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when you let go of my hand
you let go of my heart

as I stumbled and crumbled
life seemed to have paused
silent screams
raged inside

but I was just numb

heart beating in slow motion
life became strange

and

i thought it would make sense 
when the pain subsided
but there is no limit
to how long we grieve

and they say
don't let them in
those crazy thoughts
but they echoed and echoed
until i lost my mind
and its worse
when alone 
haunted by
profound whispers

and

all I wanted
was an angel
to find me
to not give up on me

but nothing

and now
ive lost all faith
in humanity

and 

still im alone
but now drifitng
to a place
i don't want to be

yearning for oxygen

and

no one can catch me

because
when you let go of my hand
you let go of my heart

Simple Musings
Silent One
15 September 2017

Copyright © | Year Posted 2017




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Date: 4/4/2018 6:19:00 PM
I love the deep emotions you conveyed, penetrating the heart's core. Grief lingers on long after a loved one is gone. Nicely done!
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Date: 4/2/2018 8:25:00 PM
this poem pierce right through my soul. looking forward to reading more of your poems
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Date: 11/16/2017 8:17:00 PM
This hits home for me. It felt like you were sitting next to my lonely soul unnoticed to your presence while penning down the details of my sad world of grieving. Thank you and going to fave this one. And, mind if I share it? I'll wait for your answer of course... hugs and smiles
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Silent One
Date: 11/17/2017 2:08:00 AM
Glad you liked is... You can share if you wish..
Date: 10/23/2017 11:58:00 AM
Reading your poetry just makes me feel!!! I know all of these feelings by memory. "when you let go of my hand ... you let go of my heart" Just ... sooo beautiful!
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Date: 10/19/2017 5:47:00 AM
AHHH i love this one ! you have such a talent to put to words things that i found almost impossible to do!Wonderful read thanks for the share!
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Date: 10/11/2017 11:45:00 AM
I’m in love with this poem :)
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Date: 9/26/2017 6:48:00 AM
You have beautifully described epic pain and sorrow of having lost a loved one my friend. A process, that most oft only time and greater light lessens. I relate to this one , as I still seek that light.. STILL SEARCH... same as I still seek to touch my mother's hand and kiss her face....... A FAV...
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Date: 9/21/2017 4:24:00 PM
P.S. You will have your "happy ending" next time.
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Date: 9/21/2017 4:22:00 PM
Wonderful write straight to my heart. S**t happens, my dear #1. You will have good days and bad days like the rest of us who "loved and lost". It's a hard road to travel but someday..."IT" will hit you and you will love again. It's in the stars.
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Date: 9/20/2017 12:54:00 PM
Oh, my gosh. Did your heart take up residence next to mine last night when I was remembering, grieving, letting the emotions come back one more time? So beautifully written, Silent One. I'm sure this poem has a universal appeal for all of us have lost someone and still cling to the memories. Amazing.
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Silent One
Date: 9/20/2017 4:26:00 PM
We never stop grieving.. We just learn to deal with it.. Thank you for your comment..
Date: 9/20/2017 10:34:00 AM
Beautiful poem read from you my dear lovely friend. Nothing is permanent, everything changes in time, that is our fate of human beings. You have expressed a nice concept about what is going on. Loved always my lovely dear friend, bl
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Date: 9/18/2017 10:11:00 AM
While grief may either subside or intensify with time, there is simply no limit to how long we grieve. My friend, I am almost at a loss for words - this is such an incredible write! You continue to amaze and inspire me! Love and hugs. Pandita
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Date: 9/18/2017 7:24:00 AM
This is great writing, Silent One, amazing:)
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Date: 9/17/2017 6:40:00 PM
I really like this one, Silent ONe. The way you ended it was very well done. Nothing worse than a poem that does not end the right way!
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Date: 9/17/2017 2:41:00 PM
There will come a day when our tears will be gone, and we won't grieve any longer. But until that day, as long as we have breath in us, we grieve for lost love. I think it's impossible. Your words grab my heartstrings, my sweet friend.
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Date: 9/17/2017 12:35:00 PM
Exquisite piece...
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Date: 9/17/2017 4:11:00 AM
Loss is not easy to cope with, and when we think that we're over the hill, there it appears again. The opening and closing lines are very effective. Regards // paul
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Date: 9/16/2017 8:07:00 PM
A rough loss, indeed. Great write, Silent!
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Date: 9/16/2017 4:56:00 PM
Your palm so aptly describes the pain of heartache. So true! : )
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Date: 9/16/2017 12:28:00 PM
Sadness eloquently painted. I hope your faith in humanity is restored.
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Date: 9/16/2017 4:44:00 AM
Heartbreaking. The line: "when you let go of my hand you let go of my heart." is especially poignant. A feeling whose imprint on our heart is eternal. Beautifully sad writing with a tenderness that is exquisitely conveyed. a fave
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Date: 9/16/2017 4:05:00 AM
This is so very true, I have struggled with this...I just don't forget,,,maybe because in some of my worst losses in life I have found some of the deepest love and lessons that brought me growth, and those reminders brought me to be more loving n sensitive to the next,,,I think there's always a reason, a bigger picture in the process
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Date: 9/16/2017 3:16:00 AM
So you lost faith in humanity? Can't believe that though I'm getting nearer that situation.
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Date: 9/16/2017 12:26:00 AM
Simple Musings these? More like Profound Amazing Musings I would think. A somewhat tragic and painful experience that you have described so well here, you have the readers hurting with you. You have an extraordinary talent.I think that this would make an excellent song. A fave with me....Maria
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Date: 9/15/2017 9:11:00 PM
Great piece on tragic emotions. Profound imagery into your feelings and words.
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