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Off the Track

The train whistle blew. It headed for my front door. I was terrified. It chased me from room to room. I hid; it gave up and left. © February 19, 2011 Dane Smith-Johnsen Recounted and written for the "Tanka me a Dream" contest.

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Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 2/25/2011 10:44:00 AM

Congratulations on your well deserved win in Michael's contest Dane Ann. Love, Carol

Michael J. Falotico

Date: 2/23/2011 1:56:00 PM

I really loved your write and a super congrats on your win...love Michael

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 2/23/2011 1:51:00 AM

whew! glad to know it left :) Congrats on your win with this suspenseful tanka, Dane Ann :)

Kash Poet

Date: 2/22/2011 11:02:00 AM

Nice Tanka with an unusual dream.Congrats on your win,Dane---kashinath

Wilma Neels

Date: 2/22/2011 10:48:00 AM

Quite an interesting write DA, congratulations on your win ;-)

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 2/22/2011 9:19:00 AM

Congrats Dane Ann on your super win in the Dream Tanka contest with another amazing write luv.. enjoy your top ten win..

John Freeman

Date: 2/22/2011 8:16:00 AM

Good to see you in the top 10 again Dane. Congratulations on your poem's 8th place. Agape, Moses

Nette Onclaud

Date: 2/22/2011 7:50:00 AM

what an unusual dream from your lovely pen. dane... best congrast toy uo! :) huggs,nettte

Robert Pettit

Date: 2/22/2011 12:01:00 AM

You were being chased by a derailed train? That was one hell of a dream! Congratulations on winning in Michael's contest with this fine entry.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/21/2011 11:06:00 PM

Oh, I don't think i saw this one yet. I really like this, Dane Ann. Congratulations.

Audrey Haick

Date: 2/21/2011 10:17:00 PM

Congratulations on you win in the contest. Always, Annalise

Tahera Mannan

Date: 2/21/2011 8:44:00 PM

Super dream. Many congratulations my dear friend.

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 2/21/2011 5:46:00 PM

Congratulations on this win in the contest of Michael, Dane

Caryl Muzzey

Date: 2/21/2011 5:21:00 PM

Congratulations on your eighth place win, I enjoyed the read. Caryl

Sara Kendrick

Date: 2/21/2011 4:23:00 PM

Congratulations on your win..Sara

Joyce Johnson

Date: 2/21/2011 3:46:00 PM

These crazy, scary dreams are hard to forget. copngratulations on your win Dane Anne. Love, Joyce

Robert A. Dufresne

Date: 2/20/2011 6:56:00 AM

interesting unique dream! enjoyed it Dane. This is going to be a hard contest to judge! Good luck

Nette Onclaud

Date: 2/19/2011 5:02:00 PM

a shrill thriller , dane! now, i'm terrified to sleep.. what an imaginative mind..hoping to see you in the winners' list! :) huggs, nette

Sara Kendrick

Date: 2/19/2011 4:48:00 PM

That would be a nightmare..Good luck in the contest..Sara

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 2/19/2011 4:26:00 PM

Wow, I had a similar dream one time, Dane. This is a great entry for the dream contest. I do hope you're feeling better today. Constance posted a beautiful picture for her latest "Reflection" contest. Maybe it will make you smile to look at it. I had fun writing about it. Didn't get to St. Augustine today, but am definitely going tomorrow. The bathroom is done! Love, Carolyn