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Old Age is a Buzz Kill- Two Lenses

How I loved summer fairs - the cool night wind in my hair as I twirled on the tilt-a-whirl or climbing into sky. . . then descending at lightening speed, stomach leaping at the thrill of it; I was buzzed, wishing it would never end. My fifty-ninth birthday at the state fair, I sampled again the drug I craved when I bought two tickets for rides. But my pleasure was short-lived. By the second ride and feeling nauseous, I had to accept I’d taken my last ride. Written 2/25 For the Two Lenses Poetry Contest of Sara Kendrick

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Date: 4/23/2016 3:17:00 PM
I like what you did with the two-lens effect and the upside down etheree. I used to love shrimp. Couldn't get enough of them -- especially shrimp cocktail. Today, I can't even look at them without getting sick to my stomach. Strange....
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Date: 3/5/2016 4:42:00 AM
Awesome win
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Date: 3/3/2016 7:29:00 AM
Isn't the worse thing ever to realize that something that thrilled you in your younger years makes you nauseated now.
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Date: 3/2/2016 8:07:00 AM
Great contrast for your 'two lenses' poem, Andrea. Congratulations on your win. Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 3/1/2016 12:46:00 AM
Wonderfully executed, Andrea! I love how your words escalated with excitement in the first part, and then de-escalated with the second part, thus complimenting the shape. I love my roller-coasters ... when I was in my tween years I always took Dramamine because I feared I would get sick. One day I forgot too, and I was the only one in the group that DIDN'T get sick. I suppose my stomach was stronger than I thought.
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Date: 2/29/2016 9:32:00 PM
A very nice write and I liked the format of this poem
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Date: 2/29/2016 11:38:00 AM
Congratulations on a winning etheree in which you do not shy away from declaring your age, Andrea:) I must admit that it's rollercoasters that I stay away from now! // paul
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Date: 2/29/2016 3:50:00 AM
Hi Andrea. Congrats for your top placement with this beautiful poem!!!! ;-)
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Date: 2/28/2016 9:28:00 PM
So true...even as a child I never liked these rides ... wonderfully penned. Hugs, Bobby
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Date: 2/28/2016 2:58:00 PM
I'm exactly the same Andrea - no way will you get me on fairground rides now lol:-) congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 2/28/2016 7:37:00 AM
Congrats on your winning work..Sorry about the mix up..Sara
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Date: 2/28/2016 7:09:00 AM
Agreed, things change and they must be accepted... Congratulations Andrea.
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Date: 2/27/2016 11:40:00 PM
G'day Andrea ... had a good giggle over this poem. Perhaps its too close to home - good luck again - Lindsay
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Date: 2/27/2016 4:54:00 PM
Why do you have to hit me in the feels like that? A good poem about how growing up isn't always so good. But it's life. I'm nineteen, but I still long to relive my past at times.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 2/27/2016 5:10:00 PM
you are still a baby, and very lucky to be so. Enjoy those carnival rides. Around 35 or 40 they won't feel so hot!!
Date: 2/27/2016 12:54:00 PM
It's never too late, Andrea, but I know what you mean.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 2/27/2016 5:10:00 PM
It's too late to enjoy carnival rides. haha
Date: 2/27/2016 12:33:00 PM
i still love country fairs though i just enjoy the scenes now, andie... ohh, sine, fine write!..huggs
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Date: 2/27/2016 11:48:00 AM
Went out on a blind date with this stiff gal. I'd given up hope we would hit it off and then we rode on a killer coaster. Boy did she grab hold of me! As ever, you bring things to life in a most charming way. Love, daver
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Date: 2/27/2016 10:07:00 AM
Indeed those lenses swept me to my own childhood...and to my own maturing age : ).. Listen Andrea, maybe some rides we cannot risk to do anymore, but us girls will always find our way to have fun. Loved your post.
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Date: 2/27/2016 9:34:00 AM
When I go to six flags with my oldest daughter, she loves the roller coasters, I used to also but now my head aches unless it is smooth ride. yes we are getting older
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Date: 2/27/2016 6:07:00 AM
Good one, Andrea....yes...it's sad how time changes us. We need to find other things to give us thrills....if you catch my drift.. ;) hugs, dear one
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Date: 2/27/2016 3:44:00 AM
This is so fantastic!! The form is lovely too.. All the best in the contest, dear Andrea!! :D :D
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Date: 2/27/2016 12:39:00 AM
I enjoyed this one, Andrea! And I love the form as well
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Date: 2/26/2016 9:50:00 PM
You should have brought me, we could have focused on the cotton candy!!!! Loved this!
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Charmaine Chircop
Date: 2/27/2016 10:04:00 AM
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Date: 2/26/2016 9:48:00 PM
This looks like a "shape" poem to me. I did not re- post my poem - just described a different season. I like fairs, too. You should check out Coney Island if you ever come to NYC. The Cylone rollercoaster terrified me when I rod it the last time - and I think it will be the last time I ever go on it. Peace & Love Matthew Anish
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Date: 2/26/2016 8:23:00 PM
I know the feeling Andrea :) this will do well in the contest...nicely written
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