date: 3/26/2015 3:01:00 PM

Even here in Malta we have the same culture as yours, but now many homes for the elderly are cropping up, and people are gladly making use of them. Customs change at a fast pace. All the best. // paul

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 3/26/2015 3:25:00 AM

"will ring"?.. not sure. I like this Paul...I think this is what shes looking for. GL! BG

Paul Callus
Date: 3/26/2015 3:04:00 PM

Hi Barbara! This problem for the elderly arises mostly in big countries where distance usually is a deterrent. In small countries, such as Malta, it is less acute. Take care. // paul

Len Gasun

Date: 3/25/2015 11:46:00 PM

Beautifully sad and an excellent Tanka my very dear friend, Paul. I can relate here. Thank you so much for sharing! My belated thanks as well for your very precious time to visit my page, your lovely comments and kind words about my love. Your kind words were so uplifting that they contained my only hope and wish for my lovelife. More blessings to you! Pls. forgive me for a very delayed visit and reply. love lots and biggest hugs, Leonora

Paul Callus
Date: 3/26/2015 12:55:00 PM

Hi Leonora! Thank you for a very lovely visit and for finding my comments uplifting. I understand that you live a busy life and you have other priorities that need paying attention to. Keep well and be happy! Hugs /x/ paul

Njeri Hunjeri

Date: 3/25/2015 6:46:00 PM

Sad powerful write. All the best in the contest

Paul Callus
Date: 3/26/2015 3:32:00 PM

Yes, Njeri...old and lonely is not something to look forward to. Thank you for a lovely visit. // paul

Ilene Bauer

Date: 3/25/2015 5:43:00 PM

oh, so sad, paul! excellent, though...

Paul Callus
Date: 3/26/2015 3:35:00 PM

Thank you for stopping by, Ilene. Love the 'excellent' comment:) // paul

Eileen Manassian

Date: 3/25/2015 5:00:00 PM

:( this is a sad one. I can relate. Hugs

Paul Callus
Date: 3/26/2015 1:26:00 PM

Hi Eileen! Unfortunately these situations do occur, and they are not always preventable. That's life:( Hugs ... paul

Kim Shaw

Date: 3/25/2015 4:12:00 PM

Such long, lonely hours for our dear seniors. I felt that I was in the room. Strong imagery, Paul! Hugs, Kimberly

Paul Callus
Date: 3/26/2015 3:45:00 PM

Thank your for the insightful comments, Kimberly; enjoyed your visit! hugs // paul

Thomas Kourkoulis

Date: 3/25/2015 4:10:00 PM

A beautiful poem. It captures such emotion. I see an older woman, wanting the contact of family and friends. I hope the bell rings too.

Paul Callus
Date: 3/26/2015 3:47:00 PM

You read the poem very well, Thomas. Thank you for both visit and comments. All the best. // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 3/25/2015 3:58:00 PM

so so beautiful - sad imagery this is a lovely read Paul - good luck:-) Hugs jan xx 7 xx

Jan Allison
Date: 3/26/2015 3:48:00 PM

I lived with it with mum and dad - not something i am looking forward to either! Hugs jan xx

Paul Callus
Date: 3/26/2015 3:43:00 PM

Thank you Jan. This is why many people are afraid of old age:( I write about it, but I try not to think about it!! Hugs // paul

Dorian Petersen Potter

Date: 3/25/2015 3:54:00 PM

Excellent pen Paul! You've captured vividly the feeling of sadness, old age, loneliness and the yearning in this excellent tanka, my dear friend. Well written! I enjoyed your piece. A 7 from me! Wish you all the best in this contest! Thank you for sharing! Wishing you a very lovely day! In his light! God bless you! :-) D

Paul Callus
Date: 3/26/2015 3:48:00 PM

Thank you Dorian; your insightful comments are much appreciated, so are your lovely visit and high rating! God bless. // paul