Jan Allison Poet Rhyme

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Nobody Spotted the Signs

In the past you’d fought bouts of depression
but your sudden death came out of the blue
You hid so well the signs of your regression
and that you’d plunge and die in the blue bayou

I gather up my words and start stuttering,
at your funeral service I take the lead role
I wish I could have prevented your suffering
and that I’d noticed you were a tortured soul 

I’m at the church where I was due to be your bride
a torrent of tears flood from my sapphire eyes
I hold a single rose as I stand by your graveside
your tragic death has taken everyone by surprise


FICTION WRITE

5/ 19/18

Let your Pen drip contest
Sponsored by Broken Wings
Theme ‘ I gather up my words’
Rhyme Scheme ABAB

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Line Gauthier June 5, 2018 at 9:09 PM An awesome write. Congrats on your top win, Jan. Jan Allison June 6, 2018 at 10:32 AM thanks Line:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y. May 24, 2018 at 5:14 PM WoW! Jan, You do emotional writes so well. Although it's fiction it seems so real. Congratulations on your placement in the contest:-) Alexis Jan Allison June 6, 2018 at 10:32 AM Thanks Alexis, I seem to be able to write sad for Constance's contests:-) hugs Jan xx

Constance La France May 23, 2018 at 10:32 AM Jan, congratulations on your win in my contest with this impressive write, well done ~ Jan Allison May 24, 2018 at 2:51 AM I'm delighted you liked it Constance, many thanks:-) hugs jan xx

Heidi Sands May 23, 2018 at 7:39 AM Congratulations Jan! :) Jan Allison May 24, 2018 at 2:51 AM Thanks Heidi-) hugs Jan xx

Brian Davey May 23, 2018 at 5:25 AM Very deep write my friend, you always know how to grab ahold of your readers!! Congratulations Jan Allison May 24, 2018 at 2:50 AM Thanks Brian, BW's themes have a way of drawing out sad poems from me but I prefer to write humour:-) hugs Jan xx

Subimal Sinha-Roy May 23, 2018 at 2:26 AM Congratulations, Jan on your win. What a sad depiction. Jan Allison May 24, 2018 at 2:50 AM Thanks Subimal:-) hugs Jan xx

Tom Cunningham May 23, 2018 at 2:06 AM Well done Jan, congratulations. Tom. Jan Allison May 24, 2018 at 2:49 AM Thanks Tom:-) hugs Jan xx

Laura Leiser May 22, 2018 at 10:48 PM Your creative pen truly dripped with this sad story, Jan. Well written, and congrats on your win :) Jan Allison May 24, 2018 at 2:48 AM Thanks Laura:-) hugs Jan xx

Curtis Moorman May 22, 2018 at 9:40 PM Jan, how wonderfully well you pen poems. It is good to know that some of them are fictitious. Were they real, I'd be in constant tears for you dear friend. Congrats on your win! Jan Allison May 24, 2018 at 2:48 AM Thanks Curtis. Many of my poems are fiction but some I base on magazine stories I read especially for sad poems:-) hugs Jan xx

Susan Gentry May 22, 2018 at 9:19 PM Oh my! Congratulations on your win with this intriguing and creative poem for the contest. A fave for me. Jan Allison May 24, 2018 at 2:47 AM Thanks so much Susan:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper May 22, 2018 at 8:58 PM Back with congratulations.. Hugs Jan Allison May 24, 2018 at 2:47 AM Thanks again Eve:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper May 22, 2018 at 3:52 PM So good and heartfelt; luck in the contest Jan Allison May 24, 2018 at 2:46 AM Thanks Eve:-) hugs Jan xx

Robert Lindley May 21, 2018 at 10:14 AM Well conceived and executed creation my talented friend.. A fav... Jan Allison May 21, 2018 at 11:35 AM Thanks Robert:-) hugs Jan xx

Mike Gentile May 21, 2018 at 8:55 AM Thea sadness is knowing that your fiction is certainly someone's truth and you have expressed it so well. A deep write indeed xxoo Jan Allison May 21, 2018 at 11:35 AM Thanks Mike:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich May 20, 2018 at 5:38 PM very well done, dearie!! You were right on it. I am still wondering how I will get an entry done soon!! But at least I finished all my other "duties" for the day. Can you believe this? Joe has been sleeping five hours now in the daytime!!!we are truly utterly complete opposites. What I would not give for the ability to sleep. Jan Allison May 21, 2018 at 1:31 AM Thanks Andrea, my hubby can drop to sleep in a second wish i could:-( hugs jan xx

John Gondolf May 20, 2018 at 12:07 PM Jan, I know you prefer not to write poems like this and yet you do so well. This has a really good rhythm to it. Best of luck in the contest. John Jan Allison May 20, 2018 at 12:40 PM Thanks John, I much prefer humour but surprise with the occasional serious poem:-) hugs Jan xx

Mick Talbot May 20, 2018 at 3:48 AM Scared me, I bet you could write a good novel if you haven't already! Super scary, super great, wishing success in the contest. hugs Mick Jan Allison May 20, 2018 at 3:54 AM Oh gosh Mick I'd never written a poem since childhood and I hated poetry at school so starting to writ and enjoy poetry has taken me by surprise. I don't think I have a novel in me but I do intend to self publish some of my silly poems - they do seem to make people smile:-) hugs jan xx

Carolyn Devonshire May 19, 2018 at 8:21 PM Beautifully written, Jan. How sad this happened on her wedding day. I'm sure Constance will love it. Best wishes in the contest, Carolyn Jan Allison May 20, 2018 at 3:30 AM I know Constance likes melancholy poems so I wrote this but much prefer humour:-) hugs jan xx

Vijay Pandit May 19, 2018 at 4:45 PM It feels so real..well captured emotions! Entire discourse is quite touching, but especially the last stanza..well written poem..best for a win, Jan. Jan Allison May 19, 2018 at 5:37 PM Thanks Vijay:-) hugs Jan x

Arthur Vaso May 19, 2018 at 4:33 PM This is such a very touching poem Jan, loved it. Jan Allison May 19, 2018 at 5:37 PM Thanks Art, I prefer to write humour but my muse had other ideas today!:-) hugs jan xx

Nette Onclaud May 19, 2018 at 3:17 PM so poignant and flowing, jan.. is this a new contest?... love this emotive write...huggs Jan Allison May 19, 2018 at 5:36 PM Yes its for Constance's new contest and it is already filling fast:-) hugs jan xx

Chris Green May 19, 2018 at 2:51 PM Such a sad but we'll written poem of loss and the emotions that follow Jan Allison May 19, 2018 at 2:52 PM thanks Chris:-) hugs Jan xx

Tom Cunningham May 19, 2018 at 2:34 PM A very emotional write Jan, a tragic story captured in verse. Good luck. Tom. Jan Allison May 19, 2018 at 2:37 PM Thanks Tom I would have preferred to write happy today but I never know what my muse will come up with next:-) hugs jan xx

Joseph May May 19, 2018 at 1:55 PM So sad Jan...Very nicely expressed.. Jan Allison May 19, 2018 at 1:59 PM Thanks Joseph:-) It is an emotive subject and I found it quite difficult to write:-( hugs jan xx

Heidi Sands May 19, 2018 at 1:06 PM You have done so well with this for the contest Jan. A sad, well written, poem :) Jan Allison May 19, 2018 at 1:07 PM Thanks Heidi, am thankful its a fiction poem I never know where my muse will take me:-) hugs jan xx

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