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Nocturne In Black and Gold the Falling Rocket By James Mcneill Whistler 1875

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eclipsed by a daydream where stars are strung on single strands of spider's webs invisible to the eye as the brightness of the sun sears the retina but not the soul the mist mingles with the drizzle all burnt sand turns to glass creating a new lens on the out of focus space as my fingers tap out a melody on the wet bough the wind descends to sweep the stage of debris and dull the noise of the spectators a fractured spotlight hollows out tunnels through time only a loose thread from my gossamer gown tethers me lest I be lost to the ethereal plane

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Date: 11/5/2023 2:17:00 AM
Ah I absolutely love this one and the way you did the spoken too is so beautiful! You are not just a brilliant poet but also a fantastic spoken word artist! Love this
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Di11y Da11y
Date: 11/5/2023 2:22:00 AM
Thank you for your kind words. Glad you liked it.
Date: 11/4/2023 1:32:00 PM
a surreal creation, Di11y with some spectacular imagery. I especially liked 'only a loose thread from my gossamer gown tethers me.' Perhaps poetry is the way some of us connect to the ethereal plane? Thinking out loud..have a splendid weekend, Sara
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Date: 11/4/2023 1:39:00 PM
I do think otherworldly things sneak through in poems from time to time and take you by surprise. It's great to let your mind run free and see what it generates. Thank you for your kind words x
Date: 11/4/2023 6:33:00 AM
Once again it’s uncanny the way you describe the daydream picture to the ethereal plane, only recently it was discovered all the galaxies in the universe are connected by spider web like filaments, the hypothesis is they contain dark matter (apt to your poem), and gravitational lensing is a very real phenomenon too, strange you can sense the loose thread that holds everything together, brilliant meaningful writing Dilly, cheers David
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Date: 11/4/2023 7:14:00 AM
I nearly wrote in my comment that I wasn't sure if it was you or me acting as a medium haha. I have no clue where it's coming from as it's a bit past coincidence but certainly not something I know about or plan to write about. I just enjoy abstract thinking - I was a huge fan of Timmy Mallets word association game - maybe it's that!?
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Date: 11/4/2023 7:08:00 AM
I’m scratching my head, as to how you stumbled on the connection frequency, clairvoyance nah!
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Date: 11/4/2023 6:42:00 AM
I just fact checked your comment to see if you've been having me on - but you appear to be on the money - this is a fun game. I did get a B in GCSE science in 1994 but I don't recall them covering this stuff. I don't think I could write about it if I had a clue - thank you David!
Date: 11/4/2023 5:52:00 AM
i agree with the comment below, you're so good at ekphrasis; you have a real ability to jump right into the painting and create a very unique poem from it :)
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Di11y Da11y
Date: 11/4/2023 6:09:00 AM
I did let my imagination run away with me a bit in this one - thank you for your supportive comment x
Date: 11/4/2023 4:13:00 AM
D how do you do it ? This is absolutely sumptuous. ! A winner for sure. Its beautiful and surreal, and fits that painting wonderfully well. You certainly are a master at ekphrasis.. Well done, A fave for sure for this stunning poem SV
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Date: 11/4/2023 4:17:00 AM
Thank you SV - I just let my mind wander, glad you liked it :)

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