Nocturnal Message

NOCTURNAL MESSAGE

I must say
This, my dream, now seems
Not a series of unrelated happenings
In course of a night’s sleep

But were surrealistically constructed
From life’s timeless values lay
Hidden in my invisible keep

Various dream parts    such as
Love    decay    old age    and death are
Called up in metaphor –

A hand reaching    muddy floor
Noise    confusion    and
Knocks on a door

I left for the city on foot
Clear and bright the day
Straight and sure the way

Within     though      Giganticus is
Misty and dark
Many buildings in decay

I’m lost 
In a maze of winding streets
With nary a friendly face to greet

I wander through buildings
In and out      in and out
Too numerous to count

Till    at last    through one door
I espy a counter section
With a sign – “We give directions”

“Oh thank heaven,” I cry – reach out –
“There is a God
And he is good.”

Alas as I step forth
There came a flood
Filling my way with blackest mud

Hindered thus in Giganticus
I tried cross the room to shout
“I’m lost    want to go home    which way out?”

But the relentless mud
Continued to flow
Doors now are locked    no place to go

Past life flashed before my eyes
And to my horror
Came four knocks on the building door

Up!    Up!
Wake up!    Wake up!

Dave Austin
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016


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Date: 1/18/2017 3:47:00 PM
OH GOOD, I found it over here right away and I really like it, Daver. Yes, I have had similar dreams and who knows, but probably much of it revolves around our feelings of hopelessness as life gets shorter! Good job.
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Date: 1/17/2017 6:03:00 AM
Sorry about your spill. Didn't hurt your pen. Still brilliant. A Fav.
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Daver Austin
Date: 1/18/2017 8:17:00 AM
Thanks for the visit old buddy. I'm doing fine now and have just written a new poem. Love, daver
Date: 1/17/2017 3:48:00 AM
Well done Daver. This is some nightmare alright. Glad you were able to wake from it. From the review below I see you had an accident. Hope everything is alright now. I friend of mine just had a bad fall and hurt himself badly. God Bless, JB
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Date: 1/14/2017 9:15:00 PM
DAver, going off for the night but had to come by and thank you for seeing my recent poems and wanted to say how happy I am that you were not hurt badly in your accident.
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Daver Austin
Date: 1/15/2017 10:35:00 AM
Thanks, Andrea. Unfortunately, when old folks take a spill it's seldom they come off without a beat up body. Love, daver
Date: 1/13/2017 12:07:00 PM
This is so well done, Daver! I love your rhyme and the perfect descriptions. Love, Juli-Michelle
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Daver Austin
Date: 1/14/2017 9:19:00 AM
Thanks for the visit. Lets have a look at your poetry. Love, daver
Date: 1/7/2017 6:29:00 PM
What in the world did you eat for supper? "Enjoyed" your nightmare.
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Daver Austin
Date: 1/14/2017 9:25:00 AM
Thanks for looking me up. The knocks on the door are real. I've heard them many times when about to wake up.
Date: 1/4/2017 4:29:00 PM
Wow!!! Dave, you had me for a moment. I too have had dreams similar to this. So relieved when I awoke to find it was all a dream. Wishing you all the best in 2017 my dear friend. Love, Elaine
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Date: 1/14/2017 9:32:00 AM
Hi, Elaine. The knocks on the door are real, have heard them many times. Wife says it's God wanting in my life. Thanks for the visit. Love, daver
Date: 1/1/2017 5:19:00 PM
Hi, my friend. I am back from my trip and just wanted to wish you a happy new year!! Sure hope it goes great for us both!
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Date: 12/24/2016 9:58:00 PM
This was some nightmare Daver. It read like a horror movie. Wonderfully written. I am settling down to watch Miracle on 34th Street for the umpteenth time. Maureen O'Hara was one of a kind. Have a lovely Christmas! 7 ; )
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Daver Austin
Date: 12/25/2016 11:37:00 AM
I've seen it a lot of times too. I ike the one with Edmund Gwenn the best. Love and have a holly jolly. Dave
Date: 12/24/2016 2:48:00 PM
oh MY what a nightmare!!! I have had ones similar but not with that horrible mud seeping in. This was a terrifying one to read, Daver, and I fear it's mirroring events of your life this past year. You are in my thoughts today and I'll keep you in my prayers. CAn't believe I did not even know this poem was sitting here for several days before I saw it. SEVEN
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Date: 12/23/2016 1:50:00 PM
clever write here, Daver. I hope you are feeling much better now & looking forward to Xmas
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Date: 12/20/2016 10:46:00 AM
Love your writings, Daver! This one is a thought sharing of a nightmare? The dreams I remember are the ones of my husband or Kiwi. I wake up literally calling or reaching out to them. They are not nightmares, but I awaken feeling sad, lost, and very confused. Keep well and have a wonderfully merry Christmas! Love with hugs, Mikki
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Date: 12/18/2016 11:49:00 PM
Fantastic dear Daver..Wish you a Healthy week ahead .
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