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Oh, My Withered Dreams Premiere Contest Winner

. . . I am lost in a sea of memories that scar the roadmap of my bleeding soul; my words- the highway to my deep pain. I follow a labyrinth of passages and corridors curved and contrived- I am a child praying. Oh, my withered dreams, my hopes, my aspirations! Why do I dreg up my past sorrows that come drifting like a dark death melody . . . my grief comes unbidden to stain my years- my tears hang from dripping branches in a . . . graveyard where tombs stand in rows and rows. Oh- grass grows greener in a graveyard, and the happy hummingbirds hover in heavenly harmony and red roses decay- the wind a violin . . . (Blood seeps from the dagger in my heart!) Barefoot, ragged, hair tangled- I am a girl lost in the sad wail of violin winds; . . . life stretches before me like a long road. I am sick of all the sorrow- decay, I want days as clear as sparkling wine, to live a life of peace and serenity; days brilliant blue and nights full of stars, picture perfect, instead of this vast empty place . . . Oh, bitter this life- yet a fire burns inside of me and soon it will explode . . . _________________________________ February 13, 2017 Poetry/Free Verse/Oh, My Withered Dreams Copyright Protected, ID 02- 875-889-13 All Rights Reserved, 2017, Constance La France Submitted to the Standard contest, Best Free Verse This Year, sponsor, John Hamilton, Judged 2017 Second Place ________________________________________ For the contest, Any Free Verse 200 Words or Less Sponsor, Laura Loo Judged First Place

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Date: 3/23/2017 12:49:00 PM
Congratulations, Broken Wings, on your win… ~*
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Date: 3/22/2017 8:57:00 AM
Dark and engrossing! Congrats !
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Date: 3/22/2017 8:33:00 AM
Greetings, BW!! Congrats for your well, deserved second placement with this brilliant piece!!! ;-)
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Date: 3/21/2017 6:43:00 PM
Beautiful poem AND placement, Constance. A wow one! Congrats
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Date: 3/21/2017 12:51:00 PM
Beautifully written Constance, excellent word choices congrats on your 2nd place win!
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Date: 3/21/2017 11:21:00 AM
So very well done Constance, congratulations...
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Date: 2/24/2017 8:17:00 AM
This is wonderful BW. "I follow a labyrinth of passages and corridors curved and contrived-", I love this line.
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Date: 2/18/2017 7:11:00 AM
Beautifully done Constance, love the sadness in the "violin winds". Congrats on this wonderful win.
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Date: 2/17/2017 4:20:00 AM
An amazing write, Constance, that showcases your brilliance:) ''my tears hang from dripping branches" - I loved that painful expression :) a 7:) congratulations:)
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Date: 2/15/2017 9:05:00 PM
I love your poems, Constance...so poignant yet beautiful and hopeful too. This genius poem is no exception! Congrats on your well deserved first place win...hugs, Rhonda
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Constance La France
Date: 2/16/2017 11:02:00 AM
Rhonda thanks for the nice comment and congratulations ~
Date: 2/15/2017 2:04:00 PM
Such deep sadness and sorrow so beautifully expressed in your excellent poetry, Constance. Congrats on your win :)
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Constance La France
Date: 2/16/2017 11:03:00 AM
Laura Thank you for the lovely praise and congrats
Date: 2/15/2017 10:19:00 AM
..."yet a fire burns inside of me and soon it will explode..." BW I think that "fire" finds its flames within you and scorches the paper with explosions of poetic catharsis. An exemplary write this left me stunned in my chair. Congrats on the well deserved top spot in the contest.
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Constance La France
Date: 2/16/2017 11:09:00 AM
John Thanks for that amazing comment and congratulations
Date: 2/15/2017 9:51:00 AM
A not so happy violintine to you too Wings...as usual...dark, dark, and dark...I love it...congrats!!!...god bless...^WW^
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Constance La France
Date: 2/16/2017 11:10:00 AM
Winged thanks for the congratulations. Well you know me dark is what I do
Date: 2/15/2017 9:29:00 AM
oh my word- such beauty held in these verses Broken Wings- I got teary eyed towards the middle...awesome poem...thank you and congrats :)-luloo
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Constance La France
Date: 2/16/2017 11:14:00 AM
Laura Thank you for the forever inspiration to create my poems and thanks for my awesome placement
Date: 2/13/2017 6:20:00 PM
Deep and dark and stunning !! ~~Jeanie~~
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Constance La France
Date: 2/14/2017 1:12:00 PM
Jeanie, thank you for the compliment
Date: 2/13/2017 5:22:00 PM
sorrow is born in a moment of pain then stays like a shadow revealing itself whenever the heart seeks the lonely spaces where memories hide...your poem took me to that lonely space
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Constance La France
Date: 2/14/2017 10:27:00 AM
Frederic Thanks for seeing into my lonely soul
Date: 2/13/2017 4:58:00 PM
Very deep and hauntingly dark my friend. Your poetry is always so filled with such imagery and incredible descriptive phrasing that paints scene on the minds of your readers, this one is painted in dark muted tones but still a masterpiece of poetic emotions.
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Constance La France
Date: 2/14/2017 10:25:00 AM
Chris thanks for the amazing compliment, oh yes I do tend to write dark

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