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Oceans Apart

Distant notes adrift of a lone melancholic mandolin Astride a gentle breeze covetous caress to my skin Seductive and voluptuous a most impassioned plea Bursts a sunset with fervent shades of lush alizarin Promising nonchalant sensory whispers of ecstasy Gardenia jasmine honeysuckle and stargazer lily Sweet alluring seductive magnetic pull of my heart Disintegrating it to a unique trickle of precarious filigree Tantalizing lure elevated to consummate succulent art How can I tolerate for us to be any longer apart Each night my dreams reach for you though a pinhole And tears in my nights only long for you, mine sweetheart Nightly ritual to engage you in a slow dance with my gallivanting soul Somehow soothing as I refuse to let myself fall through a sinkhole A most inopportune war keeping us separate and in distress Longing to touch you to hold you and arm in arm go for a stroll Reminiscing feverish tête-à-têtes with such unambiguous finesse Reduced to anything I would acquiesce rendering me breathless Yearning burning craving for a fiery and steamy rendezvous to dispel chagrin I would do anything at this point there is nothing I would not transgress AP: 2nd place 2020 Submitted on May 4, 2018 for contest NEW POEMS (8 DIFFICULT WORDS) sponsored by EMILE PINET - RANKED 1ST

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Samuel Otieng

Date: 5/16/2018 1:51:00 AM

Congratulations on your win.

Line Gauthier
Date: 5/16/2018 11:26:00 AM

Thanks, Samuel. Much appreciated.

Susan Gentry

Date: 5/15/2018 4:05:00 PM

Congratulations on your win! Awesome!

Line Gauthier
Date: 5/16/2018 11:26:00 AM

Thanks, Susan, for your much appreciated visit and comment.

Heidi Sands

Date: 5/14/2018 1:51:00 PM

Congratulations for your win Line :)

Line Gauthier
Date: 5/16/2018 11:26:00 AM

Thank, Heidi. Much appreciated.

Natasha Turner

Date: 5/14/2018 1:31:00 AM

Splendid! Congrats :)

Line Gauthier
Date: 5/14/2018 9:39:00 AM

Thank you so much, Natasha, for your lovely visit and comment.

Laura Leiser

Date: 5/13/2018 7:13:00 PM

Magnificent poetic pen in this outstanding poem, Line! Your command of exquisite words shows, filled with meaning and depth. A well deserved top win! Congrats :)

Line Gauthier
Date: 5/13/2018 7:44:00 PM

Thank you so much, Laura. Most appreciated.

Janis Thompson

Date: 5/13/2018 3:39:00 PM

What a work. Well deserving of a trophy win. Congratulations Line.

Line Gauthier
Date: 5/13/2018 3:42:00 PM

Thank you, Sian, for your most appreciated visit and comment.

Jean Murray

Date: 5/13/2018 3:24:00 PM

Wow! So well deserving of top place Line.

Line Gauthier
Date: 5/13/2018 3:42:00 PM

Thank you, Jean. Most appreciated.

Winged Warrior

Date: 5/13/2018 8:20:00 AM

Congrats! Line...superbly done my friend...love & light...^WW^

Line Gauthier
Date: 5/13/2018 9:08:00 AM

Thanks, WW. Not my usual style but that's where the challenge of the 8 words took me.

Moon Flower

Date: 5/13/2018 1:47:00 AM

I think Rubaiyat is another detailed form. Tried this once in one of my writings. :D Congratulations, Line.

Line Gauthier
Date: 5/13/2018 9:09:00 AM

Thanks for your visit and for leaving a comment, Moon Flower.

Tom Cunningham

Date: 5/13/2018 1:11:00 AM

Well deserved win line. Congratulations. Tom.

Line Gauthier
Date: 5/13/2018 9:09:00 AM

Thanks, Tom. Much appreciated.

Michael Wegman

Date: 5/12/2018 9:00:00 PM

AMAZING IMAGERY. Love this one. Well done and CONGRATS!

Line Gauthier
Date: 5/12/2018 9:23:00 PM

Thank you, Michael, for your much appreciated visit and comment.

Eve Roper

Date: 5/12/2018 8:38:00 PM

Congratulations on your win, Line..

Line Gauthier
Date: 5/12/2018 9:24:00 PM

Thank you, Eve. Much appreciated.

Sandra Haight

Date: 5/12/2018 7:15:00 PM

Such a beautifully-written, heartfelt poem, with so much deep and sad emotional imagery expressed within this difficult form, Line. Congratulations on your well-deserved 1st Place Trophy win. A truly amazing poem. Hugs, Sandra

Line Gauthier
Date: 5/12/2018 9:25:00 PM

Thank you so much, Sandra. Most appreciated.

Reason A. Poteet

Date: 5/12/2018 7:13:00 PM

Tough contest to judge? tough contest to place - salutations to you Line, for taking top spot. A steamy piece as you more than allude. The words were really random and you included a few of your own as great matches.

Line Gauthier
Date: 5/12/2018 9:28:00 PM

I know Premieres are touch to place. I've had more than my share on N/A's. Too many good poets, that's the darn problem. LOL

Mike Gentile

Date: 5/12/2018 7:05:00 PM

Congratulations Line, your poem is amazing, well done xxoo

Line Gauthier
Date: 5/12/2018 9:29:00 PM

Thanks, Mike. Most appreciated.

Emile Pinet

Date: 5/12/2018 6:50:00 PM

Congratulations Line, your poem earned First place in my contest, it was a very tough contest to judge, well done my friend, Emile.

Line Gauthier
Date: 5/12/2018 8:23:00 PM

OMG - two wins in a row for me after so many N/A's from you, Emile... I think it's the form that is the winner but I'll take it. Thank you so much.

Leanne Lovejoy-Burton

Date: 5/7/2018 1:38:00 AM

That last stanza is a ripper. Love the entire poem. Good luck with the contest.

Line Gauthier
Date: 5/7/2018 7:29:00 AM

Thank you for your lovely visit and comment, Leanne.

Kai Michael Neumann

Date: 5/7/2018 1:27:00 AM

That is so poignant of our time. Beautifully written with such a fine bouquet of images. Sad. Passionate and longing. Great

Line Gauthier
Date: 5/7/2018 7:30:00 AM

Thank you so much, Kai. I appreciate your visit and kind comment.

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 5/6/2018 8:37:00 PM

Good luck in the contest. This heart-felt poem is a clear winner.

Line Gauthier
Date: 5/6/2018 9:15:00 PM

Thanks, Caren, but nothing is ever a sure thing with contests or do you not know that yet? LOL

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/5/2018 12:08:00 AM

wow, I never saw this form before, interlocking as it is. This is a marvelous poem you came up with. I surely hope you get on the list with a luscious and passionate gem like this!

Line Gauthier
Date: 5/5/2018 9:23:00 AM

Emile Pinet introduced me to this beautiful form actually. Thank you.

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 5/4/2018 3:53:00 PM

Love the passion and urgency in this - so vivid!

Line Gauthier
Date: 5/4/2018 6:19:00 PM

Thank you so much, Michelle, for your lovely visit and comment.