Old Age Footles

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Behold, Too old Life, tough Days rough Legs slip Words lisp Cheeks cave Spirits rave Knees jerk They irk Lungs weak Bones creak Nerves shrink Joints clink Legs lag Days drag Ears shut Eyes hurt Skin sags Mind lags Lose zest Need rest Twilight, Don’t spite. Death near, End clear. Old age- In cage Old age- Last stage Don’t cry, Wipe dry. Soul flies None dies _______________ July.5.2022 ~Plced Fifth~ Brian Strand Premiere Choice Poetry Contest

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 7/9/2022 12:40:00 PM

Reads like a good contender for Brian's contest. Way to go. I enjoyed reading your pitfalls of getting older, but some people seem to hold up better than others. Your visit to my page was delightful. Sara

Anil Deo

Date: 7/9/2022 7:06:00 AM

Love this, and the last footle of Christ centered hope

Sam Kauffman

Date: 7/8/2022 9:45:00 AM

Valsa, such creative footles! You really have captured the rhyming lyrical quality of the form along with the beautiful statement of faith at the end - "soul flies/none dies." Amen dear friend! Blessings!

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 7/7/2022 4:09:00 PM

what a lovely set of footles, I enjoyed the decline , ladder down, but I don't frown, cuz I know that on the other side, our smiles will return, Congrats on your win dear friend, take care, xo

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 7/6/2022 12:46:00 PM

Love it! Congratulations!

Christuraj Alex

Date: 7/6/2022 10:21:00 AM

Great work! Congratulations!

Gershon Wolf

Date: 7/5/2022 6:11:00 PM

Gosh. I sure am glad that I am so young. You have scared the bejeebers out of me, Valsa. (--whatever that means. lol.) Serious stringing of great footles here: back-to-back-to-foot-to-foot-to-back-to-foot...and back! :) gw

Sotto Poet

Date: 7/5/2022 3:37:00 PM

Valsa, your excellent footle has highlighted several age-related concerns with all of us. All of the verses are perfectly aligned with the other. Good luck in the contest.