Home » Poems » Richard Lamoureux » No Grace

No Grace

The lightning, it was over-bright White teeth in snarl, she had no grace, as she tossed his head, from great height! The lightning it was over-bright, for it revealed, that ghostly sight, smashed bones protruding from his face! The lightning, it was over-bright. White teeth in snarl, she had no grace... For Julia Ward's Triolet Contest Written June 21, 2016

Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem.

Please Login to post a comment

J.W. Earnings

Date: 12/28/2016 8:50:00 AM

Ooh dark and awesome poem!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 12/28/2016 9:51:00 AM

;0)

Timothy Hicks

Date: 6/24/2016 12:58:00 PM

Wow ... that 6th line really hits you like a ton of bricks. Could be the revelation of a murder scene or who knows what else. A really powerful triolet, Richard.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/24/2016 6:59:00 PM

Thanks Timothy, I'm a novice when it comes to this form.

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 6/24/2016 10:41:00 AM

OMG Triolet, Richard! Eerie yet fascinating! Good luck, you need it! Haha!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/24/2016 10:52:00 AM

Thanks, I am not expecting to be on the list. I did however enjoy the challenge of writing this one.

Robert Lindley

Date: 6/23/2016 4:56:00 PM

A Triolet in dark! Very creative and well written...A7

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/24/2016 7:18:00 AM

Thanks Robert, much appreciated.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 6/23/2016 11:39:00 AM

pinching yet delightful piece, rich... you shine!..huggs

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/24/2016 7:19:00 AM

Hugs and thanks Nette.

Becca Teagan

Date: 6/23/2016 9:59:00 AM

ouch! This is dark! Good job!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/24/2016 7:19:00 AM

Thanks Becca.;0)

Casarah Nance

Date: 6/23/2016 9:02:00 AM

Wow, this was awesome. You paint outside your canvas and still make art! Always impressive and unique, I dig the way you think ;)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/23/2016 9:09:00 AM

Hi Casarah, I feel the same about your writing. Hugs Rick.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/22/2016 8:53:00 PM

YEs, that one is sinister!! You knew this contest, Richard. Why did you ask me what contest mine was entered into? haha

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/23/2016 12:48:00 AM

At the time I didn't know, but now that I do, what you said makes sense. I too am not on the Christmas card list.

D.W. Rodgers

Date: 6/22/2016 11:24:00 AM

Great triolet, good luck in the contest

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/23/2016 12:49:00 AM

Thanks Dave.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 6/22/2016 9:28:00 AM

WOW! Richard...didn't know you had this side in you! Mesmerizing. Good luck, dear. FYI...I have an upcoming episode on YOU. I've shared the poem you've written for me....on Rhymes of the Times. I'll let you know when it's up on youtube. Hugs...and thanks for your comment on Salieri Soliloquy. I knew you'd understand.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/22/2016 9:55:00 AM

Thanks, it was funworking with a form that I have little experience with. I look forward to your next episode, hugs Rick.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 6/22/2016 9:05:00 AM

- Powerful lines, great written Richard - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/22/2016 9:08:00 AM

Thanks for being the first to comment. Hugs back to you Anne-Lise.