Obsessive Orange

United Colours: Orange Sponsor: Silent One Pathological agreements made from your spicy allegations, neurotic contributions based on a fire lit from clay, all the inescapable state of affairs from intimidating celebrations my amber ways, your mania stays, controlling on display. Your jealousy contingent upon my belated positive actions, my fear portrayed from your rusted all-consuming conditions, you've torn my ability to react in sanity, that's only a fraction, I'm left like a prey from a tiger meal, a life full of constriction. Burnt fanatic beliefs you have seen me as your property, your bronze so metallic it shines through out the universe, I need an escape from your unrighteous crowned monarchy, you never knew how to treat me right, and put me first. It has been stated from the fellowship I carry outside you, I deserve fields of marigolds with apricots for dessert, I made myself a promise to stay away, now we are through, no more bittersweet memories, I am done being hurt. Different shades of orange: 1. Fire 2. Clay 3. Amber 4. Rust 5. Tiger 6. Bronze 7. Metallic 8. Marigolds 9. Apricots 10. Bittersweet 11. Spice 12. Burnt ~Date Written: March 4, 2016~
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Mcclain Avatar
March 8, 2016 at 7:41 PM
Hi Laura, Wow, nice poem--big congrats on your outright victory. Way to go. Oh, you can add #13 to your list: Monarch(y) Ain't nothin' more orange than a Monarch Butterfly. Cheers, Brian
Scars Avatar
March 8, 2016 at 8:55 PM
Thanks Brian, yeah my usage of monarchy was directed an a monarch butterfly. You're right, I should've added that to #13! Have a great night Brian :)-luloo
Delaney Avatar
March 8, 2016 at 12:19 AM
Wow a powerful piece. Congrats on your top placement. Hugs SuZ
Scars Avatar
March 8, 2016 at 12:35 PM
Thanks Suz...:)-luloo *Smiles*
Kendrick Avatar
March 7, 2016 at 10:06 AM
Interesting work that hit the orange list..Congrats on your placement..Sara
Scars Avatar
March 7, 2016 at 2:30 PM
Thank you Sara very much :)- luloo *smiles*
Kimathi Avatar
March 7, 2016 at 5:57 AM
Hi Laura. Congrats for your awesome, first placement in the contest!!! ;-)
Scars Avatar
March 7, 2016 at 8:11 AM
many thanks Teddy :)-luloo *smiles*
Raina Avatar
March 6, 2016 at 11:41 PM
Congratulations on your win !! An out of the box thinking....great job Laura.
Scars Avatar
March 7, 2016 at 8:10 AM
Thank you Meenakshi :)-luloo *smiles*
Gupta Avatar
March 6, 2016 at 10:45 PM
A well deserved top placement...Congratulations...
Scars Avatar
March 7, 2016 at 8:10 AM
Thank you Probir :)-luloo *Smiles*
Scars Avatar
March 7, 2016 at 8:09 AM
Thank you Probir :)-luloo *Smiles*
Raven Avatar
March 6, 2016 at 6:54 PM
Hi Luloo, congratulations on your 1st place win in the contest. Love the creativity in the write, well deserved win. A seven from me....Vlad.
Scars Avatar
March 6, 2016 at 8:45 PM
Thank you Vlad :)-luloo
Negron Flores Avatar
March 6, 2016 at 5:11 PM
Congratulations on the first placement of the contest Laura
Scars Avatar
March 6, 2016 at 5:27 PM
Thank you Nayda :)-luloo *smiles*
Leiser Avatar
March 6, 2016 at 3:19 PM
Congrats on your top shelf win, Laura! Very well thought out poem you have here :)
Scars Avatar
March 6, 2016 at 3:28 PM
Thank you Laura :)-luloo *smiles*
Johnson Avatar
March 6, 2016 at 3:00 PM
Great thinking to write this poem on orange of which I could think nothing, positive or negative. Congratulations. Love, Joyce
Scars Avatar
March 6, 2016 at 3:28 PM
Thank you Joyce :)-luloo *smiles*
Hicks Avatar
March 6, 2016 at 2:26 PM
Very creative and unique, Laura. I've never thought of orange in this fashion, but I like where you went with it. To possibly add to your shades of orange, when you said "monarchy" I couldn't help but think of those black and orange monarch butterflies. Congrats on your top place win!
Scars Avatar
March 6, 2016 at 3:27 PM
Thank you lovely lady :)-luloo *smiles*
Scars Avatar
March 6, 2016 at 2:52 PM
Thank you Timothy, yes "monarchy" referred to monarch butterflies like you mentioned. Many thanks! -luloo *smiles*
Gorelick Avatar
March 6, 2016 at 1:26 PM
So different! Congrats on a big win. BG
Scars Avatar
March 6, 2016 at 3:27 PM
Thank you Barbara :)-luloo *smiles*
Allison Avatar
March 6, 2016 at 12:41 PM
You really thought outside the box LuLoo:-) many congrats:-) hugs jan xx
Smith Avatar
March 6, 2016 at 11:44 AM
No surprise. Congratulations luloo
Scars Avatar
March 6, 2016 at 11:59 AM
Thank you for all your kind feedback Charlie, much appreciated :) -luloo *thanks*
Haight Avatar
March 6, 2016 at 11:30 AM
My heartfelt congratulations to you Laura Loo, for your well-deserved First Place win! Very 'outside the box' and beautifully written! Hugs, Sandra
Scars Avatar
March 6, 2016 at 11:55 AM
Many thanks sweet Sandra! -luloo *smiles* :)
Milliner Avatar
March 6, 2016 at 11:00 AM
A very passionate write, congratulations on your first place win!!
Scars Avatar
March 6, 2016 at 11:55 AM
Thank you Sarita:)-luloo *smiles*
Carmack Avatar
March 6, 2016 at 10:51 AM
Hey Laura, congrats on your first place win.
Scars Avatar
March 6, 2016 at 10:53 AM
Thank you very much Rob :)-luloo
Jameson Avatar
March 6, 2016 at 10:37 AM
A fine write-- congratulations on the top podium spot luloo!
Scars Avatar
March 6, 2016 at 10:54 AM
thank you Sam :)-luloo *smiles*
Dietrich Avatar
March 6, 2016 at 10:16 AM
WOW, GREAT placement. and BIG congrats. I remember this one and how hard you worked on it.
Scars Avatar
March 6, 2016 at 10:26 AM
many thanks Andrea :)-luloo *smiles*
Andresen Avatar
March 6, 2016 at 8:59 AM
- Laura, congratulations on your win in contest: ORANGE - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Scars Avatar
March 6, 2016 at 9:48 AM
Thank you Anne-Lise :)-luloo *smiles*
Simpson Avatar
March 6, 2016 at 8:56 AM
I mostly liked the analogies!.....Congrats Laura
Scars Avatar
March 6, 2016 at 9:46 AM
Thank you Carlene :)-luloo *smiles*
Roper Avatar
March 6, 2016 at 8:55 AM
Congratulations on your win!!! Great write :-)
Scars Avatar
March 6, 2016 at 9:45 AM
Many thanks Eve you are sweet :)-luloo *smiles*
Babu Avatar
March 6, 2016 at 8:46 AM
A very nicely written poem.Many congratulations on your WIN......:-)
Scars Avatar
March 6, 2016 at 9:42 AM
Thank you Sathya :) -luloo *smiles*
Nehal Avatar
March 6, 2016 at 8:03 AM
Congrats .....Nicely written poem
Scars Avatar
March 6, 2016 at 9:41 AM
Thank you M Asimov's :)- luloo *smiles*
Onclaud Avatar
March 5, 2016 at 10:29 AM
you did create a vivid, power-packed scene, lou... huggs
Scars Avatar
March 5, 2016 at 2:31 PM
Thank you Nette :) -luloo *smiles*
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