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No Sunset In the Rain

It’s quarter after six, Friday evening. He thought with a smile, besides the rain, everything is looking great. Table set beautifully just for two. Dinner looks delicious and minutes away to be served. Annoyingly he hears his cellphone pings. Seeing the name of the sender, he smiles and swipes to read it. Message read, RAIN CHECK, NO SUNSET IN THE RAIN. Instantly the smile fade and his heart sank. He can hear the rain beating down on the roof, but too numb to move. Dinner is now left untouched. Disappointment weighs him down, yet again. Alone again and much to ponder. What is really us? Life doesn’t wait for no one. The rain falls whether you like it or not, sunset or not. The daily excuses are worn off. At last, he sends her a reply that says, RAIN CHECK DENIED, I don’t need this anymore than you do. We are two different souls, we don’t speak the same language of love. Goodbye! He packs his bags and drives away in the NO SUNSET IN THE RAIN. Akkina 8/25/23

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Aysha Nuwas

Date: 10/1/2023 4:17:00 PM

Very sad, I love how you expressed this, beautiful poem :)

Anitha Jayasankar

Date: 9/30/2023 4:58:00 AM

"Two different souls"...not meant to be together...how well you have expressed the heartbreak...Such signs of love, not genuine, the earlier they are seen, the better...I wish and hope he meets his true soul mate soon. Hope you are doing great dear sweet Kina...Hugs...~ Ani

Joseph May

Date: 9/17/2023 5:49:00 AM

The promise of a romantic dinner for two, fades away in the rain, Very nicely penned Akkina

Charles Messina

Date: 9/13/2023 4:49:00 AM

I've been there before... "No sunset in the rain" is not a happy place. But there is a rainbow waiting to show its colors that will usually in time show its face :) Hoping your brother will find it soon. Great write, Akkina. Hugs Charlie

Akkina Downing
Date: 9/13/2023 10:21:00 AM

Hi Charlie, thank you for coming by my friend. Always appreciate your feedback :)

I Am Anaya

Date: 9/12/2023 11:15:00 AM

Through rain or shine, Akkina. Many who love make it work, without being affected by the weather or other circumstances. Something to ponder on; what about lovers who live in the snowy parts of the world?? Aha. From start to finish you had me glued! More please sequel. ;)

Akkina Downing
Date: 9/13/2023 10:12:00 AM

You made me smile, beautiful Anaya :)

Paul Callus

Date: 9/11/2023 6:59:00 AM

This is so sad, Akkina. It takes two to tango; if one opts out, then that's it :( I suppose that a 'goodbye' was inevitable...) When the persons involved do not speak the same language of love it's useless to keep hoping... Regards // paul

Akkina Downing
Date: 9/11/2023 7:49:00 PM

Hey Paul, thanks for your kind feedback my friend… Hugs ~

Lisa Ricci

Date: 9/10/2023 2:51:00 AM

Hello Akkina. Good Morning. I absolutely love the title to which is wonderful and to which you did not stray. You told this moment in time with clarity and emotion. We readers through your words were looking on as this unfolded. Thank you for sharing your writing talent. Have a wonderful day. Blessings (smile)

Akkina Downing
Date: 9/10/2023 5:02:00 PM

Lisa, thank you so much for your lovely feedback. Made me smile a big one. ^_^

Hiya Sharma

Date: 9/7/2023 3:49:00 AM

This whirled my soul in melancholic dimensions of heartbreak and ache, making my heart to bleed jn oscillating notes of vulnerability.. Such a poignant write and you've carved this is a very captivating, storytelling way.. "No sunset in the rain" This sounds so profound and breathtaking to me, wow.. You're such a gorgeous artist.. Loved reading this piece!

Akkina Downing
Date: 9/7/2023 10:09:00 PM

Wow, Hiya, what a stunning feedback! Thank you so very much dear, I truly appreciate, and you just made me smile a big one ; )

Susan Ashley

Date: 9/5/2023 6:05:00 PM

Dearest Kina, your golden pen spills heartbreaking ink upon the bittersweet page. Your emotive imagery reaches deeply into my heart, and your radiant heart shines with the beauty of empathy. You are no less than fabulous, my sweet sizzle sista! Warmest wishes, love and hugs.. ~Susan

Akkina Downing
Date: 9/5/2023 7:55:00 PM

Sue my sizzle poetess sista, you gave such poetic feedback that just lights up my whole tired face. :) Thank always, and I’ll be visiting your page real soon. All my love… Kina

Charlotte Puddifoot

Date: 9/3/2023 8:10:00 AM

hmm yes, kick her to the kerb! i like the way you've written this - a gritty piece rooted in reality

Akkina Downing
Date: 9/4/2023 8:40:00 PM

Lol @ kick her to the kerb. Good one, Charlotte :)

Yann Rolland

Date: 8/31/2023 1:59:00 PM

well written, and a sensitive message for all kind of lovers, we have to understand such metaphors, great reading, bravo

Akkina Downing
Date: 8/31/2023 4:42:00 PM

Thank you, yann, for your lovely feedback. :)

Ink Empress

Date: 8/31/2023 9:27:00 AM

You are such a talented and creative storyteller. I absolutely loved this, and felt what youve conveyed here in such a profound manner. And i really love that title, no sunset in the rain. So creative and artistic. And you are right time waits for no one, and its now or never. And the metaphorical way you’ve delivered this is so good. The opening is so lyrical too . Sending you light always

Akkina Downing
Date: 8/31/2023 4:42:00 PM

Hi Inky, thank you so much for this beautiful comment. Just made me smile :)

Joseph May

Date: 8/30/2023 9:02:00 AM

it was the sunset of their relationship, Very nicely penned Akkina

Akkina Downing
Date: 8/30/2023 6:41:00 PM

Great feedback, Joseph. Thank you :)

Heidi Sands

Date: 8/30/2023 5:35:00 AM

Wow. This captured me as I read it. I could feel it. Well written. Great story :)

Akkina Downing
Date: 8/30/2023 6:40:00 PM

Heidi, your lovely comment made me smile :) Thank you.

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 8/29/2023 12:20:00 PM

An amazing write/story. So True... "Love It" Have a blessed day writing away........................

Akkina Downing
Date: 8/29/2023 8:18:00 PM

Paula, you made me smile with your lovely comment. Thank you :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/29/2023 6:32:00 AM

wow, what a great metaphor for a guy stood up. So creative and fun to read.

Akkina Downing
Date: 8/29/2023 8:18:00 PM

Awe, thank you so much, Andrea

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 8/29/2023 6:13:00 AM

- A story told beautifully but sadly, Akkina - hugs

Akkina Downing
Date: 8/29/2023 8:16:00 PM

I thank you, Anne-Lise :) hugs ~

Judy Ball

Date: 8/28/2023 10:48:00 PM

WoW! Such a sad story. Beautifully written with great emotion. Perfect description. I could see the room perfectly set with firelight and candles on the table in preparation for a romantic evening. The the phone call and the crest fallen man. Nicely done. Left me asking, "And Then What Happened?" God Bless, JB

Akkina Downing
Date: 9/6/2023 7:57:00 PM

Judy, I absolutely appreciate your feedback. Thank you so very much :)

Silent One

Date: 8/28/2023 2:24:00 AM

Hmmm... You got me thinking, you know what I am like... interesting analogy or is it a true reflection of something personal you are around... You wrote it very well and its context is something so many will interpret in their own way.. Its so nice to see you writing and posting again. this is a bit different to your normal style, but I enjoyed reading it..

Akkina Downing
Date: 8/28/2023 4:50:00 PM

Hey you, :) Yeah, I wasn’t too happy writing this. But it also help me find peace in another way. I can handle my own pain, but it pains me more to see my brother go through it… I will try to write more. But I really do love to read more than anything. I just love my books :)

Christina Bowring

Date: 8/28/2023 1:18:00 AM

Loved this verse Akkina. So many can relate to it. Someone very close to me said that exact statement ‘rain check’ once regarding my birthday and I thought no! My birthday will come and go regardless of you! Letting go of a loved one, a relationship, is incredibly hard but sometimes you just have to. March forward - eyes to the sun! Blessings to you.

Akkina Downing
Date: 8/28/2023 4:38:00 PM

Christina, thank you so much this lovely comment. I appreciate it, and blessings to you too. Hugs~ Akkina

Sotto Poet

Date: 8/27/2023 7:20:00 AM

This story is an absolute delight, filled with the promise of a beautiful conclusion. In a world where time is fleeting, it reminds us of the importance of everlasting love. When two souls choose to intertwine, their hearts beat as one, their lives become intertwined, and their love knows no bounds. Akkina, your poetic words truly ignite contemplation and emotion.

Akkina Downing
Date: 8/27/2023 8:25:00 PM

Sotto, thank you so much for your beautiful comment. I appreciate it :)

David Fisher

Date: 8/26/2023 5:54:00 PM

Such an enjoyable story with a start to a happy ending. Love the line 'Rain Check Denied'. No arguing with that.!

Akkina Downing
Date: 8/27/2023 7:29:00 PM

Thank you kindly, David :)

Bill Baker

Date: 8/26/2023 1:36:00 PM

Adults making adult decisions. Each has a right to be who they are, if they're not compatible it's best the move on as soon as it's known. Life is too short and Love relationships need to be forever; it will be forever if two decide to become one heart, one life and one Love. Thought provoking poetry, Akkina. Have a great weekend, my friend. Bill

Akkina Downing
Date: 8/26/2023 2:19:00 PM

Yes, I was glad he came to his senses and go out. Thank you so much dear friend. :)

Tom Woody

Date: 8/26/2023 5:39:00 AM

Awww sad end to what appears to be a non-existent relationship. Both need to be free to search for that special someone, their Dreamlove. So glad you're writing again akkina

Akkina Downing
Date: 8/26/2023 2:14:00 PM

He was in love with someone who was just using him for materials. I think he’s a bit hurt now but I hope he will meet the ONE. His DREAMLOVE :) Thank you, Tom. Just been so busy but I’ll try to write more :)

Vijay Pandit

Date: 8/26/2023 5:27:00 AM

Some relationships are just not meant to be--as you so wonderfully convey, Akkina, in this story of love and break up. He was right to pack his back. There is another sunset in the new town. I hear the message of your story my friend.

Akkina Downing
Date: 8/26/2023 2:09:00 PM

Hope he will. He’s such a good loving and caring young man, and I just want the best of happiness for him. My brother. Thank you my friend :)