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In the past you’d fought bouts of depression but your sudden death came out of the blue You hid so well the signs of your regression and that you’d plunge and die in the blue bayou I gather up my words and start stuttering, at your funeral service I take the lead role I wish I could have prevented your suffering and that I’d noticed you were a tortured soul I’m at the church where I was due to be your bride a torrent of tears flood from my sapphire eyes I hold a single rose as I stand by your graveside your tragic death has taken everyone by surprise FICTION WRITE 5/ 19/18 Let your Pen drip contest Sponsored by Broken Wings Theme ‘ I gather up my words’ Rhyme Scheme ABAB

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Line Gauthier

Date: 6/5/2018 9:09:00 PM

An awesome write. Congrats on your top win, Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 6/6/2018 10:32:00 AM

thanks Line:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y.

Date: 5/24/2018 5:14:00 PM

WoW! Jan, You do emotional writes so well. Although it's fiction it seems so real. Congratulations on your placement in the contest:-) Alexis

Jan Allison
Date: 6/6/2018 10:32:00 AM

Thanks Alexis, I seem to be able to write sad for Constance's contests:-) hugs Jan xx

Constance La France

Date: 5/23/2018 10:32:00 AM

Jan, congratulations on your win in my contest with this impressive write, well done ~

Jan Allison
Date: 5/24/2018 2:51:00 AM

I'm delighted you liked it Constance, many thanks:-) hugs jan xx

Heidi Sands

Date: 5/23/2018 7:39:00 AM

Congratulations Jan! :)

Jan Allison
Date: 5/24/2018 2:51:00 AM

Thanks Heidi-) hugs Jan xx

Brian Davey

Date: 5/23/2018 5:25:00 AM

Very deep write my friend, you always know how to grab ahold of your readers!! Congratulations

Jan Allison
Date: 5/24/2018 2:50:00 AM

Thanks Brian, BW's themes have a way of drawing out sad poems from me but I prefer to write humour:-) hugs Jan xx

Subimal Sinha-Roy

Date: 5/23/2018 2:26:00 AM

Congratulations, Jan on your win. What a sad depiction.

Jan Allison
Date: 5/24/2018 2:50:00 AM

Thanks Subimal:-) hugs Jan xx

Tom Cunningham

Date: 5/23/2018 2:06:00 AM

Well done Jan, congratulations. Tom.

Jan Allison
Date: 5/24/2018 2:49:00 AM

Thanks Tom:-) hugs Jan xx

Laura Leiser

Date: 5/22/2018 10:48:00 PM

Your creative pen truly dripped with this sad story, Jan. Well written, and congrats on your win :)

Jan Allison
Date: 5/24/2018 2:48:00 AM

Thanks Laura:-) hugs Jan xx

Curtis Moorman

Date: 5/22/2018 9:40:00 PM

Jan, how wonderfully well you pen poems. It is good to know that some of them are fictitious. Were they real, I'd be in constant tears for you dear friend. Congrats on your win!

Jan Allison
Date: 5/24/2018 2:48:00 AM

Thanks Curtis. Many of my poems are fiction but some I base on magazine stories I read especially for sad poems:-) hugs Jan xx

Susan Gentry

Date: 5/22/2018 9:19:00 PM

Oh my! Congratulations on your win with this intriguing and creative poem for the contest. A fave for me.

Jan Allison
Date: 5/24/2018 2:47:00 AM

Thanks so much Susan:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 5/22/2018 8:58:00 PM

Back with congratulations.. Hugs

Jan Allison
Date: 5/24/2018 2:47:00 AM

Thanks again Eve:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 5/22/2018 3:52:00 PM

So good and heartfelt; luck in the contest

Jan Allison
Date: 5/24/2018 2:46:00 AM

Thanks Eve:-) hugs Jan xx

Robert Lindley

Date: 5/21/2018 10:14:00 AM

Well conceived and executed creation my talented friend.. A fav...

Jan Allison
Date: 5/21/2018 11:35:00 AM

Thanks Robert:-) hugs Jan xx

Mike Gentile

Date: 5/21/2018 8:55:00 AM

Thea sadness is knowing that your fiction is certainly someone's truth and you have expressed it so well. A deep write indeed xxoo

Jan Allison
Date: 5/21/2018 11:35:00 AM

Thanks Mike:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/20/2018 5:38:00 PM

very well done, dearie!! You were right on it. I am still wondering how I will get an entry done soon!! But at least I finished all my other "duties" for the day. Can you believe this? Joe has been sleeping five hours now in the daytime!!!we are truly utterly complete opposites. What I would not give for the ability to sleep.

Jan Allison
Date: 5/21/2018 1:31:00 AM

Thanks Andrea, my hubby can drop to sleep in a second wish i could:-( hugs jan xx

John Gondolf

Date: 5/20/2018 12:07:00 PM

Jan, I know you prefer not to write poems like this and yet you do so well. This has a really good rhythm to it. Best of luck in the contest. John

Jan Allison
Date: 5/20/2018 12:40:00 PM

Thanks John, I much prefer humour but surprise with the occasional serious poem:-) hugs Jan xx

Mick Talbot

Date: 5/20/2018 3:48:00 AM

Scared me, I bet you could write a good novel if you haven't already! Super scary, super great, wishing success in the contest. hugs Mick

Jan Allison
Date: 5/20/2018 3:54:00 AM

Oh gosh Mick I'd never written a poem since childhood and I hated poetry at school so starting to writ and enjoy poetry has taken me by surprise. I don't think I have a novel in me but I do intend to self publish some of my silly poems - they do seem to make people smile:-) hugs jan xx

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 5/19/2018 8:21:00 PM

Beautifully written, Jan. How sad this happened on her wedding day. I'm sure Constance will love it. Best wishes in the contest, Carolyn

Jan Allison
Date: 5/20/2018 3:30:00 AM

I know Constance likes melancholy poems so I wrote this but much prefer humour:-) hugs jan xx

Vijay Pandit

Date: 5/19/2018 4:45:00 PM

It feels so real..well captured emotions! Entire discourse is quite touching, but especially the last stanza..well written poem..best for a win, Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 5/19/2018 5:37:00 PM

Thanks Vijay:-) hugs Jan x

Arthur Vaso

Date: 5/19/2018 4:33:00 PM

This is such a very touching poem Jan, loved it.

Jan Allison
Date: 5/19/2018 5:37:00 PM

Thanks Art, I prefer to write humour but my muse had other ideas today!:-) hugs jan xx

Nette Onclaud

Date: 5/19/2018 3:17:00 PM

so poignant and flowing, jan.. is this a new contest?... love this emotive write...huggs

Jan Allison
Date: 5/19/2018 5:36:00 PM

Yes its for Constance's new contest and it is already filling fast:-) hugs jan xx

Chris Green

Date: 5/19/2018 2:51:00 PM

Such a sad but we'll written poem of loss and the emotions that follow

Jan Allison
Date: 5/19/2018 2:52:00 PM

thanks Chris:-) hugs Jan xx

Tom Cunningham

Date: 5/19/2018 2:34:00 PM

A very emotional write Jan, a tragic story captured in verse. Good luck. Tom.

Jan Allison
Date: 5/19/2018 2:37:00 PM

Thanks Tom I would have preferred to write happy today but I never know what my muse will come up with next:-) hugs jan xx

Joseph May

Date: 5/19/2018 1:55:00 PM

So sad Jan...Very nicely expressed..

Jan Allison
Date: 5/19/2018 1:59:00 PM

Thanks Joseph:-) It is an emotive subject and I found it quite difficult to write:-( hugs jan xx

Heidi Sands

Date: 5/19/2018 1:06:00 PM

You have done so well with this for the contest Jan. A sad, well written, poem :)

Jan Allison
Date: 5/19/2018 1:07:00 PM

Thanks Heidi, am thankful its a fiction poem I never know where my muse will take me:-) hugs jan xx