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Written: January 1st, 2023 Rumi's verse, "The desert beckons us as if it were the oasis," ____________________________________________ An endless, lifeless moor—arid and fright. A withering sun whips souls—toils to ignite. Sans shelter or relief, ghost winds stand. Dry air as shriveled wits seek relief sight. Spurs appeared as ripples on the sand. Hidden amid the tall grass of the land. Quench your thirst at the watery oasis. Our ravenous thirst for water will expand.   Amid a kaleidoscope of queries rapacious.  Life shrinks to grain of sand on daily basis. Amid a dust of labor, a haven of serenity. I was scared upon grasping the base hits. We're like sand amid an arid sea of dexterity. Southern blaze stores a feverish posterity. As a tunic for our ethereal souls improve  Soar twice through the oasis of temerity. Sky is drawn by daffodil and drifting groove.  Crisp air, soft breeze, and azure feet prove. Bees buzz over heather, as marigolds rise. Eagles trim their fierce feathers—rabbits move Staring into gloom may uncover a prize. For a dwarf area, glimpse an oasis of apprise.  This domain, this desert, endures best as gold. It is highly precious than quartz grains size.  Scatterings of color that are scarce and bold. Covered in a mixture of brown and green folds. Such a proximity, yet so distant, yet so distinct. We were transported back to the prior era, told. A spring that flows with pure water hint A lush green zone in the arid land succinct An atmosphere devoid of noise and disarray Away from adjacent noise or motion instinct.

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Date: 1/15/2024 11:47:00 AM
"Amid a dust of labor, a haven of serenity.", Very nicely penned, Congrats on your win
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Date: 1/15/2024 6:39:00 AM
- A pleasure to come back with a congratulations, Las :) - hugs
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Date: 1/14/2024 8:58:00 PM
"A spring that flows with pure water hint A lush green zone in the arid land succinct An atmosphere devoid of noise and disarray Away from adjacent noise or motion instinct" - Grand illustration of an Oasis. Congratulations!
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Date: 1/14/2024 4:43:00 PM
Sotto, beautifully penned and congratulations on your win in my contest, well done, Constance
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Date: 1/6/2024 2:12:00 AM
-A wonderful poem about the oasis as a paradise on earth ... with everything you can dream of - You have described it so vividly with your colors, Las :) - A top winning poem in my eyes ... (good luck in the contest ) - Sorry I'm not here much on soup at the moment... still struggling with my old PC. ) - Wishing you a happy new year my friend :) - hugs
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Date: 1/3/2024 1:46:00 PM
Hi Lasaad…..l lived in Dubai for five years and l wish l could have viewed the desert through your beautiful poetic eyes but alas!! Ha…..Incredible poem and imagery my friend! Debx
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Date: 1/3/2024 6:03:00 AM
hi Sotto life depends on water nothing much can live without it. To think that water is only here due to Major Stars exploding in space how lucky we are I love this poem hugs Shadow
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Date: 1/2/2024 11:16:00 AM
Life is as a desert, beckoning us into its bowels, and like an oasis, giving us hope to carry on. Live long and grow strong, my dear friend. Have a Happy New Year! and a great 2024! Bill & Sara Baker
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Date: 1/2/2024 11:13:00 AM
Another FAV for my list, my friend. I enjoyed you use of simile and metaphor to enhance your exquisite imagery. Through the struggles we can always have hope of an oasis to replenish our lives and encourage us to travel on. I enjoyed the Rumi quote. His words are always powerful. I have several of his books here in my office to read over and over. The depth of his love, and love poetry is an inspiration to me.
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Date: 1/2/2024 10:08:00 AM
Master Sotto, this is a masterly poem, full of thoughts, with an elevated diction, flowing rhythm and natural rhymes. The stanzas starting "We're like sand amid an arid sea of dexterity. " up to "Soar twice through the oasis of temerity." are superb. As rightly pointed out "Southern blaze stores a feverish posterity.". Wish you a wonderful start of the new year.
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Date: 1/2/2024 7:47:00 AM
That dry and arid land must be a place of scarcity or most everything but what life can an oasis bring. I can't imagine trying to walk on those sand dunes.Thanks for sharing this one with us and for dropping by my page. Sara K
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Date: 1/2/2024 6:00:00 AM
Awesome write my friend--you weaved your imagery evoking an oasis--in this difficult execute form so well. Rumi's inspiration shines throughout.
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Date: 1/2/2024 3:35:00 AM
Love your reference to Rumi.. Your poem paints a vivid and evocative picture of an unforgiving, desolate moor, where life struggles against the harsh elements. The use of powerful and sensory language immerses the reader in the barren landscape, creating a palpable sense of desolation and endurance.. Your poem effectively captures the struggle for survival in a challenging environment, offering moments of hope and resilience amid the harshness of the moor. The language and imagery create a rich and immersive experience for the reader.
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Date: 1/2/2024 2:38:00 AM
Deep ideas in this poem and my sorrow for being away so long. A happy New Year.
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Date: 1/1/2024 10:00:00 PM
Ah Dr Sotto, as always a profound poem that truly is captivating and so well written for the theme. I love the quote you’ve used and also the flow of your lines and rhymes. Rubaiyat, a form i still need to try, but your poem makes it seem so easy to do, as it flows so well. I love how descriptive this is from daffodil skies to scatterings of colors, and the very soulful depth of this truly hits hard and strong. “ we are like sand” that stanza again shows and depicts the ideas of a philosopher
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Date: 1/1/2024 10:01:00 PM
Absolute pleasure always reading your profound writes! Impeccable really! And with so much to grasp and ponder upon. Wishing you a pleasant and happy new year too. Hope this year brings you everyrhing you desire
Date: 1/1/2024 9:38:00 PM
“Sky is drawn by daffodil and drifting groove. Crisp air, soft breeze, and azure feet prove. Bees buzz over heather, as marigolds rise. Eagles trim their fierce feathers—rabbits move”. These lines are my favorite because they are so descriptive. This form seems difficult yet easy for you! Another great work well done.
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Date: 1/1/2024 9:30:00 PM
A divine desert it is, plush in golden dust and color so bold. A gorgeous desert does beckon as if a paradise. Warm wishes for the NewYear, SP! Appreciating your awesomeness, your poetry. ~Anaya
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