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NOTES in my diary i’d kept an old note anger wrinkled then carefully smoothed and glued to the page by tears short winded describes my last lover’s note goodbye she says on further pursuit she’s adamant goodbye forever! Blue tanka gray days are upon me i wonder now that you’re gone is heaven blue? Dave Austin

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Date: 1/28/2016 9:12:00 AM
Words so gracious. Beauty so outspoken and creativity so explicit. I love this. Thanks for the beyond 7 share.
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Date: 12/7/2015 9:32:00 AM
Great write daver, share what's in you.
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Date: 12/5/2015 7:19:00 PM
I love all of these, Daver. keep up the amazing tanka writing.
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Date: 11/24/2015 2:03:00 PM
a sad note but so well penned. 7+
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Date: 11/20/2015 3:46:00 PM
I'm lucky to be reading these tanka once again, Daver. Both 'Notes' and 'Blue Tanka' emit sadness, but different in texture. // paul
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Date: 11/19/2015 4:02:00 PM
Quite cute, you poet, you.
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Date: 11/19/2015 7:43:00 AM
The rock band traffic sings "Heaven is in your Mind". From the Music Man show - "How can there be any good in good bye?" Stimulating work here! Peace & Blesssings Matthew Anishwc6
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Date: 11/18/2015 12:42:00 PM
Daver, it is a joy to read one of your writes again. Hope you have a fabulous week ;) take care
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Date: 11/17/2015 4:15:00 PM
Still waiting for a new poem. Hey. Go to my contest page and write a one-liner about your favorite holiday food. Just follow my simple rules and you will be sure to place!
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Daver Austin
Date: 11/18/2015 9:32:00 AM
Not writing any poetry for a while. No one but a few read it anyway. There are hundreds of my poems already submitted to be read. I'm having fun commenting. With what time I have I can do a few a day. Love ya, daver
Date: 11/17/2015 2:34:00 PM
so gently, pensively quilled, dave.. i like the whole poetic mood.. yes!..huggs
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Date: 11/12/2015 6:01:00 PM
A masterfully written Tanka with profound thoughts and feelings, dear daver! As far as the heaven is concerned, I would be surprised for it is like a chameleon taking the color of the heart in love! A seven!
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Date: 11/11/2015 8:02:00 PM
gosh, I just saw even more comments you had made to me. You were very generous today to visit so many of my poems. WIshing you a lovely evening.
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Date: 11/8/2015 10:36:00 AM
thanks for seeing the picture of Snickers, Daver. He is quite the smart friendly dog now!
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Date: 11/6/2015 6:39:00 AM
I think heaven has various colours.. As a matter of fact I know it has Daver, L O L)) its quite different now than this morning what are you playing at?? tell you what I'll take a kick at that ole gray day for you..'
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Date: 11/5/2015 6:54:00 AM
Hi Daver: An old note instead of crushed flowers So Sad. A great Tanka!
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Date: 11/4/2015 8:06:00 PM
Hope you had a great day, Daver!
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Date: 11/3/2015 11:27:00 PM
Daver, you are always The Poet with awesome Tanka. Always a pleasure to read... Love LINDA
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Date: 11/3/2015 7:41:00 PM
Dave : Notes is strong, with well-chosen, telling imagery.
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Date: 11/3/2015 6:51:00 PM
Love these, Daver, and thanks for visiting my poetry today. (cool line: Anger wrinkled)
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Date: 11/2/2015 8:33:00 PM
I loved both of these. How crushing the paper helps to crush the pain of the words in the note. Awesome twist in your blue tanka!
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Date: 10/31/2015 4:26:00 PM
Poignant Poem Dave , superb creative style. Anne
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Date: 10/31/2015 9:58:00 AM
Hi Daver, lovely, sentimetal poems! The first was quite sad, but honest and delightful, the second twisted marvelously in the last line! jimbo
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