Akkina Downing Poet Free verse

No Sunset In the Rain

It’s quarter after six, Friday evening. He  thought with a smile, besides the rain, everything is looking great. Table set beautifully just for two. Dinner looks delicious and minutes away to be served. 

Annoyingly he hears his cellphone pings. 
Seeing the name of the sender, he smiles and swipes to read it. Message read, RAIN CHECK, NO SUNSET IN THE RAIN. Instantly the smile fade and his heart sank.

He can hear the rain beating down on the roof, but too numb to move. Dinner is now left untouched. Disappointment weighs him down, yet again. 

Alone again and much to ponder.
What is really us? Life doesn’t wait for no one. The rain falls whether you like it or not, sunset or not. The daily excuses are worn off. 

At last, he sends her a reply that says, RAIN CHECK DENIED, I don’t need this anymore than you do. We are two different souls, we don’t speak the same language of love. Goodbye! 

He packs his bags and drives away in the 
NO SUNSET IN THE RAIN. 



Akkina 
8/25/23

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Aysha Nuwas October 1, 2023 at 4:17 PM Very sad, I love how you expressed this, beautiful poem :)

Anitha Jayasankar September 30, 2023 at 4:58 AM "Two different souls"...not meant to be together...how well you have expressed the heartbreak...Such signs of love, not genuine, the earlier they are seen, the better...I wish and hope he meets his true soul mate soon. Hope you are doing great dear sweet Kina...Hugs...~ Ani

Joseph May September 17, 2023 at 5:49 AM The promise of a romantic dinner for two, fades away in the rain, Very nicely penned Akkina

Charles Messina September 13, 2023 at 4:49 AM I've been there before... "No sunset in the rain" is not a happy place. But there is a rainbow waiting to show its colors that will usually in time show its face :) Hoping your brother will find it soon. Great write, Akkina. Hugs Charlie Akkina Downing September 13, 2023 at 10:21 AM Hi Charlie, thank you for coming by my friend. Always appreciate your feedback :)

I Am Anaya September 12, 2023 at 11:15 AM Through rain or shine, Akkina. Many who love make it work, without being affected by the weather or other circumstances. Something to ponder on; what about lovers who live in the snowy parts of the world?? Aha. From start to finish you had me glued! More please sequel. ;) Akkina Downing September 13, 2023 at 10:12 AM You made me smile, beautiful Anaya :)

Paul Callus September 11, 2023 at 6:59 AM This is so sad, Akkina. It takes two to tango; if one opts out, then that's it :( I suppose that a 'goodbye' was inevitable...) When the persons involved do not speak the same language of love it's useless to keep hoping... Regards // paul Akkina Downing September 11, 2023 at 7:49 PM Hey Paul, thanks for your kind feedback my friend… Hugs ~

Lisa Ricci September 10, 2023 at 2:51 AM Hello Akkina. Good Morning. I absolutely love the title to which is wonderful and to which you did not stray. You told this moment in time with clarity and emotion. We readers through your words were looking on as this unfolded. Thank you for sharing your writing talent. Have a wonderful day. Blessings (smile) Akkina Downing September 10, 2023 at 5:02 PM Lisa, thank you so much for your lovely feedback. Made me smile a big one. ^_^

Hiya Sharma September 7, 2023 at 3:49 AM This whirled my soul in melancholic dimensions of heartbreak and ache, making my heart to bleed jn oscillating notes of vulnerability.. Such a poignant write and you've carved this is a very captivating, storytelling way.. "No sunset in the rain" This sounds so profound and breathtaking to me, wow.. You're such a gorgeous artist.. Loved reading this piece! Akkina Downing September 7, 2023 at 10:09 PM Wow, Hiya, what a stunning feedback! Thank you so very much dear, I truly appreciate, and you just made me smile a big one ; )

Susan Ashley September 5, 2023 at 6:05 PM Dearest Kina, your golden pen spills heartbreaking ink upon the bittersweet page. Your emotive imagery reaches deeply into my heart, and your radiant heart shines with the beauty of empathy. You are no less than fabulous, my sweet sizzle sista! Warmest wishes, love and hugs.. ~Susan Akkina Downing September 5, 2023 at 7:55 PM Sue my sizzle poetess sista, you gave such poetic feedback that just lights up my whole tired face. :) Thank always, and I’ll be visiting your page real soon. All my love… Kina

Charlotte Puddifoot September 3, 2023 at 8:10 AM hmm yes, kick her to the kerb! i like the way you've written this - a gritty piece rooted in reality Akkina Downing September 4, 2023 at 8:40 PM Lol @ kick her to the kerb. Good one, Charlotte :)

Yann Rolland August 31, 2023 at 1:59 PM well written, and a sensitive message for all kind of lovers, we have to understand such metaphors, great reading, bravo Akkina Downing August 31, 2023 at 4:42 PM Thank you, yann, for your lovely feedback. :)

Ink Empress August 31, 2023 at 9:27 AM You are such a talented and creative storyteller. I absolutely loved this, and felt what youve conveyed here in such a profound manner. And i really love that title, no sunset in the rain. So creative and artistic. And you are right time waits for no one, and its now or never. And the metaphorical way you’ve delivered this is so good. The opening is so lyrical too . Sending you light always Akkina Downing August 31, 2023 at 4:42 PM Hi Inky, thank you so much for this beautiful comment. Just made me smile :)

Joseph May August 30, 2023 at 9:02 AM it was the sunset of their relationship, Very nicely penned Akkina Akkina Downing August 30, 2023 at 6:41 PM Great feedback, Joseph. Thank you :)

Heidi Sands August 30, 2023 at 5:35 AM Wow. This captured me as I read it. I could feel it. Well written. Great story :) Akkina Downing August 30, 2023 at 6:40 PM Heidi, your lovely comment made me smile :) Thank you.

Paula Goldsmith August 29, 2023 at 12:20 PM An amazing write/story. So True... "Love It" Have a blessed day writing away........................ Akkina Downing August 29, 2023 at 8:18 PM Paula, you made me smile with your lovely comment. Thank you :)

Andrea Dietrich August 29, 2023 at 6:32 AM wow, what a great metaphor for a guy stood up. So creative and fun to read. Akkina Downing August 29, 2023 at 8:18 PM Awe, thank you so much, Andrea

Anne-Lise Andresen August 29, 2023 at 6:13 AM - A story told beautifully but sadly, Akkina - hugs Akkina Downing August 29, 2023 at 8:16 PM I thank you, Anne-Lise :) hugs ~

Judy Ball August 28, 2023 at 10:48 PM WoW! Such a sad story. Beautifully written with great emotion. Perfect description. I could see the room perfectly set with firelight and candles on the table in preparation for a romantic evening. The the phone call and the crest fallen man. Nicely done. Left me asking, "And Then What Happened?" God Bless, JB Akkina Downing September 6, 2023 at 7:57 PM Judy, I absolutely appreciate your feedback. Thank you so very much :)

Silent One August 28, 2023 at 2:24 AM Hmmm... You got me thinking, you know what I am like... interesting analogy or is it a true reflection of something personal you are around... You wrote it very well and its context is something so many will interpret in their own way.. Its so nice to see you writing and posting again. this is a bit different to your normal style, but I enjoyed reading it.. Akkina Downing August 28, 2023 at 4:50 PM Hey you, :) Yeah, I wasn’t too happy writing this. But it also help me find peace in another way. I can handle my own pain, but it pains me more to see my brother go through it… I will try to write more. But I really do love to read more than anything. I just love my books :)

Christina Bowring August 28, 2023 at 1:18 AM Loved this verse Akkina. So many can relate to it. Someone very close to me said that exact statement ‘rain check’ once regarding my birthday and I thought no! My birthday will come and go regardless of you! Letting go of a loved one, a relationship, is incredibly hard but sometimes you just have to. March forward - eyes to the sun! Blessings to you. Akkina Downing August 28, 2023 at 4:38 PM Christina, thank you so much this lovely comment. I appreciate it, and blessings to you too. Hugs~ Akkina

Sotto Poet August 27, 2023 at 7:20 AM This story is an absolute delight, filled with the promise of a beautiful conclusion. In a world where time is fleeting, it reminds us of the importance of everlasting love. When two souls choose to intertwine, their hearts beat as one, their lives become intertwined, and their love knows no bounds. Akkina, your poetic words truly ignite contemplation and emotion. Akkina Downing August 27, 2023 at 8:25 PM Sotto, thank you so much for your beautiful comment. I appreciate it :)

David Fisher August 26, 2023 at 5:54 PM Such an enjoyable story with a start to a happy ending. Love the line 'Rain Check Denied'. No arguing with that.! Akkina Downing August 27, 2023 at 7:29 PM Thank you kindly, David :)

Bill Baker August 26, 2023 at 1:36 PM Adults making adult decisions. Each has a right to be who they are, if they're not compatible it's best the move on as soon as it's known. Life is too short and Love relationships need to be forever; it will be forever if two decide to become one heart, one life and one Love. Thought provoking poetry, Akkina. Have a great weekend, my friend. Bill Akkina Downing August 26, 2023 at 2:19 PM Yes, I was glad he came to his senses and go out. Thank you so much dear friend. :)

Vijay Pandit August 26, 2023 at 5:27 AM Some relationships are just not meant to be--as you so wonderfully convey, Akkina, in this story of love and break up. He was right to pack his back. There is another sunset in the new town. I hear the message of your story my friend. Akkina Downing August 26, 2023 at 2:09 PM Hope he will. He’s such a good loving and caring young man, and I just want the best of happiness for him. My brother. Thank you my friend :)

Arlo Parker August 25, 2023 at 9:39 PM Make your own sunsets!!! :o) Akkina Downing August 26, 2023 at 2:06 PM Thank you, Ario :)