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Obsessive Orange

United Colours: Orange Sponsor: Silent One Pathological agreements made from your spicy allegations, neurotic contributions based on a fire lit from clay, all the inescapable state of affairs from intimidating celebrations my amber ways, your mania stays, controlling on display. Your jealousy contingent upon my belated positive actions, my fear portrayed from your rusted all-consuming conditions, you've torn my ability to react in sanity, that's only a fraction, I'm left like a prey from a tiger meal, a life full of constriction. Burnt fanatic beliefs you have seen me as your property, your bronze so metallic it shines through out the universe, I need an escape from your unrighteous crowned monarchy, you never knew how to treat me right, and put me first. It has been stated from the fellowship I carry outside you, I deserve fields of marigolds with apricots for dessert, I made myself a promise to stay away, now we are through, no more bittersweet memories, I am done being hurt. Different shades of orange: 1. Fire 2. Clay 3. Amber 4. Rust 5. Tiger 6. Bronze 7. Metallic 8. Marigolds 9. Apricots 10. Bittersweet 11. Spice 12. Burnt ~Date Written: March 4, 2016~

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Date: 3/8/2016 7:41:00 PM
Hi Laura, Wow, nice poem--big congrats on your outright victory. Way to go. Oh, you can add #13 to your list: Monarch(y) Ain't nothin' more orange than a Monarch Butterfly. Cheers, Brian
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Lu Loo
Date: 3/8/2016 8:55:00 PM
Thanks Brian, yeah my usage of monarchy was directed an a monarch butterfly. You're right, I should've added that to #13! Have a great night Brian :)-luloo
Date: 3/8/2016 12:19:00 AM
Wow a powerful piece. Congrats on your top placement. Hugs SuZ
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Date: 3/8/2016 12:35:00 PM
Thanks Suz...:)-luloo *Smiles*
Date: 3/7/2016 10:06:00 AM
Interesting work that hit the orange list..Congrats on your placement..Sara
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Date: 3/7/2016 2:30:00 PM
Thank you Sara very much :)- luloo *smiles*
Date: 3/7/2016 5:57:00 AM
Hi Laura. Congrats for your awesome, first placement in the contest!!! ;-)
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Date: 3/7/2016 8:11:00 AM
many thanks Teddy :)-luloo *smiles*
Date: 3/6/2016 11:41:00 PM
Congratulations on your win !! An out of the box thinking....great job Laura.
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Date: 3/7/2016 8:10:00 AM
Thank you Meenakshi :)-luloo *smiles*
Date: 3/6/2016 10:45:00 PM
A well deserved top placement...Congratulations...
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Date: 3/7/2016 8:10:00 AM
Thank you Probir :)-luloo *Smiles*
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Date: 3/7/2016 8:09:00 AM
Thank you Probir :)-luloo *Smiles*
Date: 3/6/2016 6:54:00 PM
Hi Luloo, congratulations on your 1st place win in the contest. Love the creativity in the write, well deserved win. A seven from me....Vlad.
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Date: 3/6/2016 8:45:00 PM
Thank you Vlad :)-luloo
Date: 3/6/2016 5:11:00 PM
Congratulations on the first placement of the contest Laura
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Date: 3/6/2016 5:27:00 PM
Thank you Nayda :)-luloo *smiles*
Date: 3/6/2016 3:19:00 PM
Congrats on your top shelf win, Laura! Very well thought out poem you have here :)
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Date: 3/6/2016 3:28:00 PM
Thank you Laura :)-luloo *smiles*
Date: 3/6/2016 3:00:00 PM
Great thinking to write this poem on orange of which I could think nothing, positive or negative. Congratulations. Love, Joyce
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Date: 3/6/2016 3:28:00 PM
Thank you Joyce :)-luloo *smiles*
Date: 3/6/2016 2:26:00 PM
Very creative and unique, Laura. I've never thought of orange in this fashion, but I like where you went with it. To possibly add to your shades of orange, when you said "monarchy" I couldn't help but think of those black and orange monarch butterflies. Congrats on your top place win!
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Date: 3/6/2016 3:27:00 PM
Thank you lovely lady :)-luloo *smiles*
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Date: 3/6/2016 2:52:00 PM
Thank you Timothy, yes "monarchy" referred to monarch butterflies like you mentioned. Many thanks! -luloo *smiles*
Date: 3/6/2016 1:26:00 PM
So different! Congrats on a big win. BG
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Date: 3/6/2016 3:27:00 PM
Thank you Barbara :)-luloo *smiles*
Date: 3/6/2016 12:41:00 PM
You really thought outside the box LuLoo:-) many congrats:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 3/6/2016 11:44:00 AM
No surprise. Congratulations luloo
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Date: 3/6/2016 11:59:00 AM
Thank you for all your kind feedback Charlie, much appreciated :) -luloo *thanks*
Date: 3/6/2016 11:30:00 AM
My heartfelt congratulations to you Laura Loo, for your well-deserved First Place win! Very 'outside the box' and beautifully written! Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 3/6/2016 11:55:00 AM
Many thanks sweet Sandra! -luloo *smiles* :)
Date: 3/6/2016 11:00:00 AM
A very passionate write, congratulations on your first place win!!
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Date: 3/6/2016 11:55:00 AM
Thank you Sarita:)-luloo *smiles*
Date: 3/6/2016 10:51:00 AM
Hey Laura, congrats on your first place win.
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Date: 3/6/2016 10:53:00 AM
Thank you very much Rob :)-luloo
Date: 3/6/2016 10:37:00 AM
A fine write-- congratulations on the top podium spot luloo!
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Date: 3/6/2016 10:54:00 AM
thank you Sam :)-luloo *smiles*
Date: 3/6/2016 10:16:00 AM
WOW, GREAT placement. and BIG congrats. I remember this one and how hard you worked on it.
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Date: 3/6/2016 10:26:00 AM
many thanks Andrea :)-luloo *smiles*
Date: 3/6/2016 8:59:00 AM
- Laura, congratulations on your win in contest: ORANGE - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 3/6/2016 9:48:00 AM
Thank you Anne-Lise :)-luloo *smiles*
Date: 3/6/2016 8:56:00 AM
I mostly liked the analogies!.....Congrats Laura
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Date: 3/6/2016 9:46:00 AM
Thank you Carlene :)-luloo *smiles*
Date: 3/6/2016 8:55:00 AM
Congratulations on your win!!! Great write :-)
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Date: 3/6/2016 9:45:00 AM
Many thanks Eve you are sweet :)-luloo *smiles*
Date: 3/6/2016 8:46:00 AM
A very nicely written poem.Many congratulations on your WIN......:-)
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Date: 3/6/2016 9:42:00 AM
Thank you Sathya :) -luloo *smiles*
Date: 3/6/2016 8:03:00 AM
Congrats .....Nicely written poem
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Date: 3/6/2016 9:41:00 AM
Thank you M Asimov's :)- luloo *smiles*
Date: 3/5/2016 10:29:00 AM
you did create a vivid, power-packed scene, lou... huggs
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Date: 3/5/2016 2:31:00 PM
Thank you Nette :) -luloo *smiles*
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